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					 ESSPA 2010 Winners List                           October 22, 2010 • Syracuse University

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EDITORIAL

      Gold         Pearl Bhatnagar and Arthur Tarley, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS,
                   Flushing
                   “Students’ right to privacy?

                   Rachel Clark, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                   “Closing parks is closing history”

                   Samantha Griswold, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                   “No consolation for pregnant girls”

      Silver       Michelle Checchi, Curtis Log, Curtis HS, Staten Island
                   “From the editor”

                   Esther Whang, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                   “Policy stifles decision-making”

                   Zandalee Gomez, The Blazer, World Journalism Prep School, Flushing
                   “Decline of arts in schools effecting the learning process”

      Bronze       Christian Deakin, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                   “Where do we go from here?”

                   Rebecca Seidel, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                   “To whom it may concern”

                   Staff, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community Justice,
                   New York
                   “Restrooms Clean up after yourselves”

Judge’s Comments
>>Entries expressed courage in speaking out on important public and school policy
issues.

EDITORIAL PAGE

      Gold         Staff, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber HS, Port Washington
                   “April 30, 2010”
       Silver       Staff, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community Justice,
                    New York
                    “March 2010”

                    Arielle Lewen, The Courant, Commack HS
                    “April 2010”

                    Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “March 2010”

Judge’s Comments
>>Very few entries but those that did enter were quite good. It is heartening to see high
school students stand up for their rights and take positions on these things that affect them.

FEATURE STORY

       Gold         Kaylin Soucy, The Blazer, World Journalism Prep School, Flushing
                    “She’ll just grow out of it”

                    Elizabeth Paul, Curtis Log, Curtis HS
                    “All of us have to make decisions…”

                    Amanda Villani, The Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS,
                    “Hewlett embraces LGBT students”

       Silver       Lisa Zheng and Jenny Schulte, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Where is the student dress code?”

                    Kathryn McDougal, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “Teacher in Aisle 8”

                    Kathryn McDougal, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “When the darkest day falls on the happiest place on earth”

                    Vanessa Sheffield, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “OHS ’cribs‘ just as unique as MTV’s”

       Bronze       Veronica Taylor, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and
                    Community Justice, New York
                    “Feeding the community”

                    Alec Stern and Margot Langendorff, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “Whitson’s way: Healthy food”

                    Mohini Sharma, Trapezoid, Brighton HS
                    “Highly improbable: Ready, set, act!”
       HM           Rebecca Seidel, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                    “Administration discourages student-leadeer friendships on Facebook”

                    Kristina Rodulfo, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                    “ ‘Get with it’: Modern Fair Lady catches on”

                    Claire Mooney, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Nazis and pottery: You’re being blocked”

                    Rachel Bialaszewski, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “ ‘I never thought I’d miss him as much as I do’ “

                    Jessica Cohen and Allie Healy, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWit HS
                    “An epic duo”

                    Lucia Qian, The Journal, Guilderland HS
                    “Educators have always seen school…”

                    Kasy Bury, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “Class size on the rise”

                    Sarah Bianchi, The Blazer, World Journalism Prep School, Flushing
                    “Little kids, big decisions”

Judge’s Comments
>>Of course, there were a lot of good stories submitted, but a few stand out. Gold winners:
Kaylin Soucy’s courage and determination to tell her story about depression is inspiring. This
kind of gutsy writing deserves our support. Amanda Villani’s story about LGBT students is
outstanding because of her strong reporting. She persuaded her sources to speak honestly
and on the record and I can tell she asked all the right questions. That kind of reporting takes
self-assurance and the ability to make sources feel secure and safe. Bravo. Reading Elizabeth
Paul’s piece about making difficult decisions was like hearing a bell ring. The writing is lean,
controlled and compelling. Its honesty resonates.

The Silver winners: Lisa Zheng and Jenny Schulte tackled a relevant topic (the school dress
code and the lack of enforcement) with vigor and kept their heads high as they confronted the
school administration for answers. Kathryn McDougal scored a double with Teacher in Aisle 8
and When the Darkest Day Falls on the Happiest Place on Earth. Her reporting shows a knack
for getting people to tell their stories. She listened intently enough in reporting each of these
pieces to hear the humor or the tragedy and wrote clearly enough to let readers share in those
elements. Vanessa Sheffield used good sensory reporting to make classroom décor come alive
for readers.

