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Practice While reviewing this area, consider these things: -Duty and honor and roles Introduce the information in a less obvious way. The information below might be gathered by dialogue and events. Since the beginning of mortal memory, humanity has existed. From an untraceable beginning, they have spread out and evolved into so many different things. They have mastered all technologies and rediscovered every secret. Out of the many, there are a surprising few who could be said to have really progressed. There was a planet known by it’s inhabitants as Homeworld, and it’s history follows a common pattern. Since the early days of settlement, the most dominant people had the most power. The most dominant man told the weak to unite with each other under him so they can survive, and his legacy and philosophy lasted for over a thousand years in a the country he founded. It was known as the Aristocracy, and since it was the only recognizable nation in the world it needed no official name. It was founded on certain ideals, and these made the nation tremendous, the people loyal and hardworking, cooperative, and the entire nation stable. In exchange for stability was stagnation. A thousand years after settlement, the technology largely relied on coal- and waterproduced electricity and steam. All the advanced technology the original settlers brought was carefully controlled, and most people lived their lives without any knowledge outside their niche. Almost all of the world was part of the Aristocracy, and most of the inhabitants of the Aristocracy lived together in an overbuilt metropolis. The city was so dense many parts were built in different tiers, like strata in rock. Roads and train tracks overlapped in a complex but elegant way that was a product of hundreds of years of practice. The spread of the city made the world a smoggy grey, and most of the plant life that was grown before settlement was consumed for industry, so all the land that was not built on was stony grassland. The city and the nation’s power would have been impossible were it not for the convenient geography of the world. Contiguous continents did not exist, all the water flowed in lakes, carving many narrow islands in a lateral direction. The ease of travel from this geography connected the entire world closely. -Change this part to be from the point of view of a policeman assigned to keep watch on the family, or a number of reports by other agents connected into one report.

- Earlier note: Ludic comes from a planet that has ties to greater powers, like a mostly isolated country such as 19th century Japan with some ties to other powers. It was isolationist but they had interests with other nations. Assembled report on Ludic Pravin, assembled for the cause of the sanctity of the People of the Nation: On this world, a boy was born into a common family. His grandfather was once a part of the influential class, but he separated himself and so his family would never be allowed into the better class. His name was Ludic Pravin. There was nothing notable about him until the age of 5 [6 and a half], when he met someone outside his class and his society. “Mommy, who are those strange people we see here sometimes?” he asked his mother one day. She was walking him from the school train. “Those are foreigners.” “Are they from a different country?” “No. They aren’t from the world, they from a place called Barren. Some nights you can see their home among the stars. Why, are you afraid of them?” They exited the station building and walked down the stairs to the lower streets. “No. My friends say the people from different countries are bad. Mr. Senior Governor said so yesterday on the radio. But those foreigners aren’t from another country. I saw some my age playing at the train yard, and they didn’t do mean things like the people from the other countries do. May I see them?” They now reached the bottom street and walked down it. “I don’t know. Such people scare me. If a policeman recognizes you talking with one them they might confiscate things from us again. I remember your grandfather had a lot of strange friends, and I’ve heard that’s the reason why we didn’t inherit anything.” “How long have those people been coming here?” “I don’t know. Before your grandfather I think” “Grandpa said meeting new people helped him learn. You want me to do well in school, so if I learn from them I’ll do better.” “I remember him saying that. I see you’re really interested in meeting them. You can go later, after you’ve done all your work. But tomorrow at school, don’t tell your friends and teachers. I’ll let you go as long as you don’t talk about it with anyone but me, and I want you to tell me everything. What are they teaching you at school? ” “They teach me what they teach all the kids. I’m just curious.”

