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					Final Portfolio

   Spencer Wirt

     12/3/10
                     Table of Contents

Cover Letter………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………2


Rhetorical Analysis…………………………………………………………………………………………………………….4


Commentary Proposal……………………..…………………………………….…………………………………………9


Film Review………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………15


Revised Paper; Commentary Proposal………………………………………………………………………………18




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Dear Committee,

        As my first semester of college has passed there are a few things I have learned about myself as
a learner in my English 120 class. One of the most important things I have learned is that during class
when we are doing group activities and writing drafts as a group, I learn a lot more than if our teacher
just stands up there and lectures. Or if he gives us examples that we can go over together and I have
something I can see and read myself, instead of the professor explaining things to me, I learn better. For
instance, when our class was learning how to storyboard for our film commentary, my professor showed
us an example from a famous movie the sixth sense. After watching that special feature of that DVD I
now know exactly what a storyboard looks like and what I have to complete for this class.

        One of the most challenging pieces of writing we had this semester I found was the rhetorical
analysis. As a class we chose a topic and that topic was the BP oil spill that happened this summer. We
had to write in a different genre than I am use to and it was a challenge. Some examples of the different
organization are throughout my Rhetorical Analysis paper on pages three through nine for example, I
had different titles for each section. Also I had a very formal tone to let my audience know how the
writer was persuading them using ethos pathos and logos. Being able to reveal the ways that the author
used ethos, pathos, and logos is also another thing I learned. Proof to this is in my paper under the
sections labeled by ethos, pathos, and logos on pages four through six.

        I have used many credible sources to back up my opinion on this lethal hits controversy. I have
used sources from real players, to people who make a living off of writing sports articles. A very valid
source I found that talked a lot about this topic was the associated press. They interviewed many players
in the NFL and I think their opinions are very valid. I chose sources that back up my opinion and that I
can add onto because I agree with them. Many of the NFL players opinions was that they were being too
harsh with the penalties which is what I believe so having credible NFL players backing up my opinion
adds a lot of strength to my paper. To make my paper as legitimate as possible, I quoted many famous
NFL superstars, for instance on page nine of my commentary you can see I quoted Dwight Freeney.
Since I am writing about the NFL using a professional athlete like himself makes my paper stronger in
the reader’s eyes.


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        Throughout this semester my professor has stressed being able to recognize genres and
audience. We had to write very different styles of papers all year and the one that I think represents
how I learned to write in new writing complexes would have to be my film review. This paper was
something I had never done before and I was very interested in it. I was writing in a different style than I
was use to. In the final two paragraphs of my film review on page eleven I had to write about the
underlying meaning of the film to my readers and explain to them what the movie is really about
through a style which was appropriate to my audience and so they would understand it easily. I find that
I did a good job of explaining what the underlying meaning of it was and my readers understand what
the movie was really about.

        On pages three though ten you will find my revised draft in which my biggest mistake was not
attaching my work cited page to my document onto my blog. As you can now see in my revised edition I
had attached a work cited page onto the ending of my paper on pages nine and ten. Another big mistake
I made on my commentary was not establishing who I was writing for. On the first page of my
commentary I now have clearly stated who I am writing for. In my commentary I kind of went off on
some subjects which made some of my paragraphs very long and very boring. For example in my first
paragraph it was very long and took up a single page. I split it up so I did not bore the readers and made
my opening make more sense.

        In the beginning of this semester we were assigned to write a goal statement. My three main
goals were to be able to write in different genres, gain credibility from taking this class, and being able
to feel comfortable with my writing style. I think my paper that I corrected shows these three goals met
very well. I want to get a better grade in this class so I corrected my lowest graded paper so in the future
people will see my grade and know that I have learned everything I needed too. Also when correcting
your own paper you can point out your own mistakes which make you more comfortable with you own
writing style which will help me out in the future greatly.




