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					      Approaching Academic Writing Step-wise through
                  Computer Networking

                                                                  Judy Yoneoka


                                    Abstract
        The present paper describes various aspects of the work involved and
results of step - by - step thesis instruction performed via computer network
and by hand. Two computer networked courses were required to select topics,
prepare an outline and bibliography, write a first draft, receive content editing
and language editing comments and implement them into their reports via
network. Compared with the work turned in on paper by the control courses,
the outlines tended to be of a higher quality, but the resulting papers tended to
be shorter. Many time delays due to host computer malfunction occurred, which
may have contributed to the lack of length of the papers. In spite of these
delays, both groups completed their tasks in the same time frame, due to the
fact that the final step of reinputting language errors was not necessary for the
networked courses.


1. Introduction
        The orthodox pattern of composition for most university courses is that
of requiring report after report, each graded separately and provided with
comments which rarely give the student any direct clues as to how to improve
their basic skills in researching and organizing ideas.
        This is especially true in the case of students in Japan, who rarely
receive formal instruction in prewriting, writing and postwriting processes in
English courses. This lack of instruction shows up especially when students
participate in study abroad programs at foreign universities, which usually
assume such basic writing skills as prerequisite. Moreover, it has been found
(Santos, 1988 p. 85) that papers of foreign students are usually judged more
harshly in terms of their content and structure rather than their correctness in
terms of English, with the conclusion that "nonnative-speaking students need
to improve their skills in the areas that most directly affect content, such as
organizing, developing and supporting their ideas and argument." This would
seem to emphasize the necessity of greater concentration on presentation and
organization skills (and less concentration on grammar and sentence-level
composition) than is presently the case in many English composition courses in
Japan.


2. Process writing vs. contrastive rhetoric in the present study
         Santos continues by suggesting that a process approach would best
suit the needs of these students. The process approach to writing (Zamel, 1982)
is a prevalent TESL composition theory which places emphasis not on the
product itself, but rather on imparting the processes involved in achieving the
product in order to improve results. Specifically, it advocates instruction in
processes related to pre-writing such as brainstorming, listing, and organizing,
as well as those related to post-writing and the actual writing process itself.
         Indeed, the ideals of this theory would be greatly suited for teaching
academic-style composition in Japan, but for two difficulties: l) process writing
is designed more for freestyle composition rather than academic treatises, and
therefore provides no guidelines for teaching either research and note-taking
skills or formal structure, and 2) the outline, which would seem to be the most
valuable tool for Japanese students to learn how to structure academic style
reports, is downplayed in process writing. In fact, outlines are actually rejected
in favor of imitation of the actual writing styles of skilled native speakers, who
tend to begin writing without formalizing their thoughts, and come up with
their structure cyclically (through a series of brainstorming-organizing-writing
cycles) rather than linearly. As Zamel (1982, p. 197) puts it, "requiring students
to formulate their ideas beforehand, to elaborate upon them by using some
prescribed rhetorical framework and to submit these written products for
grading purposes seems to ignore every-thing we have learned about the
process." Because of the two difficulties mentioned above, a process theory type
pattern of instruction was not used in this course program. On the other hand,
the traditional composition pattern described in the introduction does not seem
to do the trick for Japanese students either . Then, what type of instruction
program would best fit the needs of these students?
         Contrastive rhetoric studies (Kaplan, 1966, 1983, Leki 1991) have
suggested that different cultures show different rhetorical styles. Aspects of the
Japanese composition style in particular have been documented by Hinds. For
example, regarding the difference in emphasis on unity, he writes (1987, p.
146):
         “For English readers, unity is important because readers expect and
require landmarks along the way.... In Japanese, on the other hand, the
landmarks may be absent or attenuated since it is the reader's responsibility to
determine the relationship between any one part of the essay and the essay as
a whole."
          In view of such differences in English and Japanese composition style
and structure, “ESL teachers have a responsibility to teach the expectations of
the English audience to L2 writers ... our students' texts will be easier for their
professors to read if the writers show the kind of audience awareness that
comes from knowing what the rhetorical expectations of the readers are." (Leki,
p. 138)
          The processes used in the course program described below were
designed with this "responsibility to teach the expectations of the English
audience to L2 writers" in mind. Although they are not directly related to those
in vogue in the process theory, some are likewise intended to bridge gaps in
students' prewriting task abilities, especially with respect to judging
appropriate topics for research papers. On the other hand, more traditional
methods are employed to teach students how to make use of library resources
efficiently, and to write with the clear and explicit structure which will be
expected by most American instructors.