The Bronze winners: Veronica Taylor’s vivid writing helped me see and hear and smell the
breakfast/lunch wagon. Mohini Sharma used anecdotes to tell an engaging tale about a
student improv group. Alec Stern and Margot Langendorff did some solid reporting to show
rather than tell why the recent improvements in the cafeteria can lead to healthier students.
IN-DEPTH COVERAGE

       Gold         Ali Colbert, Sarah McLoughlin and Cassie Oliver, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “Tech etiquette” double truck

                    Staff, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “Religion” special section

                    Christian Deakin, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “ ‘Losing a friendship is better than losing a person’ “

       Silver       Staff, The Journal, Guilderland HS
                    “What you need to know about the budget” double truck

                    Sarah Mahmood, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                    “Alumnus creates Facebook group criticizing Ephebic Oath”

                    Victoria Bateman, Allanah Dykes and Aasha Jackson, Maroon Echo,
                    Bay Shore HS
                    “War and the Military” double truck

       Bronze       Kimberlyn Bailey, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Stylish scholars: OHS’s most fashionable teachers”

                    Sarah Mahmood, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                    “Survey reveals widely differing views towards gender equality”

                    Abby Levy, The Journal, Guilderland HS
                    “The block schedule debate”

       HM           Brittany Ross, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Overbearing parents hurt, more than help”

                    Andrew Seo and Christian Vlahos, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber
                    HS, Port Washington
                    “The Drug Question” double truck

                    Danny Kramer, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “Horizon turns forty”

Judge’s Comments
>>Some excellent examples of in-depth reporting in these entries. It was obvious that many
student journalists are taking a look at important topics from a localized, student/teacher per-
spective. These pieces are important to creating dialogues in the schools. It’s great to see high
school journalists taking the lead in setting the agenda.

On the other hand, too many entries read like they were essays for an English composition,
complete with internet sourcing and and very little localized reporting. While some of these
entries were on important and timely topics, they needed contextual placement as issues for
the readers of their own publications, not those of a professional media form or internet site.
Internet reporting should most often provide reporter research and education, but shouldn’t
necessarily be the basis of reporting.

The winners were those entries that looked at important topics within their readers’ view-
points.

Reporters should also be careful about “backing into quotes” by using attribution to preface
the quote. Other problems were weak transitions such as, “When asked about such and such,
he replied.” In-depth stories are longer and more complex to write. Reporters need to work
on pacing and story flow to keep the reader from jumping ship. Repetitive quote/transition
writing rarely works in a long story.

PERSONALITY INTERVIEW STORY

       Gold:        Sammy Caiola, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “True to himself: Teen proud of gender identity”

       Silver:      Ashley Stalter, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Graduate awarded purple heart”

                    Amanda Villani, Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS
                    “Jeremy Morak ‘10 sees the world in his own light”

                    Kasey Carter, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “LHS survivor”

       Bronze:      Julia Gaiser, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “What’s next for Skahill?”

                    Jillian Markham, Brocton Review, Brockton HS
                    “Aide to retire this month”

       HM:          Andrew Lee, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Student spotlight: Tessa Devereaux”

                    Latia Skerving, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy, and
                    Community Justice, New York
                    “A day in the life: The untold story of LACJ’s Principal, Ms. Nightengale”

Judge’s Comments
>>The winners typically shared a few things, foremost among them multiple sources. Stories
gain credibility — and are just plain better — when there is more than one source. Just as
we don’t like to hear someone drone on and on in conversation, as readers we feel the
same way when we come to a story. We may read, but essentially tune out a single, constant
voice. Changes in source verify what the main subject is saying, and also provide a change
in direction and relief from what otherwise can be a monotone. Single-source stories can
sometimes work, but if you are not careful they become little more than a transcript.
The reporter-writer should synthesize and sort, making meaning of what’s been said and
prioritizing it. The best stories typically also show a sense of place. Where someone is
interviewed can be important, as it allowsthe writer to bring more to the piece than simply
quotes. Also, choosing the right location can pay off in big way because it can inspire
questions the reporter would never think of otherwise. If you interview your subject in an
office or at home or in some other “place of importance,” you’ll find many clues and cues for
questions. “What’s that?” “What’s this?” “There must be a story behind that?”