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Spencer Wirt


October 7, 2010


Oil Spill Response Out of Control


Final Draft


Introduction


       On April 20, 2010 there was a deep sea explosion on an oil rig owned by British

Petroleum in the Gulf of Mexico. This explosion caused a massive oil spill that lasted for 3

months all and during this spill oil was washing up onto American beaches. The U.S.

government made many actions to clean up the oil on our own country but they also put the

blame on BP and wanted them to do something about the oil washing up on our land. David

Gergen of CNN wrote an opinion article on oil spill and what America has done wrong and what

we should be doing.


Rhetorical Situation


       David Gergen writes for CNN which is a news source that reaches out to over 38.2

million people monthly. CNN’s main viewers are males in their upper 40s who make over 150k a

year and have gone to college and/or graduate school. The viewer’s political opinion leans more

to the democratic side then republican.




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        Right now in the United States there is a huge “Green” movement. This “Green”

movement is to help keep our earth clean and last for as long as it can. Things that people are

doing because of this movement is recycling, picking up litter, and trying to find new materials

to make expensive products cheaper. A big concern with this movement is Global Warming

which some say is caused by pollution. This oil rig explosion is polluting our coasts of our

country which can in turn, cause more Global Warming.


Ethos


        Gergen used the appeal of ethos to get his point across of the oil spill response being

out of control. Ethos is when a writer appeals to his audience by using credibility that he has

gained. One example of Gergen using credibility is when he stated,


        “A month ago, it looked like the White House was on top of this problem, as Cabinet

officers scurried here and there, the Coast Guard and others swung into action, there were talks

with BP, and the president paid a personal visit. But increasingly, it has become apparent that

the federal government may be present but is not in charge.” (Gergen)


        This statement gains credibility because he stated true facts that have happened since

the disaster and that the government right away looked like they had it under control but now

they don’t. The fact that Gergen stated true facts that everyone knows makes him more credible

because he is not lying to his viewers which makes the viewers give him more credit.


        A second example of Gergen using ethos is when he quoted the Washington Post by

saying, “Meanwhile, the Washington Post had it exactly right Monday morning when it argued

that with the European crisis spreading now beyond Greece, "the knife-edge psychology

currently governing global markets has put the future of the U.S. economic recovery in the

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hands of politicians in an assortment of European capitals." This helps him build credibility

himself by agreeing with another credible source that people can read. Gergen gains credit from

the readers of The Washington Post because readers trust The Washington Post therefore they

trust Gergen.


Pathos


         Gergen used pathos to appeal to his readers. Pathos is when a writer uses emotion to

appeal to his writers. The first example of him using ethos would be when he said “It may take

a while, but Americans are going to start feeling a lot happier about our country when we once

again believe we have strong control of own destiny. Leadership, anyone?” (Gergen) This

statement by Gergen helps him get to the emotional side of his readers by telling them if

someone would step up and be a leader and take control of this situation of the spill, all

Americans will start feeling happier which everyone would enjoy.


         Another example of Gergen trying to get to the emotional side of his readers is when he

stated, “Although this disaster is not an existential threat, it could be argued that if the U.S.

government had fought World War II in the same way it has fought the oil spill, we might well be

speaking German now.” Gergen uses this statement as a way to scare the readers into

believing that the government is not doing a good job to get this oil spill under control. This

statement works to scare people because when the readers think about if we would of lost

World War II how different this world would be, although it is not such harsh conditions as World

War II but all Gergen is trying to say is that the government is not doing all they can to get this

oil spill cleaned up.


         Last example of Gergen using Pathos is when he said, “There will be ample time after

this disaster for finger-pointing and blame-laying. The key now is to get this spill under control

before it does far more damage.” This makes reader’s feel like all our government is doing is

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sitting around blaming our problems on other people. It makes the readers think our government

needs to grow up, take care of their own problems first, then discuss matters with company’s

later. This gets to the readers emotional side because it makes them feel like their government

isn’t doing a good job of taking care of our country and our citizens, all they are doing is, as best

said by Gergen, “finger-pointing and blame-laying.”