Ludic Pravin and Mother Pravin walked down the road to their home, a bottom street apartment that flooded often. It had a shared bedroom and a combined kitchen and congregating room. It was an average home set aside for small families of three, though most families were very large. The Pravin family name used to bring respect from the lesser class, but since his grandfather fell out with the state and was executed, his descendants were reduced in status. The only thing that set them apart now was somewhat unusually high intelligence and unusually frequent police surveillace. Ludic’s mother and her siblings were left without inheritance after her father’s death, so they had no more opportunities than anyone else. His mother adapted surprisingly well. She seemed to prefer the life of a commoner, even though she didn’t fit into the life perfectly. Ludic’s father had been accused of marrying her because she was the nearest he could get to reaching the higher social rank. The respect the family received from their peers was high, but their status was kept at the lowest possible as punishment for their grandfather’s offenses. During late sunset, Ludic ran to the train yard to meet the aliens. Sometimes he went there to watch the trains pass by and to watch the cars being moved through the levels. He found them on the tracks. He walked up to the fence that separated the rails from the road. -Barreners are rarely seen in public there, so it seems kind of unlikely that he simply sees them in his neighborhood. Maybe there are other curious kids, but out of all of them he is the only one that fits in and earns their respect. Maybe he meets one of them in school, because the mother wants them to gain the culture. After that, maybe he follows them to the train yards they go to regularly after school, or he talked to the friend and he invites him. Maybe the conversation with his mother goes on after he finds out where he can meet them, and after that he follows them the next day. “Hey! Why are you on the tracks?” “We already told the workers. We can jump out of the way!” After this he stood near the fence and watched them for a while. Ludic was usually shy. There were five of them, all around his age. They looked a lot like the people he knew, but they had darker skin then he had ever seen, and their hair was white and reddish. The contrast under the setting sun made them even more strange to him. The clothes they wore were unlike any he had seen, because they had style. The aliens had hairy tails and pointed fuzzy ears, and the were taller and thinner than him but he could tell they were his age. Ludic liked how they reminded him of his pet at home. “Why are you standing there? Don’t you people always have to work?” said the same boy. He had short red hair and wore “No. My momma let’s me play when I’m done working. Not all kids my age can do that though.”

“Well if you came to play with us, why are you standing there?” “I can’t jump away from trains.” “Really? That’s why? I heard most kids here would be afraid of us.” “I have no reason to be afraid.” He climbed over the fence and carefully walked over the tracks. “What are you guys doing here?” A girl in green told him “Our parents are visiting this city to negotiate with the contractors. They want to improve our town. We are one of the families that own a town on our planet.” “Really? I wouldn’t expect rich kids to play around trains like I do.” “We’re not rich, and there isn’t anywhere else we can go. Our parents are busy and the people here don’t like us.” “Why not?” “I don’t know. They all look afraid. Do you know why are all the people here the same? All of them are short, have black hair, dress in dull colors, and they’re friendly to each other but not to us. Is the whole world like this?” “I never thought of us as the same. People in other countries are different too. I don’t know why.” He wondered. “”Do you think we work a lot?” The oldest girl there suggested, “Maybe they work more because they live longer. They still get as much free time as we do.” “That seems right.” While the oldest boy, the oldest girl, the other boy and Ludic were talking, the two youngest girls were playing in the middle of a track. They were chasing each other around the rails. Not once did they trip or stumble, yet they were running faster than ludic ever saw a child run before. Ludic watched them with interest. “You don’t live like I do, do you? How do you live?” “I don’t know what you mean. We live in the middle of a town in the desert on Barren. Our family is one of the governing ones in our town, so we get a big house. Did you know the day and night are as long as a year on our world?” “No, I didn’t. I didn’t know anyone lived that way. Is it called barren because it’s empty?”

The girl said “I’m not surprised you don’t know. The planet is called barren by your people because the desert looks empty. This world looks like it’s completely covered with buildings, I like coming because it’s so different!” There was another pause. The oldest boy stated, “I hate this place.” The four of them talked for a while (the two youngest didn’t speak the Homeworld language). They told him about the world they lived on that was so different, and he learned things that most of his people never learned in their life. At his young age his experiences and what he knew moved into a new light and he questioned them. He walked back home when the sun was completely down, there would be more work tomorrow. He would meet these friends every day for the next few days, until they went back home. He kept his promise and didn’t talk about it with anybody.

For the next few years, he continued to attend school and do what was expected of him. His teachers and peers noted some unusual behavior and interest to continue education past his free [three years]. This wish was contradictory to what they expected, because he was unusually quiet and didn’t participate often in class activities. Even though he wanted more education, his parents didn’t have the money or desire to send him to a higher school. He worked as a trainee in the train yards. His preferred place was the depot he met his friends in, but for reasons never shared with him his employers would not let him work in any station or depot near a spaceport. He was enthusiastic whenever he caught a glimpse of somebody from Barren, but he was too afraid to talk to any of them. He didn’t have many friends, but the ones he had were kept close and they were quiet like him.