CARTOON/ILLUSTRATION/GRAPHIC (portfolio)

      Gold          Katy Frankenberger, Rodequoit, Irondequoit HS

                    Suzanne Wu, Trapezoid, Brighton HS

       Silver       Hanna Edizel, Trapezoid, Brighton HS

                    Dan Schoeneck, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS

       Bronze       Richie Bonilla, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing

       HM           Kimberlyn Bailey, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

                    Sonia Uretes, Trapezoid, Brighton HS

                    Griffin Jones, Roedquoit, Irondequoit HS

Judge’s Comments:
>> Some outstanding art used appropriately as visual focal points with stories. Many entries
went beyond simple pencil or one-dimensional art to use of various mediums to create
dimensional, interesting, and rich art that added substantially to the layout. Art shouldn’t be
used just to fill holes in layout or because a photograph wasn’t available. It should be planned
as part of the story-telling process. Stylistic art becomes familiar to readers.

USE OF ADVERTISING (portfolio)

       Gold         Staff, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester

                    Jenette Palesh, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

Judge’s Comments
>>In both winning entries the staffs created original advertising in creative ways, even for a
national client such as Wal-Mart. The ads were creative, unique and appropriate for a high
school publication and audience.
SPECIAL TOPIC/EVENT COVERAGE

      Gold         Mark Belcher, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                   “Coverage of possible school merger”

                   Staff, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                   “Special topic issue: Who we are”

      Silver       Sammy Caiola, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                   “Haitian quake takes emotional toll on students”

                   Staff, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community Justice
                   New York
                   “Should metal detectors be in schools?”

                   Kayla Arnold, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                   “Ådvanced-level students duke it out online”

      Bronze       Staff, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                   “25th Anniversary of The Classic”

                   Staff, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                   “Vampires: Vampires sink teeth into pop culture”

      HM           Aasha Jackson, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                   “Texas board of ed literally makes history”

                   Shannon Christie and Julia Berke, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                   “Health debate lively among staff, DOA with teens”

                   Chad Mason, The Spectator, Fredonia HS
                   “Students enjoy tailgating scene”

                   Nabiha Ahsan, Trapezoid, Brighton HS
                   “Art students help tsunami victims”

                   Cody Essek, The Spectator, Fredonia HS
                   “Sleeping out! Student council aids flood vicims with cardboard box event”

                   Samantha Frankel, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                   “Lynbrook teachers show talent for Haiti; Teachers dance for Haiti”

Judge’s Comments
>>This category got a broad range of entries. Some were simply news or feature stories
that should have been entered in those categories. Some were entertainment reviews that
should have been entered in that category. Some were picture pages from school events.
Those should have been entered in the picture page category. A few entries used second
hand reporting, relying on web sources and reprinting material from other sources instead of
unique, original reporting.

The winners were truly topics of special coverage: unique, timely topics relevant to the school
and its students. They used first person, localized reporting to tell the stories.

SPORTS FEATURE

      Gold          Sammy Caiola, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “After years of confusion, cheerleaders achieve”

                    Ryan Byrnes and Walker Masiclat, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Athlete of the month: Russell Farchione

                    Mark Belcher, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Football future uncertain”

       Silver       Brittany Crooks, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Healthy lifestyle starts at early age”

                    Ameena Dye, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Boys lacrosse preview:

       Bronze       Maria Randazzo, Horizon, Lynbrook HS
                    “ACL injuries”

                    Sara Smith, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Low numbers continue to affect sports”

Judge’s Comments
>> Winners wrote features with life. Good writing and reporting. Some were sports news
stories (not even features). I’m not sure everyone knows the difference.

SPORTS NEWS

       Gold         Tessa Devereaux, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Turf field craze”

                    Saba Javadi and Ryan Young, The Courant, Commack HS
                    “Defeating the undefeated”

       Silver       Shannon Christie, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “Local parent tries to start ice hockey team as a club sport”

                    Sam Griffiths, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Fact or fiction: J-D field hockey?”
                    Liz Bromsted, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Team struggles, with a 2-8 record”

       Bronze       Chelsea Cook, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “Girls track captures landmark win”

                    Jacob Cunningham, The Spectator, Fredonia HS
                    “Crossing the line”

                    Derek Cook, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Varsity team still has time to improve”

Judge’s Comments
>>Winning entries showed initiative, enterprise, multiple sources and strong writing. I still
think there is confusion as to what sports news is. To me, it can be a game story, a straight
news event story, as well as news about various sports issues that concern high school sports.

