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―Shame‖ by Dick Gregory
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• In the autobiographical narrative, ―Shame‖, Richard
  Gregory comments on the ignorance of the majority
  of society towards the suffering of the
  underprivileged through the use of details, dialogues,
  and anecdotes.
• Gregory’s usage of seemingly trivial details effectively
  elicits sympathy and connects on a deeper, emotional
  [level] with the readers.
• Gregory’s selective dialogue vividly portrays the
  exchange between characters as well as reflects their
• In the last anecdote Gregory insightfully reveals and
  emphasizes his negative opinion against society’s
  approach to aiding the disadvantaged.
• Gregory comments on        • “comments” = vague.
  the ignorance of the         What IS the comment?
  majority of society
                               What is the PURPOSE?
  towards the suffering of
  the underprivileged
                             • TS should always connect
• Gregory’s selective          back to device/effect in
  dialogue vividly             relation to the purpose.
  portrays the exchange        – Additionally, the reader is
  between characters as
                                 incited by Gregory’s
  well as reflects their
                                 selective use of dialogue.
• In the last anecdote     • The whole essay is a
  Gregory insightfully
  reveals and emphasizes     string of anecdotes.
  his negative opinion     • “Reveals and emphasizes
  against society’s          his negative opinion” is a
  approach to aiding the
  disadvantaged.             set up for Gregory’s
                             negative opinion--is that
                             your goal in this
• Dick Gregory successfully utilizes realistic imagery
  and dialogue in his autobiography ―Shame‖ to
  invoke a feeling of empathy and understanding.
  – Creates a general feeling of empathy? Be specific.
    Empathy for what or whom?
• Gregory’s use of vivid imagery appeals to the
  reader’s emotions by placing them at the scene.
  – “placing them at the scene” = broad
• The dialogue throughout the narrative accurately
  reflects how various characters are treated by
  society, eliciting pathos from the reader.

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• Gregory uses strong juxtaposition, varied sentence
  and paragraph structure, and simplistic diction
  throughout ―Shame‖ to effectively illustrate the lack
  of sufficient action and compassion given to those in
• By juxtaposing the soft and kind nature associated
  with ideas such as school and goodwill with their
  harsh realities, Gregory establishes a powerful image
  of unsympathetic action.
• Gregory’s pairing of short and abrupt sentences and
  paragraphs with prolonged and anecdotal structure
  conveys a sense of impassion.
• Gregory’s diverse use of diction allows for a
  familiarizing account of his belief that the help given
  to the poor is often lacking in substance and emotion.
• In his personal narrative, Dick Gregory uses
  chronological point of view and empathetic word
  choice evokes pathos in his readers which provokes
  personal reflection and immediate action.
• Gregory's use of differing point of view allows
  universal application for personal reflection.
• Gregory also utilizes precise word choice to strike
  sympathy with the reader, creating a sense of
  urgency and a call to action.
• Through the use of repetition, juxtaposition and
  anecdotes, Gregory attempts to incite the reader into
  acting on feelings of compassion, but is unsuccessful
  and simply alienates and discomforts his readers.
• Gregory’s use of repetition effectively emphasizes
  specific points in the narrative, however it fails to
  invoke any sort of action instead inviting pity within
  the reader.
• Rather than shaping an effective picture of young
  Gregory’s situation, Gregory’s utilization of
  juxtaposition instead alienates the reader.
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• In the personal narrative ―Shame‖, Dick Gregory
  uses foreshadowing and repetition to stir the
  emotions of the audience.
  – No purpose is idenitfed; WHY does he want to create an
    emotional response from the reader? Also, word choice
    here is informal (―stir‖)
• Gregory’s use of repetition emphasizes his ability
  to gain the sympathy of the reader.
  – Again, WHY does he want to gain this sympathy?
• Gregory uses foreshadowing to add to the
  suspense of the story.
  – Redundant. BY definition foreshadowing adds
• Gregory effectively uses sentence structure,
  dialogue, analogy and imagery to illicit ethos.
   – Is it possible to elicit credibility/character?
   – As with the previous example, WHY does he want to do
     this? Missing the purpose.
• The use of ellipses and repetitive phrases to mimic
  the nature of a real life conversation, effectively
  avoiding the common pitfall of authors, fake and
  mundane dialogue.
   – This isn’t a complete sentence…
   – Generalizes/criticizes other writers (this isn’t your goal
     when responding about style
   – Lacks a clear purpose
• Gregory incorporates imagery to make characters
  realistic, allowing readers to understand his
  position on the topic of charity.
• In the chapter ―Shame‖, Dick Gregory uses
  different tones and descriptive dialogue to get his
  point of view across to the reader.
   – What IS his point? Another example of not articulating
     your point.
• Gregory’s use of tone portrays the progression of
  his attitude throughout his childhood.
• Besides tone, Gregory also uses dialogue to
  strengthen the perspective of a seven-year-old child
  to illicit an emotional response from the reader.

• Overall this outline does not establish Gregory’s
  overall purpose. What would these bosy
  paragraphs discuss?
• Through his use of pathos, dialogue, and repetition,
  Gregory encourages the readers to reflect on oneself
  and one’s treatment of others.
  – This works as a purpose, especially is it’s developed in
    subsequent blocks.
• Gregory’s use of pathos causes the reader to pity him
  and his situation, triggering one’s heart and
  – Is this really Gregory’s purpose? Does he want you to feel
    sorry for him? WHY? (that is the real purpose).
• By using dialogue, Gregory emphasizes his innocence
  and brings the reader to that time and place.
  – As with the earlier example, WHY does Gregory want to
    bring you into the story? Remember, this is the goal of
    every narrative.
• (2nd period ended here)
• Dick Gregory uses dialogue, repetition and pathos
  to connect his character with the reader.
• The use of dialogue portrays the character’s traits
  so that the reader can understand the character.
• The use of repetition emphasizes the problems that
  Richard experiences.

• Again, an example of the missing purpose: WHY
  does he want to “connect his character with the
  reader”? Why does he want the reader to
  understand the character or emphasize the
  problems he experiences?
• The author Dick Gregory uses pathos and
  anecdotes in order to emotionally bring the reader
  to the story and that all people have prejudice.
• By the use of the wino anecdote at the end of the
  story, Gregory causes the reader to look within
  himself and see the universal prejudice without the
  anecdote the reader would overlook the purpose of
  the story.
• Dialogue is used in order to make a much more
  intimate encounter rather than a narration.
• With the use of point of view, dialogue, and
  metaphors, Dick Gregory makes us pity young
  Richard throughout the story.
• Dick Gregory uses Richard’s seven-year-old point
  of view to make us pity Richard.
• Gregory uses dialogue to emphasize Richard’s
  ignorance about the world.

• This whole outline gets at “story” rather than
  purpose; the pity is not the purpose; also quite
  general in the claims it establishes

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