{include a lot more. Dialogue to, describing the world and things for the reader through conversation and showing character development. Sometime they could go in a boat through the canals} -In his childhood, point out that death was common and not treated the same way. The Barren kids have more appreciation for life and individuals. Until this point, he was not an individual. - Earlier Note: Put in plenty of cultural accidents. Maybe the point of one story can be the differences in different psyches and the question of how any can be right. - While he learns about them, he looks at her and says “There is something strange about your eyes.” because they dilate like a cat’s. Barreners are similar to cats, but they can also be compared to many types of animals. The similarities in appearance are pointed and furry ears, furry tail, retractable claws on the fingers and toes, and quickly dilating eyes. -cover the subject of the spaceships and who and what they are. -The idea is that she and Ludic change each other. They were unremarkable before they met each other, but it was their acquaintanceship that began things and made them special. Indicate what interest she has in him and his interest in them and her in the conversation. One thing to show about him is his growing curiosity.

-In their conversations, include history in the dialogue. Also show the culture of the people. -Earlier note: The two of them may know each other since a very young age, and they benefit each other throughout their lives. They learn about differences and become tolerant and understanding early on in their lives. -Earlier Note: The laws and religion and moral rules of Ludic’s planet should sound believable, like something that could exist if given the right circumstances. -The grandfather was an aristocrat. -Earlier note: It might be likely that Ludic’s common people actually are stupider than the rich ones, because a web site said (With graphs) that generally the poorer countries are stupider than the rich ones. If this is the case, maybe it should be so that a high-class grandparent deviated from the ideals of the major society and perhaps was killed, with some now low class children left behind, one of which is Ludic’s parents. -There s an incident a few days in where … drops a handkerchief as she walks. Ludic picks it up for her, but she laughs a little and tells him he can keep it. He stops to think about this and gets angry about it. She doesn’t want to take it back because he’s dirty, although the ground was dirty too. The anger isn’t mostly directed at her for being a snob, part of the anger is the idea of himself as a low class person in bad esteem, which is emerging with along with other ideas he is gaining. She also reconsiders things after this. Even at this age, she does like how he is getting out of his niche, since she herself is also like that. -They pass by a huge and put-of place building. It has high walls al around, and Ludic already learned to ignore it just as his people have, but the place attracts attention from the Barrener friends. It has a high wall without any entrances or signs, but it is very tall, even taller than any surrounding buildings. None of them know what it is, but it annoys the friends because they pick up a very high-pitched noise from it so they leave. The building is one of the numerous and necceasrry high-tech buildings. The people who use it are specially trained and taught to be very servetive of it’s operation. These people enter from underground. This building perhaps is a storehouse for items of technology and a communication center. The point is, that civilization needs to use some technology to sustain itself, but since that technology can change the people in the society and can’t be kept secret the people learn to ignore it. Many of these buildings exist to keep the environment stable and livable, since the planet wasn’t designed for all the pollution. None of them, however, know anything about it. -Make it clear that Barren is just as isolated as Homeworld. (The only person really on top of things is the Principal Aristocrat) Barren is a place that was stunted until Homeworld came by. It can be made int a sort of mystery, since the Barreners know only their own history and not that of Homeworld. (Such as: Where do the spaceships come from?) They are all equally uncertain about the spaceships and other higher technology things. -Many areas resemble miniature cities unto themselves. -Cathedral-like centers of government -Complicated but efficient system of subways and trains. -Maybe he tells them about how they are said to be bad people, and they all go out of their way to appear totally nice to prove him wrong, which enforces his belief later that all foreigners are good people.

-Most Homeworlders would be happy to live uninteresting lives. -Everybody has something in them that keeps them away from differences. Show this. His society is very ethnocentric. -Mybe they give grander descriptions of themselves, to increase interest in the story. -The word in the Homeworld language for the world is “Om” -Energy is constantly recycled. There can be no permanent reserves, such as endless petrol or such. Instead, they use plant that the original settlers brought with. One common plant is a rough black tree. It has green strands instead of leaves, and these dry up after a while and stick to the tree, where by some process they become part of the trunk. The trunk frys into a black coal-like thing, which can be chipped off for fuel. The frequent chipping makes it look rock-like. -There is no money in this society. It is unnecessary, since all power is centralized and there is a file on everybody.

