Smiley Face Tricks Smiley Face by nikeborome

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									Smiley Face Tricks
   1. Magic Three: three parallel groups of
    words usually separated by commas,
    that create a poetic rhythm or add
    support for a point, especially when the
    three word groups have their own
   Simple Example: He stood up, spun
    around, and then sat back down.
Example #2
 Instead of staying dark, day and night, every
 morning shutters fly open,
 the sun streams in a tidal wave of gold light,
 and our family cat meows persistently until we
 all awaken to greet our day. (Monica)
 Example #3

 Although I try to inhale deeply, I
 cannot regulate the rise and fall of
 my heavy chest. My palms become
 sticky and shaky, my neck tingles
 with anticipation, and my body
 begins to feel limp and cold and
 white like a corpse (Kay)
Figurative Language
 2. Figurative Language—Non-literal comparisons—
  such as similes, metaphors, personification, and
  hyperboles—add “spice” to writing and can
 help paint a more vivid picture for the reader.
 A simile is a comparison using the words like or as.
 A metaphor is a comparison without using comparison
 Personification is writing about an inanimate object as
  if it is had thoughts or feelings.
 A hyperbole is an exaggeration.
   A simile uses a comparing word such as
    ‗like‘, or ‗as‘. It compares two things that may
    or may not be that much alike.
   ―He is like a tree.‖
   He is tall and so is the tree, but the tree has
    roots and branches and squirrels, while he
    has homework and mental problems. They
    are alike in some ways and different in
Simile Examples
   He was strong as an ox.
   She was like a marshmallow.
   He smelled bad, like mold.

   A simile is NOT like this: She liked him.
   A metaphor is also a comparison, but unlike a
    simile, it says that the one thing is the other
    thing… even though the author is really just
   ―Jim is a rock.‖
   The author doesn‘t mean Jim is really a rock.
    The author means that he is solid and
    unchanging and you can depend on him, so he
    is similar to a rock in those ways.
Metaphor Examples
 His words were knives piercing my very soul.

 The missing homework was a big hammer about
 to come down on me.

 Greg was a big pig when it came to eating tacos.
 Personificationis the use of words in
 a sentence to make it appear as
 though an inanimate object has
 feelings or thoughts.
Personification Examples
   My dad’s truck hated me: Every time I
    had to be somewhere on time, it refused
    to start.

   The sky was threatening and angry.

   The report card glared at me evilly,
    mocking me with its low numbers.
   A hyperbole is an exaggeration that’s obvious to the
    reader. The author isn’t trying to fool you with it.
    He’s just trying to make the writing more interesting
    by sharing the fun exaggeration with you.
   “My brother smells like an open sewer in a tropical
    third-world country.”
   The reader knows that the brother doesn’t smell like
    thousands of gallons of festering sewage – he just
    smells like unwashed armpits and feet – but the
    obvious exaggeration makes the writing more fun.
Hyperbole Examples
   There is no escaping my five-year-old daughter:
    Every time I really need to do something, she sets
    something on fire or cuts her leg with a chainsaw or
    pours five gallons of canola oil onto the kitchen

    I looked up and saw a buzzard the size of a 747,
    flying off with the carcass of a dead cow.

   The frog was such a celebrated leaper that it could
    jump all the way across Lake Lewisville!
Specific Details
   3. Specific Details for Effect: Instead of
    general, vague descriptions, specific sensory
    details help the reader visualize the person,
    place, thing, or idea that the writer is

     The author tries to help you feel like you are
    seeing, hearing, tasting, feeling, or smelling
    the things that are in the writing.
 The truck was white a faded dirty white color.
 Its old engine rumbled and belched loudly as
 it chugged along. Its sides felt rough and dirty
 under our grubby little fingers. It smelled
 horrible, like exhaust fumes and old rotten
 milk. But the ice cream tasted like melted
 sunshine with sugar and cream. Oh, how we
 loved to hear that corny old music getting
 louder in the distance…
Repetition for Effect
   4. Repetition for Effect—Writers often
    repeat specially chosen words
    or phrases to make a point.

Bob ate some pizza. After that, Bob ate
 more pizza. Then, finally, Bob ate some
Repetition for Effect

   Example: I‘m going to win this contest –
    even if it means working day and night. I‘m
    going to win this contest – even if it means
    lying to my mom. I‘m going to win this
    contest – even if it means I have to cheat.
    I‘m going to win this contest!

 This kid is strong. This kid is honest. This
 kid is brave. This kid is my brother
Expanded Moment

5. Expanded Moment—Instead of
 ―speeding‖ past a moment, writers often
 emphasize it by ―expanding‖ the action.
• Example:

• When I pedal to a stop, I kick off my
 sandy shoes and remove my gold and
 lavender kite from my backpack. The wind
 picks up the graceful creature and lets it
 soar among the seagulls. As I ease myself
 into the water—the string wrapped
 securely around my wrist--I can first smell,
 then taste the ocean’s saltiness.
Freezing cold, the water numbs my toes,
and I feel nothing but a sharp, teasing
sensation. As I sit on my cushion of sand,
I slowly wiggle my fingers and toes,
gradually submerging them completely. I
hold the sand up in the air and let it slip
through my fingers like stickier versions of
particles in an hour glass. I stretch
out completely now and watch the wind’s
fingers take my kite higher still. (Marcus)
   6. Humor: Good writers know the value of
    laughter; even a little bit of humor can help
    turn an otherwise boring paper into
    something more interesting.

    Do you know what I hate? I hate rhetorical

    I married "Miss Right". Unfortunately, I didn't
    know that her first name was "Always".
Humor Examples

 I want to die in my sleep like my
 grandfather... not screaming like his

 Politics: From the Greek "poli" meaning
 "many", and "tics―, meaning blood-sucking
Hyphenated Modifiers

  7. Hyphenated Modifiers—Sometimes a new
   way of saying something can make all the
   difference. Hyphenated modifiers are modifiers
   that use a hyphen between two or more
   descriptive words to emphasize the words.
   Hyphenated adjectives often cause the reader
   to ―sit up and take notice.‖
  Ex: The boy‘s caramel-brown eyes scanned
   the long-awaited letter.

   Sarah‘s head was down, her neck bent into a
    ―C‖, and she was moving her hand across
    the page of her notebook in what I
    recognized as the I‘m-pretending-
    to-take -notes-but-really-planning-the-
    complete-and-total-social-ruin-of Kathy-Hollis
    posture. (Erin)
*Note that there is NO hyphen between the last
   adjective and the noun.
 He had a gopher-like appearance.

 He looked at me with blackish-blue-eyes.
Full-Circle Ending
8. Full-Circle Ending—Sometimes
 students need a special ending, one
 that effectively ―wraps up‖ the piece. Full-
 circle ending is when the author starts and
 ends the first paragraph or portion and the
 last paragraph or portion with sentences
 that are similar or the same. The
 sentences can be a little bit different, but
 will have similar structure and/or wording.
 I sit quietly on the old wooden deck,
 watching the birds soar through the
 humid air. The ocean’s waves are like
 wrinkles gathered up in place. The
 clouds are so delicate, so fragile, yet
 a single plane could not break their
 perfect form. I sit quietly on the old
 wooden deck, watching the birds, the
 waves, the clouds. (Lee)
Why use Smiley Face Tricks?
   It’s what good authors do.
   It makes your writing more specific.
   It helps paint a picture for your audience.
   It helps make your writing more interesting.
   A more interesting paper makes for an
    entertained grader.

   A happy grader is a generous grader!

   Make the effort to get the score you
    deserve! You’ll be glad you did.

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