Logos


        Gergen also used Logos to persuade his readers to believe in his writing. Logos is a way

a writer appeals to his readers by using logic. One example of him using logos would be,

“Ultimately it is not the responsibility of BP or any other company to protect American interests

but the responsibility of the federal government.” When CNN’s audience reads this, it makes

sense to them that it is our countries responsibility to get our coast line cleaned up and it

wouldn’t make sense that we would force BP to take care of American soil.


        Another example of Gergen using logos would be, “Is this really where we have come:

that the fate of our precious coastlines and the waters off our coasts are in the hands of a single

foreign-based company?” This affects the logic in this article because when people read this, it

does not make sense. Why would our coast lines be in the hands of a foreign-based company?

It does not make sense to anyone who reads it so it effects the readers opinion because they

don’t think that our government is making sense if the government left the coasts to a foreign-

based company.


Evaluation


        While Gergen was writing this paper he knew his audience was mostly democratic. He

made his points in ethos, pathos, and logos clearly towards a democratic audience because he

said it was the people of our nations with the help of our government’s job to clean up our coast

lines, not BP. Also, he appeals to his Democratic audience by saying that our government

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       needs to act now, take care of their own business, and worry about the consequences later.

       This is Democratic way of fixing things, sometimes it works, sometimes our nation gets in

       trouble for it but none the less, Gergen states we need act now and that’s the Democratic way

       of doing things. Gergen also brings up the fact that we could be leaving our nation in the hands

       of foreigners. That is not something any American wants which makes his point come across

       clear and makes the readers agree with him more. Since our nation is in such a “Going Green”

       movement this article is very effective because everyone wants our nation to be clean and rid of

       pollution. Since BP oil is washing up on American beaches the people of the U.S. want to get it

       off now to save our beaches. Gergen points out that our Government is not acting now to get

       this oil cleaned up and that makes readers believe we are not doing all we can to save our

       country from pollution and makes the readers agree with Gergen even more. Gergen knew

       exactly who would be reading this article and wrote in a way that gets to his readers opinions

       very effectively.




Gergen, David. "Oil Spill Response out of Control - CNN." Featured Articles From The CNN. 24 May

       2010. Web. 6 Oct. 2010. <http://articles.cnn.com/2010-05-

       24/opinion/gergen.oil.spill.leadership_1_oil-spill-bp-oil-pollution-act?_s=PM:OPINION>.




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       In today’s world, more and more people are doing things to better protect themselves

against the dangers of the world. For instance, many car companies pride themselves on being

 able to withstand accidents and protect the drivers inside the best. With all of these health

standards and safety issues across the country it has finally caught up to the NFL. Right now in

 the NFL the commissioner, Roger Goodell, has went as far as to hand out suspensions to NFL

players that he thinks made a lethal helmet to helmet hit on the opposing player on purpose.

This move by the commissioner has made many fans and sports analysts very angry. But more

 importantly I think that the players in the NFL, even the ones who are receiving the hits, are

 mad about this new suspension rule. Andre Johnson, who is a wide receiver for the Houston

Texans, stated, “It's tough because the sport is violent. The guys are just out there playing and

 they just go and hit you. I don't think they are thinking about the helmet-to helmet contact.

Guys are just out there playing.” (Andre Johnson) Johnson is a man who takes huge hits from

 safeties and linebackers going 100 miles an hour at him to make the play and if he does not

think that these players are out here trying to hurt each other, why does the commissioner? If

      you could not already tell, I am very opposed to this new suspension rule that the

commissioner has imposed on players. With this new rule in play, the offensive side of the ball

  has a huge advantage over the defensive players because the men who make the plays by

 running into a play with all that they have will have to slow down because they are worried

                    about getting suspended and letting their team down.
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       One of the main reasons why I think this rule is unfair to players is that the man who

decides who is getting the suspensions and fines is Roger Goodell. Roger Goodell is a man who

has never played football is his life. Goodell is a business man and the only reason why he has

made this rule is to protect his business. Even though some people might think that all NFL

players want is money, there are still a lot of players out there

that love the game and play it at full go all the time. When

listening to the ESPN radio show Pardon the Interruption Tony


Kornheiser stated, “Roger Goodell is not the man who                -Andre Johnson after taking a hit during a
                                                                    Game and he still thinks this suspension is a
should be making these decisions. They should give this             bad idea.