Practice Other character Told from POV perhaps of a family chronicler. Look at past notes. She likes his perseverance and dedication to his station, even though he could do a lot for himself. He makes an impression that he is different from all the people she knew. Part of the reason she is friends with him and eventually leaves the system is that he is an eager friend, and she grows distant from other friends. Her life doesn’t grow more difficult as time goes on, except for her social life. Her mother goes crazy for some reason, and chooses her as the favorite. Her mother embraces some Homeworld culture and values, and that is a source of difficulty, and she encourages her daughter to come with on her trips. Her mother tries to apply Homeworld values to the place they live, such as assertion of their family office as permanently their and theirs only. Because of her mother, F is distanced from her acquaintances, friends, family, and community. -When rewriting later, don’t forget that while she changes him early on in life, he should also change her. -At the point in his life when his friends leave, he is content enough with his life, although he now is actually thinking about things in a new way (unlike his peers). He has a general respect for everybody, because he’s learned strangers may turn out to be perfectly acceptable people. He also gains some new appreciation for animals and an overall gentility. -She lives on a world where there never was a dominant way of living and people can vary wildly among their groups. Look at parts of Earth where this has been the case. Evolutionarily, people can vary wildly. There are places where women are taller than men. There are places where people don’t visibly have the same traits the Barreners are known for. Actually, maybe this planet is geo-socially similar to Earth. The variety of

environments is simpler though. The major factors are that the planet revolves slower, water is plentiful but underground, and it has a shorter geological history. -The acceptance of these foreigners betters him, but it also gets him in trouble. Of all the siblings, she gets along with him the most. -The family is a reatively wealthy bunch among a world of poor. She felt like all the Homeworlders were just untrustworthy imperialists, and they didn’t know any of them individually. Practice Returning to Ludic -He does have other friends, though none he appreciates as much as her and her siblings. A few friends, about three or four, stay his friends the whole time. On a fall night when Ludic was [13], he heard music. The sound was a violin, but Ludic didn’t know. Any music was an unusual event. Ludic was working, and his co-workers were all concerned about this unusual thing, but they assumed it was a wedding or some sort of thing. Ludic was more familiar with music, and recognized something about the song and instrument, and he left to find the source. He walked towards it, following the sound. He came to a large graveyard. His own class didn’t receive the esteemed memorial of a grave when they died; this cemetery was a place for the rich. He walked in through the front gate, it was open. He walked among the memorials and monuments to find the sound. The source was at the top of a narrow stone building he had passed a few times. One of his childhood friends was sitting there, the oldest girl from the railroad. He still recognized her, he would have recognized any of them. Her name was Nusa. He approached her place slowly so she wouldn’t be startled and leave. She startled him instead when she stopped playing and jumped down when he got close. “Do you remember me?” she asked. “Yes I do. How long were you aware of me?” “I’m hard to sneak up on. Are you here to warn me I might fall?” “No. I have never heard music like that before. Actually, I hoped it might be one of you people, but I’m lucky it was you. Why are you hear today?” She looked a little sad. “My family is doing business again. They came back to talk about what rights the Aristocracy has to my town. My parents are separating, and now your people are trying to steal a share in our town. They think our society works the same as theirs, but social positions don’t pass to different generations of a family. Property and rule are controlled by the people who it affects.” “Your parents are separating? Has something terrible happened?”