PORTRAIT PHOTOGRAPH

       Gold         Michael Marcantonio, The Journal, Guilderland HS
                    “GHS welcomes Mr. Nielson”

       Silver       Monek Cullen, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Chelsea Johnson”

                    Amber Perez, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community
                    Justice, New York
                    “Aneska Tejada”

       Bronze       Kaitlyn Scanlon, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Sarai Godwaldt”

                    Natasha Boghani, Trapezoid, Brighton HS
                    “Mr. Metz”

       HM           Lexi Kendall, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Roger Chagnon”

                    Brandon Pawlak, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Andy Deakin and family”

Judge’s Comments
>> The winning entry showed photographer control in creating both a natural situation, and
a traditional posed portrait. Both showed excellent use of light and contrast, while giving the
reader a sense of the subject’s personality. The silver awards were shot from interesting angles
and close to their subjects. After that, backgrounds became an issue. Look beyond your
subject for distractions before you shoot, especially in classrooms.
Too many portraits were shot too far away from the subjects against bad school walls (bricks,
etc.) that made for busy, distracting backgrounds. Simply putting a prop in someone’s hands
does not make a portrait interesting. Get close to the subject, choose an interesting angle and
find a good, neutral or environmental background.

FEATURE PHOTOGRAPH

       Gold         Taquasia Wilson, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and
                    Community Justice, New York

                    Noelle Antignano, Spectrum, Locust Valley HS
                    “Football player”

       Silver       Mark Belcher, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Winter ball”

                    Julia Gaiser, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Cover of spring musical issue”

       Bronze       Noelle Antignano, Spectrum, Locust Valley HS
                    “Spotlight night”

                    Natasha Boghani, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester
                    “Student looking at an online site”

Judge’s Comments
>>Since ESSPA has a Portrait Photograph category, it would make more sense to enter
portraits in that category. Pictures of static, non-people subjects will have a hard time winning
this or any category. The best entries showed people in storytelling situations, interacting,
involved, with emotion and interest.

NEWS PHOTOGRAPH

       Gold         David Rapp-Kirshner and Noah Kaplan, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Pie eating contestant”

                    Aaron Taddeo, Rodequoit, Irondequoit HS, Rochester
                    “Pool opening makes a splash”

       Silver       Noelle Antignano, Spectrum, Locust Valley HS
                    “Girl with child in a relay race”

       Bronze       Josh Timmerman, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

       HM           Adelaide Palum, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester
Judge’s Comments
>>The winning photograph from RamPage is a great moment from a pie-eating contest. Great
story-telling moment, good angle. The photo from Rodequoit is a great angle with good
dimensionality of the swimmers at the new pool. Silver is a very nice moment and interesting
horizontal shaped photo from a relay race with good emotion. News photos need strong cen-
ters of interest, not static subject matter such as group shots or posed photos.

SPORTS PHOTOGRAPH

      Gold          Emma Denenberg, Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS
                    “And they’re off”

                    Simon Turkin, Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS
                    “And one!”

      Silver        Sean Pecuch, The Spectator, Fredonia HS
                    “Swim shot, winter sports shots”

                    Noelle Antignano, Spectrum, Locust Valley HS
                    “Football players with ball”

      Bronze        Elizabeth Bromsted, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Girls basketball action”

      HM            Sean Pecuch, The Spectator, Fredonia HS
                    “Steelers hockey player”


Judge’s Comments:
>>When entering a contest, it is very important to select which photo you want to be judged
if you’re sending in a spread with more than one photo. Also, you have to run photos a decent
size if you want it to win. This was one of the strongest picture categories with some great
images from a range of sports. In an action shot, the ball has to be part of the image. Without
the ball, the context of the action is lost. This hurt more than a couple of entries.

The two winners from Hewlett displayed their winning photos in almost full page glory on their
sports section front. Great use of two amazing sports shots. The silvers were both interesting
images, one action, one sidelines.

EDITORIAL CARTOON (portfolio)

      Gold          Kimberlyn Bailey, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

                    Dan Schoeneck, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS

      Silver        Suzanne Wu, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester
      Bronze       Stella Min, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS

                   Ryan Wright, Rodequoit, Irondequoit HS

                   Jesse Aninful, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community
                   Justice, New York

      HM           Diamond Santana Williams, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy
                   and Community Justice, New York

Judge’s Comments
>>The biggest problem with several of these entries was that the point of the cartoon—and in
some cases, its subject—was unclear.