duty to a former coach or even a former player who knows what it’s like out on the field.” If a

player or coach was given the duty to make the call of fines and suspensions I think there would

be a lot less of the consequences given out because they know what it is like on the field and

they will be able to tell if a defender is truly purposely trying to hurt the opposing player.


       In an interview with Dwight Freeney he states,


       “Its real tough for defensive players, we are out there playing hard. We are not out

there trying to hurt anyone. No guy is out there saying, you know what, I am going to go out

there and try to go helmet to helmet, I want a fine. No, they are going out there playing hard

and trying to make plays for their team. Things happen, it is not as easy as people think. You

have guys going 100 miles per hour in one direction and you got a guy running 100 miles per

hour in the other direction and you try to make a play.”




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               Dwight Freeney is a very well known defensive end and may even be in the NFL Hall of

     Fame soon. This new rule will have an effect on him and everyone else he plays with because

     people cannot run into a play at 100 miles an hour because they are worried about getting

     suspended which will cause missed tackles and big plays for the offense. Freeney also states,

     “Players don’t need to launch with their helmets first, but they definitely need to launch with

     their momentum to make a solid hit.” Without launching their bodies at players, the opposing

     players will break more tackles therefore make big plays and make it much tougher on the

     defense to stop the offense from scoring.


               Part of playing any league of football, whether it is high school, college, or NFL, there is

     always butterflies in your stomach from fear. The fear of running across the middle of the field

     to catch a ball and knowing that there is a defender running as hard as you except in the

     opposite direction. Jerome Solomon, a professional sports writer, says it best when he states,

     “Going across the middle of the field separates the men from the boys.” It takes brave men to

                                               venture into the middle of the field especially NFL receivers

                                               who have to go up against the hardest hitters in the world.

                                               Having this new suspension rule given by the commissioner of

                                               the NFL will take away that fear factor and let any receiver

                                               cross the middle of the field without even thinking twice about

                                               it because there won’t be a man coming at a receiver at the
- This is an NFL receiver breaking a tackle.
With this suspension rule in effect, viewers
will be seeing much more of tackles
                                               same speed. This will once again give the offensive side of the
getting broken causing the offense to
make bigger plays and score more               ball an advantage over defense because defenders will be
touchdowns quicker and easier.

     scared to get suspended.

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             “For more than two decades, a reoccurring scene on “Monday Night Football” featured

   an image of two helmets crashing into each other and exploding into smithereens.” (Katie

   Thomas) As this statement by Thomas points out, the NFL has been in support of these lethal

   hits since the beginning of football. Football is a gladiator sport; it is about who can take the

   hardest hits and still be able to cross that goal line at the end of the game. Fans of NFL know

   what football is about and cheer on the hardest hits and the biggest collisions because that is

   what people want to see when they spend unbelievable amounts to watch 22 men play their

   hearts out on the field no matter what happens. In Thomas’s article, she quoted Mark

   Schlereth, a two-time Pro Bowler and an NFL analyst for ESPN. Schlereth stated, “We glorify

   these hits, we make money on these hits. That’s what we do, and the NFL profits on that.” This

   statement by Schlereth in Thomas’s paper points out another valid point that I would like to

   build off of. Players in the NFL make on average nine hundred ninety thousand dollars a year to

   put their bodies on the line for their team. Many players complain how expensive it is to pay

   hospital bills when they get injured. If you are a person making 990,000 dollars a year even if

   you’re injured, and you can’t afford to pay for your own health insurance, then you need to

                                      take a hard look at your spending habits and maybe not buy the

                                      Ferrari sitting in your drive way.