“No, nothing like that. It’s normal for a pair to separate when their children are independent enough. They’ll still be friends and they’ll still raise us. I hear it’s different on Homeworld.” “It’s very different, but I’m not surprised. I mean, I know your place isn’t the same as mine.” “I’m glad you do. The officials talking with my parents don’t.” This was a compliment to him. “Thank you. Why are you playing your instrument in this graveyard, though? Aren’t you afraid you’ll be arrested or attacked?” “I came here to meet you. My parents brought me here because I enjoy seeing this world, but I have no friends in this place. I was told you were working nearby, but I didn’t want to walk the streets alone looking for you so I played music in this quiet place. I went to the top of that huge grave because it gives a good view of whoever comes in.” [I THINK THAT THEIR LANGUAGE USAGE SOUND VERY FORMAL, NOT LIKE TWO KIDS TALKING.] “You shouldn’t have asked questions about me. That may have put us both in danger. You made that plan to find me?” “It wasn’t a plan; I thought of it on the spot.” “But how did you know I would follow the sound?” “I was afraid it might attract other people too, but you’re a different sort of person. You are the only curious person around, and music is rare.” “I didn’t know I had such a friend. I’m sorry to ruin this, but I have work to do. If you can meet me some other time I will probably still have to work.” “You’re very dedicated. Can’t you manage a compromise? I will be here for a few days.” “I don’t know how it works on Barren, but in the Aristocracy work rules are strict. They tell me to work so I must do it.” “Really? They didn’t tell me about that in school. You don’t deserve that.” Neither talked for a while “Would you leave this place if you could?” “Leaving? My family lives here, I can’t leave” “Are you proud of your place? Do you like how you fit into society?”

“Well, life isn’t as pleasant as it could be, but that just sounds impossible. I don’t think anybody leaves.” -Contemplating. Making metaphor. Maybe they should meet again when he is in the army, and she requests that he is assigned as a guard for her? Sometime maybe he can get an early look at the high class when he goes to something with her, part of the business with her mother trying to make gains through the state and bring their culture to their home. FINISH LATER -Before the conversation, show how his life is now. What he does at work for instance. -The two of them could have more dialogue. Basically she wants to be friends with him, but constrictions don’t allow that. He wishes he could be too, but leaving or anything like that is impossible. I read a quote in National Geographic saying that when people are powerless, that is when they are easily manipulated. This is true, as I've seen many other times. Perhaps as Ludic matures, he gets more power and gets smarter. Likewise, when F gets older she is expected to fall in and start being what others want her to be. -Imagine what it would be like to hear beautiful music among the other sounds while you are in the middle of downtown New York. -This scene is in a graveyard, and I originally thought there would be more symbolism or something like that. The gravestones remind him of all the generations that have gone before and how significant he might be. Earlier note: F is on Ludic’s world because her family is looking to gain from the Homeworld. Her family was just a normal one, but her mother wants to adapt Homeworld values and to use the favor of the government to become the new rulers of their town. They meet because Ludic has unusual interests and goes out of his way to meet aliens. They meet in a graveyard where she is playing a violin instrument. As a child, he should face some adult moments where he has to make serious choices, similar to Harry Potter and The Golden Compass and The Chronicles of Narnia. - Earlier note: One of his acquaintances may be a kindly old lady, who is afraid he’ll get exposed to things that will hurt or change him when he visits those strange people. She is kind, but typically conservative. This character is another person who’s opinions are shown to the reader, but she is an old conservative. Maybe in that society, old people are meant to take care of children wwhen parents are busy? Maybe they can also be teachers of whatever field they worked in their whole life. -The situation for people there is practically slavery. Though most are completely willing to do their work for civilization, they are ordered to work by the state. -Although family name is important and a family is a legal gurdian or it’s children, the highest social institution is the state. The Homeworlders really walk all over the Barreners, ande even though they do it using only a number of high-ranking troops, they are unbroken because they are “Good Citizens”.