3. Motivation for computer networking
          In a fanciful introduction to his bibliography of computer-related
works, Susser (1987) relates a story of Jiro Yamada, a Japanese university
student who does all of the processes involved in composing a report for his
composition class using a computer atop his kotatsu. His professor receives,
corrects, and resends the report fully by computer as well. Although a fantasy,
as pointed out by Susser, this story could be reality even today using existing
technology. And as it may well become a primary modus operandi of education
in the future, introduction of students to technology of this nature can only be
beneficial in the long run.
          On a realtime scientific level, a wide-scale meta-analysis of
examination results reported in 99 comparative studies of college-level CBE
(computer based-education courses) and conventional ones was performed by
Kulik and Kulik (1986). There, the following results were described (p. 88):
          "In 77 of the 99 studies, the students in the CBE class had the higher
examination average ... The difference in examination performance of CBE and
control students was reported to be significant in 22 studies. In 21 of the 22
cases, the significant difference favored the CBE class, whereas only one study
favored conventional teaching. Overall, these box-score results favor CBE."
        The results were found to vary depending on the course content, in
that positive effects of using computer-based instruction was significantly
higher in humanity-based CBE courses than in scientific ones. Based on these
results, it was hoped that the implementation of a computer-based style of
teaching English composition would produce some positive effects in
comparison with non-CBE courses.
        Coinciding neatly with the planning stages of the course program to be
described was the establishment of the MEROS university network, using a
UNIX-based host computer, at Kumamoto University of Commerce in 1991. All
first year students were required to buy personal computers and were taught
the basics of networking as well as word processing in their first semester. This
provided a group of students with a working background in the technological
side of the experiment, so that valuable class time would not be required for
computer-related explanations or demonstrations.
        Furthermore, development of an NEC computer version of “Family
Feud” by the author (see Yoneoka 1993, in Japanese) allowed for the use of
“Family Feud" as a basis for selection of research paper topics. This technique
has been successful both as a vehicle for imparting cultural differences between
the US and Japan, and for focusing students' concentration on specific
differences providing themes appropriate for research. This is because the use
of a particular question as a springboard was found to encourage the students
to brainstorm about the ways in which cultural differences were reflected
through its answers, and to actively wonder about the reasons behind those
differences (corresponding to asking oneself “why" about a topic, as in
process-writing style invention exercises).


4. The project
        Students in 5 university courses (2 freshman general English, I
freshman English conversation, 2 sophomore English expression courses) and 2
junior-college freshmen English conversation courses were required to produce
one academic style paper over the course of one year. (Keep in mind that the
main content of the courses was NOT writing but conversation-oriented).
Composition techniques and guidelines for producing the paper were taught in
sections as shown in Figure 1, and each will be discussed separately below.
        The 2 freshman general English courses (hereafter referred to as CBE
courses) were expected to use computer networking exclusively for the
completion of their projects, whereas the control classes did all of their work by
hand, with the exception of the final draft of the report, for which word
processing was required. There was a total of 130 students in the general
English courses, as compared with an approximate total of 150 students in the
other 5 courses combined. Although the overall number of students in the two
groups was similar, the relative course sizes (65 in the 1st group compared with
between 15-50 in the second) is a factor which could have influenced the results
and should be kept in mind.




        The purpose of the project was to investigate the following questions:
        a.   What effects would the requirement of working through a
             computer network have on English composition education and on
             the quantity/quality of the reports?
        b.   What are the advantages/disadvantages of using a computer
             network for English composition?