                                             Players in the NFL just don’t start their football careers

                                      there; they have to prove themselves through high school and into
- Opening scene of “Monday
Night Football” until the NFL        college then hopefully make it to the pros. While playing in high
decided to fine them for
supporting helmet to helmet
collisions. This makes a person
                                     school and college they have many different coaches who teach
think; why all of a sudden is the
NFL not in support of these lethal
hits when they used to advertise
games with two helmets hitting
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and exploding?
         many different techniques. One thing that every coach, whether they are high school or college,

         has in common is to play your heart out and give everything you’ve got in every game. For

         defensive players this means use whatever means possible to make a play on the ball. Jason

         Whitlock hits the nail on the head when he stated, “Coaches implore players to knock a man’s

         (private part) in the dirt. Billionaires hand out $50 million contracts to players skilled at the art

         form.” I’m not saying that you should go for the opposing players head when making a tackle

         that many people criticize NFL players of doing, but playing your heart out in every game means

         using every bit of your body to bring down an opposing player and make a play for you team.

         When players get taught by coaches through their football careers to do whatever they can do

         to make a play for their team and don’t blow it, sometimes helmet to helmet collisions will

         happen. As I quoted before from Dwight Freeney, “Things Happen, it is not as easy as people

         think.” These helmet to helmet collisions are just two players playing as hard as they can to

         make a play for their team. All interviews that I have watched of different NFL players they all

         say one thing in common; there is a lot of stuff on the field that happens which we see

         differently on TV, pictures, or on replays.


                                       This new suspension rule in the NFL is going to bring the NFL viewing

                                ratings down because people watch the NFL for the big hits and the big plays.


                                    There won’t be either of these things with this rule in effect therefore no
- Although it looks like the
defender is purposely hitting       one will want to watch the NFL anymore. The NFL is already favoring the
the opposing players head
with his head, we viewers           offensive side of the ball and with this suspension rule the offense is
don’t know exactly what the
                                    even getting more help. Defenders cannot play the way they are taught
intention of the player was.


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and that will cause defenders to not make tackles and let the offense get easy plays.


       The NFL says that people don’t want to see people get hurt by these big hits and that’s

why they are making this new suspension rule, to protect the players or to protect their

business you could say. I think this new rule will do the exact opposite and make less people

watch the NFL because what the viewers pay big bucks for are the famous big hits and big plays

and in turn, will cause the NFL franchise to decrease. These hits are just part of the game and

taking away these hits will take away part of the game and one of the reasons why people

watch it.




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Spencer Wirt

September 16, 2010

Businessman gone Psycho

Final Draft



         Patrick Bateman is an American businessman with an urge to murder women and
anyone else unfortunate enough to get in his way. Bateman works on Wall Street everyday to
try and fit in with society, and once he leaves work his lust for killing women takes over. He
does not stop there, however he also kills anyone who makes him jealous regardless of sex or
age. Bateman is a very charming man and he uses his sex appeal to his advantage by luring his
female victims in with the promise of sex. As said by Roger Ebert in a Chicago Times review,
“Patrick Bateman is a guy who’s prey to the usual male drives and compulsions. He just acts out
a little more.” While he is engaged in the act of sex, he cannot keep his eyes off of himself
which makes the viewer believe he is a narcissist. As his lust for blood continues his conscience
catches up with him and he decides to turn himself in. He tries to tell his lawyer and his fiancé
but they don’t believe him. The man Bateman allegedly killed was still alive, and the bodies of
all the other men and women he killed were nowhere to be found so everyone thought it was a
joke Bateman was playing.




                                                  (1) -Bateman after getting his lust of blood fulfilled.

