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					Memorandum
To: Mickey
From Aaron Tochalauski
Date: October 1, 2004
Re: Forklift comparision

Froklift                   Electric                   Gasoline

price                      37,250                     $49,000
Max payload                1,000 lbs                  2,000 lbs
Max speed                  30 mph                     40 mph
Max height                 6 feet*                    12 feet
                           *2-foot ramp needed
                           will stop production for   widen entrée door will stop
Accessories                3 days cost $1,600         work for 2 days, $800

                                                      Exhaust fan
                                                      $870
Peventive Maint.           $700                       $400
Service Repairs            $800                       $600
Replacement parts          500 miles                  17 miles

Injury Record              good                       good
Operation Record           none at all                none reported
Damage to goods            very little                none

Fuel                       $2,000                     $1,800

enviormentaly safe         yes                        no

Total:
First year                 $43,850                    $53,470
each additional year       $3,500                     $2,800
Memorandum
To:
From : Aaron Tochalauski
Date: October 8, 2004
Re: Process Documentation

Overview
This memo is to help you the read better under stand the changes in which my forklift
memo went through when I was improving upon it from draft one to draft two.

Comparison Tables
Tables I discovered are much more adequate at the task put before me. Tables provide
Mickey the reader the ability to quickly skim the information at the information that is
needed for him to make his decision. I decided to omit any type of paragraphs and
sentences with in my final memo because being in Mickey’s place I would just prefer to
have the table in front of me with out any sentences to distract my decision. Also I have
found out from experience as well as reading other peoples memo’s and process
documentation memos that when using paragraph form, the further you go the more
difficult it becomes to remain unbiased towards one subject or the other. In paragraph
form the reader Mickey would also have an increasingly difficult time at trying to
remember important facts and figure when making his decision. Were as just the table
groups topics that are in close proximity to one another into one centralized location
allowing Mickey to better compare the specific figures of both forklifts. All in all in my
opinion using just a table in my final draft of the Forklift memo to Mickey almost
completely avoids any attempt at me giving any of my personal thoughts and input in the
memo, to confuse or deter Mickey from making his own decision.
Memorandum
To: Mickey
From: Aaron Tochalauski
Date: September 27, 2004
Re: Improving Forklift operations

        This memo will layout the facts and figures of the two different forklifts so that
you can make a well informed judgment on which of the two would me most reasonable,
cost effective, and is safe for employees and the Goods being hauled around with them.

Electric Forklift                                    Gasoline Forklift
       Price: $37,250                                       Price: $49,000
       Max Payload: 1,000 lbs                               Max Payload: 1 Ton
       Max Speed: 30 mph                                    Max Speed: 40 mph
       Max Height: 6 foot                                   Max Height: 12 feet

       Accessories:                                         Accessories:
       2-Foot Ramp: $1,600                                  Widen Entrée Door: $800
               *Will stop production for 3 days.           *Will stop production for 2 days.
       Battery Charger: $1,500                              Exhaust fan: $870
       Electric per year: $2,000                            Gasoline per year: $1,800
       Preventative Maintenance per year: $700              Prevent. Maint. Pr/yr: $400
       Service Repairs per year: $800                       Service Repairs Pr/yr: $600

       Replacement Parts: 500 miles away                    Replacement Parts: 17 miles
       Operation Record: Good                               Operation Record: Good
       Injury Record: none at all                           Injury Record: none
       Damage to Goods: very little                         Damage to Goods: none

       Total cost First Year: $43,850                       Total cost 1stt Year: $53,470
       Cost per year: $3,500                                Cost per year: $2,800

Review
        Electric
        The Electric Forklift is more environmentally safe and costs less to purchase, but
will halt production for three days to install the 2-foot ramp, and wind up costing more in
the long run. Also replacement parts would have to be ordered over the phone and
shipped from 500 miles away.
        Gasoline
        The Gasoline Forklift is less environmentally safe and costs more to purchase, but
will only halt production for two days to wide the doors and install the fan, and in the
long run will end up costing less. Also replacement parts needed to order would only
have to be shipped from only 17 miles away.
Memorandum
To:
From: Aaron Tochalauski
Date: October 6, 2004
Re: forklift process documentation

Overview
This memo is to help you the read better under stand the changes in which my forklift
memo went through when I was improving upon it from draft one to draft two.


Comparison Tables
In my first draft I decided to just highlight the main topics from the information provided
an arrange them into a table like format in Microsoft Word. This made the comparison
between the two different forklifts much easier then having it all inserted in paragraph
format forcing the reader, Mickey to strain himself in trying to compare some of the
numbers of each forklift. Then added a couple of paragraphs on the end to recap a few
statements and give a little bit of input.