4.1. Theme / Topic selection.
        According to Raimes (1991), a process-centered approach requires
students to choose their own topics, as opposed to a traditional form-oriented
approach in which topics are assigned by the teacher. In the present project, a
compromise between the two approaches was used. A total of 100 questions
from the game show “Family Feud" (see Yoneoka 1993, in Japanese) were
introduced to the students via computer game. These served to suggest specific
Japanese, US or contrastive culture-oriented topics which could be easily
recognized and researched. After one of the questions was selected by a student
(in a first-come, first-serve manner) it was examined in terms of the cultural
differences and/or similarities it represented. Often, one question could lead to
several different topics. For example, the question “What is the first thing you
would get for a trip to Europe?" (responses: 1. passport, 2. tickets, 3. luggage, 4,
camera, 5. shots) prompted essays on topics as varied as comparative
immigration procedures, travel expenses in various countries, dangers involved
in immunizations, and even the gun control issue in America, due to a
misunderstanding of the word “shot."


4.2. Research and outlining.
         Next, a sample outline and bibliography was distributed and students
were instructed to complete an outline of their own based on their selected
themes. Students were given minimal instruction on acceptable types of
references, where to find them and how to look for them, as well as pointers on
format of the bibliography. The outlines were graded by section using a
10-point scale as follows:
         Introduction - 2 points
         Body - 4 points = 10 points
         Conclusion - 2 points
         Bibliography - 2 points
         Students were requested to include 5 references in order to receive the
full 2-point credit for bibliography.
         The outline and bibliography were considered to reflect the result of
work involved in the prewriting stages. Since this stage is often lacking in
Japanese composition instruction (and also the most important in terms of
learning to write in an academic-style format) it was required that the students
“pass" this stage before moving on to the actual writing of the paper. To do this,
they had to receive a total of 8 or more of the 10 points possible; otherwise, they
were required to rewrite and resubmit their work.
         One problem common to many students observed was the difficulty of
finding "information to fit the theme," pointing to the probability that they
considered the outline (content) to come first in a linear sense, and the research
to come second. This shows a general naiviete towards references, i, e. that any
kind of information can be found easily. In fact, several students included no
bibliography at all in their outline, and when requested to rewrite their
outlines to include the bibliography, were not easily able to revise their original
thoughts to correlate with the data available.


4. 3. Drafting.
         Another problem which seems to be endemic among Japanese
students is the lack of confidence regarding writing directly in English. No
matter how often told not to write a Japanese draft first and then translate it,
many students just cannot help putting their thoughts down first in Japanese.
This may lead to direct transfer of Japanese writing style, which comparative
rhetoricists such as Kaplan have found to differ from the linear, logic-oriented
style usually used in English.
         To make Japanese drafting as unattractive a choice as possible,
students in the computer courses were advised to do their drafting directly “0n
top of" their outlines, which were already in their word processors; constructing
paragraphs directly by “expanding" each item to include an introductory and
concluding sentence, as well as supporting their point in the body of the
paragraph. This provided the students with a more or less mechanical method
for developing their work in English, so that they did not have to resort to their
native language to come up with a structure.


4. 4. Content revision.
         After first drafts were submitted either by E-mail (CBE courses) or by
hand (control courses), they were reviewed for content and organization. This
consisted not only of addition/deletion of information and structural corrections,
but also of suggestions for refinement of the flow of ideas in the paper. Also, at
this stage many students had still not yet come up with appropriate titles for
their work, and thus were instructed to do so. For the computer based courses,
all of these comments were written IN JAPANESE and or set off by carats (> >)
in order to clearly distinguish the comments from the text (as would be done for
example by using a red pen on paper). In the control courses, comments were
also written in Japanese as much as possible for purposes of comparison, but
there were times when English was used as well.
           Upon receiving these comments, students were required to revise their
work in accordance with the comments and resubmit it. If they received their
projects back with further comments, this meant that they had not yet “passed"
the content revision stage and needed more work. If not, the papers were then
(and only then) subjected to a language revision.