        American Psycho ends with Bateman getting laughed at by his lawyer after just
confessing all of his murders. Bateman’s lawyer says the man he supposedly killed is still alive
and he just had lunch with him. Bateman becomes confused and it leaves viewers very
confused also. The main reason why I give this movie two thumbs up is because American
Psycho does not force you to interpret a movie the way the director wanted you too. The movie
can be interpreted in different ways and it is all up to the viewer. Either Bateman actually killed
all those people which during the whole movie you believe he does or it was all mental
fantasies playing in his head and the viewers saw it as real life. If you are into movies that do
not have a happy ending with the bad guy losing and the good guy winning, and you like movies
that make you think outside the box, then this is the movie for you.



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                                  (2) - One of Batemans real murders, or a fantasy playing in his head


         The underlying meaning of American Psycho is to point out that businessmen are
jealous and always want to be ahead of everyone else but at the same time fit in. Dennis
Harvey says it best when he stated “As Batemans self-control disintegrates, so does any vestige
of individuality.” Throughout the movie Bateman is always trying to be most popular at Wall
Street. Dorsia is a famous local restaurant that is very hard to get into unless you have
previously made reservations. During this movie, a man gets into Dorsia the day he calls
because he is well known around Wall Street for the work he does. Bateman becomes very
jealous of this man because Bateman’s status around Wall Street is not high enough to get into
Dorsia without making previous reservations. Men of the business world have an important
piece of paper that is similar to their signature; it is their business card. This is very personal to
the businessmen because they can design every little thing on this card. During the movie, the
same man who got the dinner at Dorsia showed his business card and compared it to
Bateman’s. A man above Bateman on the status poll looks at the cards and chooses the other
man’s card. Bateman, once again becomes very jealous of this man. The fact that this man can
go to Dorsia and eat whenever he wants and the fact that this man has a nicer business card
puts Bateman’s over the edge. Bateman’s jealousy is too much for him to handle and he takes
the life of this man because he has a nicer business card.

       Another underlying meaning of American Psycho is that men in the business world are
conceited. Every morning Bateman goes through a routine to wash and moisturize his skin and
to keep his hair very clean and full of life. Every day he does pushups and crunches to keep his
body as fit as possible just so he can try to look better than everyone else and while he is doing
these workouts he watches himself in the mirror almost like he is checking himself out like he
would check out one of his female victims. The acceptance that every businessman tries to get
by being self-involved passes on to their girlfriends, fiancés, and wife’s. Bateman has a fiancé
throughout the movie and she shows her self-involvement when Bateman tells her he has a
problem and wants to call the marriage off. All she cares about is that Bateman does not want
to get married to her; she does not listen to the fact that Bateman is trying to get help and
confessing his murders to her. She doesn’t care about Bateman; all she cares about is herself
and the fact that her marriage to a successful man in Wall Street has been called off. This movie
points out that businessmen are jealous and conceited people who are downright evil and if it
was up to me, I would not trust a single one of them.




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                                           Works Cited



       Harvey, Dennis. "American Psycho." Variety, 20. Jan. 2000.
<http://www.variety.com/review/VE1117775592.html?categoryid=31&cs=1>.

        Dennis Harvey’s liked the movie American Psycho because of
the fact of the creepy humor. He thought the movie was a gory
movie yet you found yourself laughing at how weird Patrick
acts. He gave it good reviews and thought it was a well acted
movie.

     Ebert, Roger. "American Psycho." Rogerebert.com, 14 Apr. 2000. Web.
<http://rogerebert.suntimes.com/apps/pbcs.dll/article?AID=/20000414/REVIEWS/4140303/10
23>.

  Ebert found this movie to be well acted. He said that it was
a good adaptation to the book. The way they portrayed the
main character Patrick as a business man/ killer made Ebert
give this movie three stars.