The gold winning entries were not only well executed but in most cases were clear about the
point they were making.

PHOTOGRAPHER (portfolio)

      Gold         Natasha Boghani, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester

                   Elizabeth Bromsted, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

      Silver       Noelle Antignano, Spectrum, Locust Valley HS

                   Andrew Goodwin, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

                   Monek Cullen, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

      Bronze       Mark Belcher, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

                   Adelaide Palum, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

Judge’s Comments
>>Portfolios showed good range. In some cases, good pictures were hurt by poor use in the
paper, especially when too many photos were run together in small sizes. Less is more. Edit
carefully or give the photos more pages.

DESIGN (portfolio)

      Gold         Taquasia Wilson, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and
                   Community Justice, New York

                   Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

      Silver       Mark Belcher, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

                   Beatrice Malsky, The Journal, Guilderland HS
       Bronze       Julia Gaiser, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

                    Katie Muldowney, The Spectator, Fredonia HS

       HM           Jake Moffett, Curtis Log, Curtis HS, Staten Island


Judge’s Comments
>>It’s really great to see schools taking chances with design. Some great examples of full-page,
and double truck designs in which visuals were carefully planned to provide interest in the
topics. In other cases, pictures were fully integrated in the designs in effective ways.

PICTURE LAYOUT/PICTURE STORY

       Gold         Staff, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community Justice,
                    New York
                    “Open mic night”

                    Julia Gaiser, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Musical”

       Silver       Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Twins”

                    Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “March Madness”

       Bronze       Perry Goffneer and Mirabella Katz, Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS
                    “Fashion Show”

                    Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “March Madness”

Judge’s Comments
>>Success in this category depends on two essential points: quality of images displayed and
creative image succession within the layout. Choose photos that add to each other, but at
the same time each tell their own part of the story for a complete layout. Every layout has to
have a dominant image (something large), but pay attention to placement on the page to
create a visual hierarchy that leads a reader down the page/through the piece. Some entries
did not have a dominant image which immensely weakens their submission for judging. Pages
that look like scrapbooks are visually confusing. Also, visual redundancy weakened entries.
Every picture on a layout should advance the story/topic, not merely repeat it. Also important,
photos shouldn’t be stretched to fit spaces on a layout.
COLUMNIST (portfolio)

       Gold         Jesse Ellis-Wexler, Trapezoid, Brighton HS
                    “Jest Jesse”
                    Hadas Werman, Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS
                    “Werman’s words of wisdom”

                    Sophia Jaffe, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber HS, Port Washington
                    “Opinion” columns

       Silver       Noah Kaplan, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Commentaries”

                    Vanessa Sheffield, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Signed Columns”

                    Emily DiFabio, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Signed Columns”

       Bronze       Katelyn Stahlman, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Blonde moment”

                    Christian Deakin, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “As I see it”

                    Samantha DeJesus, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Columns”

       HM           Christina Buckingham, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Signed Columns”

                    Jackie Salo, The Courant, Commack HS
                    “Underage thinking”

                    Chrissy Cody, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Columns”

                    Jess Cohen, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS
                    “Columns”
Judge’s Comments
>>This was quite a strong category with many strong entries. Good to see students writing
commentary on subjects ranging from serious school issues to vignettes of personal
experiences. Good to see columnists moving away from trite issues such as senioritis, school
spirit, etc. Write from what you know and can share that will interest someone.
There is generally an expectation that columns look different from other material, often with
a photo of the writer, or a standing column title. Some entries did this, others did not. Since
this material is first person, it should be indicated as opinion writing in some way. A few sports
and entertainment columns here that would have been more appropriately placed in Sports
Column or Entertainment Column categories.
Good column writers often have unique personal writing styles that create interest with readers.

FRONT PAGE (portfolio)

       Gold         Staff, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber HS, Port Washington

                    Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

                    Staff, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community Justice,
                    New York

       Silver       Julia Gaiser, Brocton Review, Brocton HS

                    Staff, The Courant, Commack HS

       Bronze       Wally Gurzynski, Spectrum, Locust Valley HS

                    Sarah Kaduc and Jonathan Schor, Trapezoid, Brighton HS

       HM           Staff, The Journal, Guilderland HS

Judge’s Comments
>>Each front page needs an emphasis on a strong, dominant visual entry point to focus the
reader’s attention. After that, it’s about visual hierarchy with typography and story placement
so the reader flows logically through the content. Consistency in spacing is important in
keeping the layout flowing, too. Dense, long legs of type with no visual attention are reader
turn-offs. Some of the best entries in this category are newspapers that use their front pages
as covers to promote a major story or in-depth look inside.