4. 5. English revision.
           Originally, it was planned that all students would have a hand in
English revision through the use of available spelling/grammar checkers.
However this turned out to be impossible, due to the fact that there was no
such software at the university which could be used with the students' personal
computers. It would have been possible to transfer students' files to either a
Macintosh format or MS-DOS format for NEC to make use various spelling/
grammar checkers available for those machines, but lack of time (due to the
fact that the English revision draft due date was extended from 11/30 to 12/31
because of a series of computer breakdowns from 10127 to 12/2) made this plan
unfeasible.
           Therefore, all English-related corrections were done by the instructor
directly on the text submitted by the students. For the CBE courses, this
yielded the final work (unless there were parts which could still not be
understood or which were ambiguous and needed clarification), so there was no
need to submit a third draft. On the other hand, for the control courses, a third
draft (at this point word-processed) was required. Due to this fact, the two sets
of courses completed their work within the same general time frame, in spite of
the deadline setbacks due to computer breakdown for the network-based
classes.


5. Comparison of composing via computer network vs. paper
5. 1. Time related observations.
5. 1. 1. Computer literacy effect on meeting deadlines.
           Of the two CBE classes, class 1-4 tended to lag far behind class 1-7 in
general computer capability, both according to their data processing course
instructors and as judged subjectively by the author. This led to a remarkable
difference in ability to meet deadlines through the duration of the course. For
example, as can be seen in Fig. 2, only 56% of class 1-4 succeeded in meeting
the 5/31 deadline for topic selection, compared with 80% of class 1-7. The latter
class was able to meet the deadline almost as well as most of the control
courses (80% -90%), and indeed excelled the control classes in choosing topics
AHEAD of the deadline (22% of the class chose their topics a week or more
before 5/31 compared with 6% for the “fastest" control class). As the topics were
to be “reserved" on a first-come, first-serve basis, this points to the fact that for
the computer-1iterate class, reservation by computer was more easily
accessible than finding the teacher and reserving outside of class time for the
control classes.




5. 1. 2. Computer failure and deadline extension.
         In addition to failure to meet deadlines as reported above, mechanical
failure compounded the problem for computer-non-1iterate students. Several
times during the course, the network host computer suffered breakdowns,
resulting in forced extensions of deadlines for various steps in the composition
process. Figure 3 below shows the dates of host computer breakdown and the
various extensions implemented.
         In addition, according to a show of hands at the end of the course, over
1/3 of the students' personal computers had trouble at some time during the
year due to either mechanical or human operator error. These difficulties both
with the host computer and with their own personal computers led to
consider-able frustration on the part of many of the students and resulted in
even greater time delays in many cases.
5. 1. 3. Instructor time requirements.
         Although no exact measurements were taken of instructor time
required to process student work via computer vs. by hand, the following
subjective impressions can be mentioned.
         1) As the system upon which the Meros network is based does not
allow for continuous downloading or uploading of separate files, each file had to
be downloaded and uploaded one by one by hand. Although the time required
for each file was less than a minute for each operation, this added up to several
hours of time for the more than 100 students participating in the course.
         2) Due to computer difficulties, there was much time lost both in and
out of class both due to unsuccessful computer operation and for explanations
and consultations regarding those problems.
         3) On the other hand, the instructor time involved in correcting
English and making comments (especially in Japanese) on students' papers by
hand was longer as compared with using the word processor. It was found that
in one hour, approximately 8 papers could be corrected on computer, as
compared with an average of 6 papers by hand.
         4) The fact the CBE classes did not need to produce a third revision
(due to the fact that English corrections were made directly into the text file)
led to a well-received savings of time for both the instructor and the students at
the end of the school year.