The major changes made to the first draft making it in to the second draft was that in
stead of keeping the table like format in Microsoft Word with a couple of extra
paragraphs at the end I cut out the paragraphs as to not impart any outside influence unto
Mickey as he is trying to make the decision. Also I remade the table in Microsoft Excel
so that I would not have to deal with the annoying work of making it look like a table
using spaces and tabs in Microsoft Word.
Wed, 06 Oct 2004 13:41:02 -0400

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rprince@emich.edu    Block Address

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pdm feedback #2

 To:
atochalau@emich.edu

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rprince@emich.edu

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chunk: comparison tables

1) what is happening in the chunk?
- this paragraph basically talks about why you used the table format
within the memo.

what you did:
- you did give a reason why you should use a table.
- you also gave good information about the tables

what you need to do:
-
 you need to give the audience something to compare to. you tell why

the table is good but you dont compare it to the paragraph form, whic
h
shows the tables true advantages
-you also need to use better alignment. to do this you need to break
your paragraph into more than just one paragraph. It needs to be
seperated into sub topics and they need to be explained why it is an
advantage.
- there is also no forms of repitition in the pdm. Because there is
only one paragraph, the audience has nothing to compare it to.
- also the topic heaading needs to be channged in order for it to jump
out at the reader. Comparison tables does not grab my attention.

overall:
- What i see is a good start in the way you give information. However,
I think that you may need to describe the reasons why in a little bit
more detail and use comparison throughout the pdm.
 Date:
Fri, 08 Oct 2004 13:30:36 +0000

 From:
"Sarah Bammel" <pixi714@hotmail.com>         Block Address

 Subject:
process doc memo critic

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 atochalau@emich.edu, steve.benninghoff@emich.edu,
sbammel@emich.edu

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You talk about what you did in your first draft, don’t do this, just
explain
why the final document looks the way it does. Why did you use a
table…because putting things in a table makes it easy to compare, and

then
go from there explaining how you don’t have to remember things from
 one
paragraph to another, and this and that. Your heading is good, I know

what
you are going to be talking about in the following section of the memo.

 The
heading is nice and bold so it stands out, and draws the eye to it.
You
also have the heading underlined which just helps bring the eye to it.
However, you have a space between the two paragraphs. We just lear
ned
about
proximity, at first glance I would think that second paragraph would be

another section. But after reading, I see it is still part of the
previous
section. Get rid of that space and use an indent to show a new
paragraph,
this way it won’t look like it should be a different section and that
you
missed a heading.
~Sarah
Memorandum
To: Mickey
From: Aaron Tochalauski
Date: September 27, 2004
Re: Improving Forklift operations

        This memo will layout the facts and figures of the two different forklifts so that
you can make a well informed judgment on which of the two would me most reasonable,
cost effective, and is safe for employees and the Goods being hauled around with them.

Electric Forklift                                    Gasoline Forklift
       Price: $37,250                                       Price: $49,000
       Max Payload: 1,000 lbs                               Max Payload: 1 Ton
       Max Speed: 30 mph                                    Max Speed: 40 mph
       Max Height: 6 foot                                   Max Height: 12 feet

       Accessories:                                         Accessories:
       2-Foot Ramp: $1,600                                  Widen Entrée Door: $800
               *Will stop production for 3 days.           *Will stop production for 2 days.
       Battery Charger: $1,500                              Exhaust fan: $870
       Electric per year: $2,000                            Gasoline per year: $1,800
       Preventative Maintenance per year: $700              Prevent. Maint. Pr/yr: $400
       Service Repairs per year: $800                       Service Repairs Pr/yr: $600

       Replacement Parts: 500 miles away                    Replacement Parts: 17 miles
       Operation Record: Good                               Operation Record: Good
       Injury Record: none at all                           Injury Record: none
       Damage to Goods: very little                         Damage to Goods: none

       Total cost First Year: $43,850                       Total cost 1stt Year: $53,470
       Cost per year: $3,500                                Cost per year: $2,800

Review
        Electric
        The Electric Forklift is more environmentally safe and costs less to purchase, but
will halt production for three days to install the 2-foot ramp, and wind up costing more in
the long run. Also replacement parts would have to be ordered over the phone and
shipped from 500 miles away.
        Gasoline
        The Gasoline Forklift is less environmentally safe and costs more to purchase, but
will only halt production for two days to wide the doors and install the fan, and in the
long run will end up costing less. Also replacement parts needed to order would only
have to be shipped from only 17 miles away.

				
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