(1) Drama, American Psycho, http//:www.artsjournal.com, September 25, 2008
(2) American Psycho, http//:www.slog.thestranger.com, October 28, 2008




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                                         Written for ESPN


       In today’s world, more and more people are doing things to better protect themselves

against the dangers of the world. For instance, many car companies pride themselves on being

able to withstand accidents and protect the drivers inside the best. With all of these health

standards and safety issues across the country it has finally caught up to the NFL. Right now in

the NFL the commissioner, Roger Goodell, has went as far as to hand out suspensions to NFL

players that he thinks made a lethal helmet to helmet hit on the opposing player on purpose.

This move by the commissioner has made many fans and sports analysts very angry. But more

importantly I think that the players in the NFL, even the ones who are receiving the hits, are

mad about this new suspension rule.


       Andre Johnson, who is a wide receiver for the Houston Texans, stated, “It's tough

because the sport is violent. The guys are just out there playing and they just go and hit you. I

don't think they are thinking about the helmet-to helmet contact. Guys are just out there

playing.” (Andre Johnson) Johnson is a man who takes huge hits from safeties and linebackers

going 100 miles an hour at him to make the play and if he does not think that these players are

out here trying to hurt each other, why does the commissioner? If you could not already tell, I

am very opposed to this new suspension rule that the commissioner has imposed on players.


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With this new rule in play, the offensive side of the ball has a huge advantage over the

defensive players because the men who make the plays by running into a play with all that they

have will have to slow down because they are worried about getting suspended and letting

their team down.


       One of the main reasons why I think this rule is unfair to players is that the man who

decides who is getting the suspensions and fines is Roger Goodell. Roger Goodell is a man who

has never played football is his life. Goodell is a business man and the only reason why he has

made this rule is to protect his business. Even though some people might think that all NFL

players want is money, there are still a lot of players out there

that love the game and play it at full go all the time. When

listening to the ESPN radio show Pardon the Interruption Tony


Kornheiser stated, “Roger Goodell is not the man who should
                                                                      -Andre Johnson after taking a hit during a
                                                                      Game and he still thinks this suspension is
be making these decisions. They should give this duty to a            a bad idea.

former coach or even a former player who knows what it’s like out on the field.” If a player or

coach was given the duty to make the call of fines and suspensions I think there would be a lot

less of the consequences given out because they know what it is like on the field and they will

be able to tell if a defender is truly purposely trying to hurt the opposing player.


       In an interview with Dwight Freeney he states,


       “Its real tough for defensive players, we are out there playing hard. We are not out

there trying to hurt anyone. No guy is out there saying, you know what, I am going to go out

there and try to go helmet to helmet, I want a fine. No, they are going out there playing hard

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     and trying to make plays for their team. Things happen, it is not as easy as people think. You

     have guys going 100 miles per hour in one direction and you got a guy running 100 miles per

     hour in the other direction and you try to make a play.”


               Dwight Freeney is a very well known defensive end and may even be in the NFL Hall of

     Fame soon. This new rule will have an effect on him and everyone else he plays with because

     people cannot run into a play at 100 miles an hour because they are worried about getting

     suspended which will cause missed tackles and big plays for the offense. Freeney also states,

     “Players don’t need to launch with their helmets first, but they definitely need to launch with

     their momentum to make a solid hit.” Without launching their bodies at players, the opposing

     players will break more tackles therefore make big plays and make it much tougher on the

     defense to stop the offense from scoring.


               Part of playing any league of football, whether it is high school, college, or NFL, there is

     always butterflies in your stomach from fear. The fear of running across the middle of the field

     to catch a ball and knowing that there is a defender running as hard as you except in the

     opposite direction. Jerome Solomon, a professional sports writer, says it best when he states,

     “Going across the middle of the field separates the men from the boys.” It takes brave men to

                                               venture into the middle of the field especially NFL receivers

                                               who have to go up against the hardest hitters in the world.

                                               Having this new suspension rule given by the commissioner of

                                               the NFL will take away that fear factor and let any receiver

                                               cross the middle of the field without even thinking twice about


- This is an NFL receiver breaking a tackle.
With this suspension rule in effect, viewers                                                                   20
will be seeing much more of tackles
getting broken causing the offense to
make bigger plays and score more
touchdowns quicker and easier.
   it because there won’t be a man coming at a receiver at the same speed. This will once again

   give the offensive side of the ball an advantage over defense because defenders will be scared

   to get suspended.