5. 2. Educational-oriented observations
5. 2. 1. Quality of Evaluations
         In the present program, none of the students' work was graded except
for the preliminary outline, but this showed a marked difference in scores
between the CBE and control courses. Specifically, students who returned
outlines with computers showed a higher passing rate than those who did their
outlines by hand (see fig. 4).
         The percentage of students passing (gaining 8 points or better on)
their first outline was 44.83% for class 1-7 and 33.34% for class 1-4 vs. 24.51%
for the control classes. Part of the difference between the two CBE classes may
be accounted for by the relative computer illiteracy of class 1-4 (e.g. 16.67% of
the classes' outlines were not correctly received due to student error in




computer uploading, as compared to 8.62% for class 1-7) . On the other hand,
the relatively high passing rate of the CBE classes as compared with control
classes (in spite of computer error) may be attributed to two factors: 1) the
computer failure in May led to an extension of the deadline, giving the students
more time to prepare, and 2) the necessity of immediate word processing led
the students to take the assignment more seriously, and give it more thorough
consideration. It is also possible that the visual quality of word-processed
outlines as compared to handwritten ones could have led the evaluator to grade
the former more leniently, although this was consciously taken into
consideration at that time.


5. 2. 2. Word processing and report length
         Two beneficial side results for the CBE courses were that students
learned ways of utilizing their school network in courses other than data
processing, and were able to develop skills in English word processing.
         One of the purposes of this project was to note the effects that the
requirement of word processing from the beginning of the course would have on
the length of papers and on general English ability. Toward this end, the
number of words used in a representative sample (N = 15) of reports from both
computer courses was taken and compared with the same number of reports
from control courses, which were word processed at the final stage only. The
results were as follows:




        As can be clearly seen, the control groups' papers were an average of
more than 30 words longer than the more computer literate class, and almost
100 words longer than the less literate one. The difference between the
computer courses and control courses may be due to the fact that the lack of
word processing skills discouraged the students from developing their thoughts
as thoroughly as they would have done by hand. It is also likely that the CBE
course students may have followed their outlines more closely (having them
already in the computer) than their counterparts, so that they did not add in as
much additional information. A further possibility is that the relative lack of
time available to the CBE courses due to deadline setbacks related to host
computer failure led the students to write less.
        In addition, the difference between the two computer groups also
points to the fact that the more computer-wise class (which presumably had
better word processing skills) was able to produce longer works with the
computer.
        Perhaps the biggest disadvantage of using the computer in the present
project from an educational point of view was that the students didn't have the
chance to internalize the corrections of their English, either by reinputting and
rewriting incorporating corrections (as was necessary with the control classes)
or by using spelling/grammar checkers. As previously mentioned, this was
partially due to the fact that computer breakdown leading to deadline
extensions left no time at the end of the course.


5. 3. Communication/data management and retrieval.
        E-mail provided fast and easy communication between students who
had questions either on the course material or on computer operation.
Approximately 60 pieces of mail were received during the year. The following
are typical of the contents of such mail:
           何回やっても、家からは送信できないんです。
           リトライ回数が増えていくだけで、バイト数は0のままなんです。
           こういう場合はどうすればいいんですか?
           私のほうは間違ってないと思うんですけど。
(NO matter how often I try, I can't upload my report from my house. The
number of retries keeps going up, but the byte number stays at O. What should
I do? I don't think I'm doing anything wrong...)
           すみません、今度(11 月 27・28 日)に、商経学会の
           論文大会があり、その準備で、部室の経済事典が全部、
           貸出中になっています。それで、今の時点でわたしの英語の論文は
                   INTRODUCTION
           最初の出だしだけしかできあがっていません。
           とりあえず、その出だしの部分だけアップロードしますが、
           残りは最悪の場合、論文大会のあとになってしまいます。
(I'm sorry; all of the economics dictionaries in our club room are checked out
because we're preparing for an economics conference on 11/27-28. That's why at
this point I have only finished the introduction to my English essay. I'll upload
it, but the rest may have to wait until after the economics conference).
           Also several letters were recieved in English especially during the first
semester, but unfortunately were lost as a result of host computer hard disk
crashes.
           The automatic time/date data provided by the computer provided a
great help in managing, especially during the topic selection portion of the
course. In the control classes, there were times when students would leave
undated notes stating their preferred topic, and there was no way to settle
disputes as to who was “first" other than by lottery.
           In theory, courses using the computer should have had no need to ever
submit anything on paper, which would have led to a decrease in time spent in
organizing, arranging and shuffling pieces of work. Also, taking work home
would have been made more convenient since in the author's case, this means
competing with three small children (with crayons) and a dog for possession of
any stray piece of paper. In practice however, the extended periods of host
computer breakdown near the end of the course necessitated the submittal of
reports in paper and/or floppy disk form.