… “I heard from some of my co-workers that you left the trains to talk with a girl from Barren. If my personal friends know the police must know! Why are you letting one of those people to be your friends? You are not just putting your family in danger, you are putting all of us in danger by being in contact with one.” “Why do you do this? Is she cute? Is she offering you things?” “I like her because she’s different. She is my best friend. I don’t understand your fear. Her parents are here visiting officials, she isn’t here to hurt anyone” “You don’t understand. Even if she really is a good person, she can destroy things. I see she has already changed you.” -She might be using some kind of witchcraft on you. I have heard the gods have unimaginable powers, do you know if she is in league with them? -Mom mentioned the theory that Barren might actually be the real rulers. Make this a Red Herring? [IT WOULD BE REVEALING TO GET TO KNOW SOME OF THESE PERSON’S THOUGHT, AND WHAT HE THINKS SHE CAN DESTROY. USE EXAMPLES THAT HE THINKS ARE REAL.] - Earlier note: “Those who do not accept our beliefs are a short step from evil, and even if they do not accept some aspects of our beliefs, we should stop them before they harm by using severe action!” For a closed minded culture to go on, it must be strict. - Earlier note: Ludic believes in being a good person, but he starts having problems with authority and really starts considering things seriously around 15 years of age, but he also starts acting pretty mature. F is different from her peers while she is young, but she accepts her parents and authority on her world at this age, but she also acts less mature and stops pursuing knowledge. Her mother is the matriarch of her family, and starts going crazy about here. - Earlier note: F is in a family that partially adapted the values of Ludic’s world. She has some younger siblings. F is of a common interracial blend. They have an estate at the center of a settlement. She is educated and open minded. She also plays a string instrument very well. -Show people in between, including intentionally lesser evils. At [15], he was picked for early conscription into service. It was mandatory for most boys to be conscripted at [17], but it was his father’s and the state’s desire to begin at the earliest possible age. His mother hoped he would be able to continue working instead. On his birthday, the police came to take him away on their own. Normally his parents would be expected to take him themselves to the camp between [16] and [17] and see him off on his term in the military, but today the special black-suited police came, which meant there could be no objections. He was told his father’s brother, who was already a veteran, would be his superior and, by the order of the state, his legal guardian. He never even met

his uncle, but he had no choice. They took him on a military train into the thinner part of the city to a training installation. -It is regarded as a regular thing for a young man to be raised two sets of guardians - his parents, then the army. When he is in the army, his parents are not supposed to have any control over him. They brought him to a fenced in area with other boy youths, aged between [15] and [18] years. They sat on the ground. An old man with bad disposition gave a speech. The lines of it were “This is where you problem children will learn to forget everything I want you to. You will be perfect soldiers, like me and the rest of the two-billion man army!” Some of the more weak-minded kids cheered. Ludic looked very uncertain. Here he meets some new friends, and is introduced to the system. -the training should reflect the real purpose of the army. Peacekeeping, dirty work, and mental training. For one thing, nit much is taught about keeping yourself alive. Generals don’t even know much about strategy. In camp, he was given propaganda-laced education and emotional, mental, and physical training. Many assumed he was retarded, because he was not talkative at all and seemed distant from everything. He seemed like one of those odd retardates with some great skills though, because he could focus very well on certain tasks. After [five months] he was assigned the role of marksman and of train specialist. His training afterward was concentrated on things related to these, which he excelled at. He objected to the army life at first, but he quickly learned not to object. -Before he entered training, he had never eaten meat. Until then, he usually ate gruel and mushrooms and other simple plant foods. When he was told that it was animal flesh he was eating, he felt very sick. -Earlier note: Ludic’s early story could have a theme of the value of life.

Despite how he appeared, he proved his aptitude in the tasks he was given. His training officer suggested he be put into specialized training for the new flying vehicles on account of his expected passivity and his technical aptitude, but before [an hour] after the suggestion the officer received a call directly from the office of the special police denying acceptance, arguing he was too low in class and so surely such a person could not be worth it, and that a position on a space vessel would only enable a “possible risk to the state and to the nation’s well being”. Months before his [16th] birthday, his officers found him sufficiently able and acceptable for duty. -Artillery division? Lots of notorious people were in artillery divisions, such as Napoleon and Hitler. Unlike most soldiers, he was not allowed to visit his home. His officer was now his legal guardian, after all. In the Two Billion Man Army, officers are common. Every rank above

Conscript had command over somebody, even though these positions of command had no real power until the level of captain, which meant command of over 200 soldiers. Ludic’s uncle Besor had command of four soldiers. Besor was not kind, even to his nephew. Kind people did not rise in rank. -Between the age of 15 and his mid-twenties he learns to hate his country and becomes disgusted with his people, and he also learns more a few years after schooling than he did in all his time in school, because the schools are more about indoctrination than education, but through his connections to F he leans a lot. The disgust begins in the military school, and only increases. -Many on his world should show examples of manipulating religious interpretation to control them.