             “For more than two decades, a reoccurring scene on “Monday Night Football” featured

   an image of two helmets crashing into each other and exploding into smithereens.” (Katie

   Thomas) As this statement by Thomas points out, the NFL has been in support of these lethal

   hits since the beginning of football. Football is a gladiator sport; it is about who can take the

   hardest hits and still be able to cross that goal line at the end of the game. Fans of NFL know

   what football is about and cheer on the hardest hits and the biggest collisions because that is

   what people want to see when they spend unbelievable amounts to watch 22 men play their

   hearts out on the field no matter what happens. In Thomas’s article, she quoted Mark

   Schlereth, a two-time Pro Bowler and an NFL analyst for ESPN. Schlereth stated, “We glorify

   these hits, we make money on these hits. That’s what we do, and the NFL profits on that.” This

   statement by Schlereth in Thomas’s paper points out another valid point that I would like to

   build off of. Players in the NFL make on average nine hundred ninety thousand dollars a year to

   put their bodies on the line for their team. Many players complain how expensive it is to pay

   hospital bills when they get injured. If you are a person making 990,000 dollars a year even if

   you’re injured, and you can’t afford to pay for your own health insurance, then you need to

                                    take a hard look at your spending habits and maybe not buy the

                                    Ferrari sitting in your drive way.


                                           Players in the NFL just don’t start their football careers

- Opening scene of “Monday
Night Football” until the NFL
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decided to fine them for
supporting helmet to helmet
collisions. This makes a person
think; why all of a sudden is the
         there; they have to prove themselves through high school and into college then hopefully make

         it to the pros. While playing in high school and college they have many different coaches who

         teach many different techniques. One thing that every coach, whether they are high school or

         college, has in common is to play your heart out and give everything you’ve got in every game.

         For defensive players this means use whatever means possible to make a play on the ball. Jason

         Whitlock hits the nail on the head when he stated, “Coaches implore players to knock a man’s

         (private part) in the dirt. Billionaires hand out $50 million contracts to players skilled at the art

         form.” I’m not saying that you should go for the opposing players head when making a tackle

         that many people criticize NFL players of doing, but playing your heart out in every game means

         using every bit of your body to bring down an opposing player and make a play for you team.

         When players get taught by coaches through their football careers to do whatever they can do

         to make a play for their team and don’t blow it, sometimes helmet to helmet collisions will

         happen. As I quoted before from Dwight Freeney, “Things Happen, it is not as easy as people

         think.” These helmet to helmet collisions are just two players playing as hard as they can to

         make a play for their team. All interviews that I have watched of different NFL players they all

         say one thing in common; there is a lot of stuff on the field that happens which we see

         differently on TV, pictures, or on replays.


                                       This new suspension rule in the NFL is going to bring the NFL viewing

                                ratings down because people watch the NFL for the big hits and the big plays.


                                    There won’t be either of these things with this rule in effect therefore no
- Although it looks like the
defender is purposely hitting       one will want to watch the NFL anymore. The NFL is already favoring the
the opposing players head
with his head, we viewers
don’t know exactly what the                                                                                  22
intention of the player was.
offensive side of the ball and with this suspension rule the offense is even getting more help.

Defenders cannot play the way they are taught and that will cause defenders to not make

tackles and let the offense get easy plays.


       The NFL says that people don’t want to see people get hurt by these big hits and that’s

why they are making this new suspension rule, to protect the players or to protect their

business you could say. I think this new rule will do the exact opposite and make less people

watch the NFL because what the viewers pay big bucks for are the famous big hits and big plays

and in turn, will cause the NFL franchise to decrease. These hits are just part of the game and

taking away these hits will take away part of the game and one of the reasons why people

watch it.




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