6. Conclusions
         In spite of poor conditions for comparison between the CBE and
control classes related to unplanned deadline extensions for the former, a few
tentative conclusions can be made from this project as follows: 1) A positive
effect on quality of outlines was noted with the CBE classes, especially with the
more computer-wise class; 2) on the other hand, a negative effect was noted on
average word length of the final essays from the CBE classes. This effect was
pronounced    within   the   two   CBE      classes   as   well,   with   the   more
computer-literate class producing essays of over 50 words longer than the
less-capable class.
         As for time-oriented differences observed, the frequent host computer
breakdowns led to a great increase in instructor time required for the CBE
classes. This included all time spent in communicating with the computer
center, relaying information and answering student questions in and out of
class, as well as unsuccessful entry attempts via modem. It is assumed that
this was true for the students as well as the instructor. In fact, it may well be
hypothesized that frustration related to the many delays contributed to the
negative effect observed on word length in the CBE classes as well.


AFTERWORD: CONSIDERATIONS FOR COMPUTER BASED PROJECTS
         The relative failure of the present project to proceed as planned is
directly related to the high computer breakdown rate; both for the host
computer and for individual computers. As this was the first year of full
network operation as well as the first year all students purchased their
particular brand of personal computer, this type of trouble was probably
unavoidable, but should have been foreseen.
         In this sense, the present stage of the multimedia era may be
compared to the early years of the automobile industry. If something went
wrong with a Model T, the driver had no other choice but to sit and wait, or
walk. Now however, there are busses and taxis, and Automobile Clubs. Support
for the automobile industry has evolved to the point that glitches do not
inconvenience the user in any major way.
         This will certainly become more and more true of computer technology
as well. There will probably come a day when networks will be able to provide a
range of data processing services. Companies providing backup computer
services will become routine. However, that day has not come yet, and the will
few decades of relatively unsupported Model T multimedia technology will
continue to produce frustrations. This must be taken into consideration when
planning a project of this sort.
         The circumstances which presented the unique opportunity for this
type of study (availability of university network and personal computers for all
students) will obviously not be duplicable at all universities, although the trend
will most certainly be towards this in the future.


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APPENDIX A. SAMPLE OUTLINE (ORIGINAL)
Ⅰ. INTRODUCTION
           A.    Name something in the house that usually takes at least two
                 people to move. -Refrigerator is #2 answer in USA.
           B.    You will find the refrigerator everywhere in our home ,but what
                 will it have the history of the refrigerator?


Ⅱ. BODY
           A.    The refrigerator had been into practical use since 1913 in
                 America.
           B.    The refrigerator stand on an electric and a gas one.


Ⅲ. CONCLUSION
           A. The refrigerator is our life cannot misse an object.


Introduction        2
Body                2
Conclusion          1
Bibliography        0
5/10
>>No bibliography! Needs more research.




APPENDIX B. SAMPLE OUTLINE (REVISED)
I.        INTRODUCTION
       A. Name something in the house that usually takes at least two people to
           move. -Refrigerator is #2 answer in USA.
       B. B. You will find the refrigerator everywhere in our home, but what will
           it have the history of the refrigerator?
       C. The Refrigerator cool food and it is apparatus that can keep food.


II.       BODY
       A. At first refrigerator was ice one and Most old one in Japan is used by
           in 720 A. D that Nintoku emperor discover a ice cave on lzumi' s
           mountain. But there are electric and gas refrigerator at present.
       B. The electric refrigerator had been into practical use since 1913 in
           America, 1930 in Japan.
       C. The electric refrigerator's principle is use air heat when liquid become
           air's condition. Generally it is used by furon gas.
       D. The gas electric's principle will explain. It heated cold ammonia water
           by gas burnner first of all, and separate ammonia or water. It use air
           heat when ammonia become air's condition.