For a few months, Ludic was moved around the greater city. Until he started training, he never went far from home at all. He noticed how very similar all parts of the city were. They were like the same thing, but crafted differently. He was relived that his duties for the first few months were not violent. His group was used to construct large scale projects. His expertise in machines and his intelligence brought him respect among his friends, although he remained a quiet and unusual person. -The function of the army would be mostly dirty-work. Because of their huge size they are simply used as another labor force that can also be peacekeepers wherever they are working, and the purpose of fighting is actually to give them an enemy to be aggressive toward. When they are not fighting, It is standard for almost all young men to be conscripted sometime between 15 and 19, because if they are in the army they can be better controlled than if they lived without constant supervision. It is a historically major theme in the world that everything be done for safety, and threats are allegedly everywhere. So, the upkeep of the military is presented as one of the end results of the nation’s effort. It is a sign of the culture that they don’t believe women can spur revolution. The women of the culture are bred and raised to be docile, but I imagine that since so many young men are being watched and tightly controlled it is women that could bring on revolution. He hoped that by showing his value outside of military roles, he could be accepted into a more peaceful job, even though he was assured that this would be totally impossible by his uncle. No matter what he did to prove his loyalty, his occasional contact with the Barren girl negated that. The army gave a young man little chance to do anything besides army things. His fondest time was when he guarded a depository of knowledge. (why it needed guards was not very clear) This place held books, mostly produced for the purpose of educating people for their careers, but some of the books were meant for other purposes. Deep in the back of rooms rarely used, there were useless books. These were books about the world as a while, books on philosophy, arts, history, and even fiction. They were apparently used very rarely, but sometimes they entertained Aristocrat’s interests. [maybe they are also kept for some sort of posterity, since knowledge lost means it has to be relearned, and the civilization is meant to go forward eventually.] He

heard from his Barrener friends that broad knowledge makes them smart, and he thought he could prove himself so he might go somewhere beside the army. He managed to get the assignment by finding out who guarded it, and then asking them all if he could have the job. Eventually he managed it. The guards really didn’t need to guard, nobody even came to the place unless they were teachers or people on aristocrat business [The army is there in place of librarians, and they are meant to deter anybody like Ludic from pursuing knowledge.] He was able to stay a few weeks until it came to the attention of an official. It was stopped, and he was sent back to his unit. In those few weeks, he did become slightly more dangerous. He actually became more benign, sometimes quoting things his comrades never heard before. Now he was smarter, though, and this made the people he knew a little uncomfortable somehow. He became careful not to show it off anymore. … still visited with her parents during their business trips. Because they had connections, they could arrange their time for visits. Her siblings wouldn’t come anymore, just her. She explained she wished to be smarter, and the trips were so beneficial. The actual bulk of it was that her mother wanted her to absorb the culture and learn how she wanted her to live. She revealed once that she pities how sad he usually seemed, especially since his conscription. When he was [16 2/3] he was sent to the front, and these visits suddenly stopped.

They sent him to a place outside the city. For the first time, he was not surrounded by buildings, and he could see stars. {point out direction and location too} They were in a military zone to fight the barbarian threat. Only 1/3 of the world had barbarians, but apparently they were very dangerous. Millions of soldiers were stationed here constantly to guard the borders and the outlying boundaries of the country. There was a line of fortresses creating a solid line. These fortresses were never actually attacked while Ludic was there, though from the vicious enemies he would have expected frequent assaults. He found the stars very interesting. In Homeworld beliefs, the stars are explained as just speks of things from the emptiness outside the world. That kind if is what stars are, but they don’t go deeper than the description above. He looks at the stars often, unlike any of his comrades. He is asked why he looks at them by a veteran officer, and he lies that he is afraid is watching for dangers. The officer says that’s natural, and reminds him, thinking of himself as a wise old person giving insight to a youth, to remember to focus on the pressing danger when it is near. Ironically snipers are supposed to be aware of all their surroundings. - Ludic has feelings of appreciation for life, but his experiences during his teen and early adult years trained him to be more brutal in action. - Gains some confidence during service. Being in this kind of situation forces him to take action on things, and into adult situations. The Army made frequent violent raids, apparently to keep the enemy on the defensive. Ludic had no grasp of the big idea, but he was told he didn’t need one. Eventually, he