LAYOUT & TYPOGRAPHY (portfolio)

       Gold         Staff, The Courant, Commack HS

                    Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

       Silver       Nabiha Ahsan and Ann Wang, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester

                    Stanford Schor and Divya Seth, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester

       Bronze       Staff, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

       HM           Staff, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS

Judge’s Comments
>>When designers create a strong connection between the visual and verbal aspects of
pages, readers are rewarded. Switching typography is appropriate for special content
and occasional features, but designers should also concentrate on working with standard
typography, too. Displaying pictures effectively is what makes good layout. Staffs who tackle
double truck designs and single topic pages should take advantage of all the design tools to
make these pages distinct, readable and inviting to readers.

NEWS STORY

      Gold          Sarah Mahmood, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS
                    “Senior prank creates sticky situation“

                    Sammy Caiola, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “Student saviors lend a helping hand”

                    Andrew Seo, Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schroeber HS, Port Washington
                    “Blue and white night cancelled indefinitely”

      Silver        Jackie Salo, The Courant, Commack HS
                    “Costume choice falls into the ‘gray’ “

                    Hannah Fagen, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber HS,
                    Port Washington
                    “Expanded senior experience program provides new opportunities”

                    Eric Brooks and Jordan Friedman, Spectrum, G.W. Hewlett HS
                    “Hewlett responds to Homecoming violence”

      Bronze        Rachel Clark, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS
                    “Schools discipline students for Facebook activities”

                    Sarah Mahmood, The Classic, Townsend Harris HS, Flushing
                    “Chung, Canzoneri provoke ‘hysteria’ “

                    Carrie Bartlett, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester
                    “Distance education comes to BHS”

      HM            Sahil Doshi and Leah Nash, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber HS,
                    Port Washington
                    “Budget on the brink”

                    Lauren Effune, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schreiber HS, Port Washington
                    “Scheduling problems abound as students return”

                    Florence Craft, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community
                    Justice, New York
                    “The most deadly game”
                    Florence Craft, The Advocate, MLK HS for Law, Advocacy and Community
                    Justice, New York
                    “Fight Knight”

                    Samantha Caiola and Adrian Vatchinsky, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
                    “All afternoon activities face axe if budget fails”

                    Liz Bromsted, Brocton Review, Brocton HS
                    “Extracurricular activities vital to schools”

                    Katya Barrett, The Schreiber Times, Paul D. Schroeber HS, Port Washington
                    “Community participates in 350, an international climate action”

Judge’s Comments
>>Winners demonstrated an ability to report in depth but translated their reporting in clear
prose. The stories showed a deeper side to the issues.

SPORTS COLUMN (portfolio)

      Gold          Ryan Young, The Courant, Commack HS

      Silver        Ryan Byrnes, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS

      Bronze        Owen O’Brien, Wantagh Warrior, Wantagh HS

                    Pat Phillips, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS

      HM            Michael Liu, Trapezoid, Brighton HS, Rochester


Judge’s Comments
>>Proofread: grammatical, stylistic and spelling errors can distract the reader. Work to
establish your own voice. When someone reads a sports column they should instinctively know
it was written by you. Focus on one issue or idea and carry it throughout our column.

ENTERTAINMENT/REVIEW (portfolio)

      Gold          Sandy Uwimana, Trapezoid, Brighton HS

                    Kimberlyn Bailey, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

      Silver        Alec Stern, Horizon, Lynbrook HS

                    Chrissy Cody, RamPage, Jamesville-DeWitt HS

                    Sammy Caiola and Samantha Griswold, Maroon Echo, Bay Shore HS
      Bronze       Megan Ciasullo, Wantagh Warrior, Wantagh HS

                   Vanessa Sheffield, Buccaneer Bulletin, Oswego HS

Judge’s Comments
>>Overall, the category is pretty strong. The only thing is sometimes the entries appeared to
be columns more than entertainment or review writing. Make sure you know the difference
between personal opinion columns and entertainment writing.

A good review provides important information for busy readers who might be making a decision
about seeing a movie or eating at a restaurant, for instance. Column writers should make sure to
offer concrete examples about the strenghts and weaknesses of the form they are critiquing.

				
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