III.      CONCLUSION
          A. The refrigerator is our life cannot misse an object.


BIBLIOGRAPHY
Nippon Daihyakkazensyo , Syougakukan, Aiga Testuo, p. 323-326.
Study OBUNSHA'S JAPANESE - ENGLISH DICTIONARY, Takahashi Gengi,
1985,0bunsha.
Int        2
Body       4
Con        1
Bib        1
8/10
> >Good! Needs more in conclusion, though.




APPENDIX C. SAMPLE REPORT (CONTENT-REVISED)
>>タイトル            //TITLE//


Ⅰ. INTRODUCTION
           Name something in the house that ususally takes at least two people
to move.- Refrigerator is #2 answer in USA. The Refrigerator cool food and it is
apparatus that can keep food.
           You will find the refrigerator everywhere in our home, but what will it
have the history of the refrigerator?


II. BODY
           At first refrigerater was ice one and Most old one in Japan is used by
in 720 A.D that Nintoku emperor discover a ice cave on Izumi's mountain > >
出典 //source//. But there are electric and gas refrigertor at present.
           The electric refrigerator had been into practical use since 1913 in
America, 1930 in Japan. >>出典 //source// The electric refrigerator's principle
is use air heat when liquid become air's condition .??? // I don't understand! //
Generally it is used by furon gas.
         The gas electric's principle will explain. It heated cold ammonia water
by gas burnner first of all, and separate ammonia or water. It use air heat when
ammonia become air's condition.


Ⅲ. CONCLUSION
         The refrigerator uses even in refrigerator cars and ships. We eat fresh
food, the refrigerator is our life cannot misse an object.


BIBLIOGRAPHY
Nippon Daihyakkazensyo, Syougakukan. Aiga Testuo, p.323-326.
Study OBUNSHA'S JAPANESE - ENGLISH DICTIONARY, Takahashi Gengi ,
1985,0bunsha.




APPENDIX       D.   SAMPLE      REPORT      (FINAL     VERSION.     ENGLISH       -
CORRECTED)
The History and Operation of the Refrigerator
         My question was "Name something in the house that usually takes at
least two people to move" to which Refrigerator was the #2 answer in the USA.
Nowadays you will find the refrigerator in almost every home. The refrigerator
not only cools food but it is indispensible for preserving food as well. What is
the history of the refrigerator? And how does this invention work?
         The first refrigerator was the "ice box", and it was literally that: a box
with ice in it. The oldest one in Japan was used in 720 A.D, when emperor
Nintoku discovered an ice cave on Izumi mountain (Nippon Daihyakka Zensyo).
It was in 1877 that an artifical ice box was made in Japan for the first time , in
Osaka.
         But there are electric and gas refrigerators at present_ The electric
refrigerator come into practical use in 1913 in America, and in 1930 in Japan.
(Nippon Daihyakka Zensyo)
         The electric refrigerator works on the principle of using the air heat
produced when liquid changes into air. Generally it uses freon gas. This
principle is as follows: Cold ammonia and water is heated by a gas burner first
of all, and then separated into ammonia and water. It uses air heat produced
when ammonia vaporizes (Nippon Daihyakkazen-syo). New electronic
refrigerators are being developed now.
           The refrigerator is used not only in the home, but everywhere; even in
refrigerator cars and on ships. Because we often eat fresh food, the refrigerator
is indispensible in our daily lives.


BIBLIOGRAPHY
Nippon Daihyakkazensyo, Syougakukan, Aiga Testuo, p.323-326.
Study OBUNSHA'S JAPANESE- ENGLISH DICTIONARY, Takahashi Gengi,
1985,0bunsha.
Webster's New World Dictionary, VICTORIA NEUFELDT, 1984,Third College
Edition.
Kokumin Hyakkajiten, 1978, Tarou Nagatomi, Heibonsya, p.340

				
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