was sent on one of these raids. There were twenty thousand soldiers on this raid. They were instructed to obliterate a small inland town for some impudence. The raid party moved in quickly on boats. The town didn’t look large enough to have even ten thousand citizens in it. The other soldiers attacked furiously, screaming and destroying things like mad, even though more people were running away than were fighting back. At some point, explosive artillery came down all around the town for about [half a minute], and then stopped. Afterwards, the soldiers killed all the civilians in sight and burned everything. The whole time, Ludic was guarding a possible escape rout. He didn’t guard it well, though. He thought it was strange when the shots came down. He was told it was the enemy, firing on their own village to kill the Army men. It seemed strange how brief the shooting was, in that case. Ludic decided he would ignore it anyway. -The generals and commanders aren’t better qualified if they know about strategy. They are put in positions for reasons of family and personal status with the government. Their job is mostly managing and disciplining their platoons. They are told the actions of the military are aggresice defence, and that anylists believe an actual invasion would be disasterous (which it could be, since the army would likely fall apart since it is in no way adaptable to such changes). -The weapons are not designed to be particularly efficient or effective, but to make soldiers feel powerful and to allow them to go berserk. For example, the rifles, rather than being bolt-action, are lever action. This allows them to be fired faster. Aside from rifles, they have a large revolver kinf of rifle that can shoot shotgun shells or a powerful slug to penetrate anything their enemies hide behind. Machine guns are all fireable while walking. Later, he was used in guard actions against an enemy that Ludic could see was dangerous. They were bandits and dissidents apparently, and they lived within the borders of the country. These people lived among the inhospitable lands that cities weren’t built on. He didn’t know who they actually were, but he knew they wanted to kill him. When he was [17], he killed somebody for the first time. This person had a gun, and was shooting at one of Ludic’s comrades. He was behind a rock, but Ludic waited for him to reveal his head and he shot the man with his rifle. He saw him die, and this troubled Ludic all night. This person was trying to kill his comrades, but wasn’t Ludic trying to kill this man’s comrades? It would seem they had the same reasons for killing each other in the first place, the defence of their own comrades. [I LIKE HOW THIS IS REDUCED TO THE MOST BASIC ELEMENT RATHER THAN THE LARGER ELEMENT OF DEFENDING SOME UNKNOWN.] But why was this person fighting in the first place? Why was Ludic himself fighting in the first place? His superiors told him the enemy was horribly cruel, atrocious, and the worst threat to the state. Ludic didn’t trust the state completely. In his experience, they were publicly touchy on the subject of the people from Barren, yet in practice they didn’t like them at all. Were the people he worked for contradicting themselves? Ludic wondered what it would be like If he met the person he killed, and if he would want to kill them. Just as he told himself when he was

[six] and he started questioning things, he told himself that the world works in mysterious ways and the answers are somewhere and will come to him eventually. - earlier note: Was quite kindly when younger, but consigned to a sort of unquestioned indifference in some regards, such as murder being acceptable if it's done to another as a soldier. He understood that these people weren't different from him, but he ignores this (since he feels he can't defeat the morality at the time?) -Some soldier tells him about what he learned from an enemy. The soldier has learned about things, but makes the mistake of trying to teach Besor. Besor kills him. Besor says that even though he was innocent and disillusioned, he was more dangerous than any enemy outside of the country. He continued this philosophy until he was [eighteen]. He had an attitude of acceptance of the world around him, supposing that wisdom and answers will come later, but he was growing increasingly dissatisfied. He followed orders and carried ot daily activities numbly. He still hadn’t seen his parents or his alien friend. [IN HOW MANY YEARS?] He had seen the comrades in his original group die, and whenever a member of a group dies the remaining members are combined with another short group so experience is combined. His uncle was still his officer. He killed and pillaged like the other soldiers now, though without the same enthusiasm. -His uncle is doing something that is not considered immoral for his people but that we and the people on F’s would consider very immoral. One night, he found his uncle Besor doing cruel things to a girl. They were in an enemy town. Their battle group was camping there for the night. Besor had her locked with him in a basement. He had called Ludic down to invite him to join. He saw the girl on the floor abused, and his uncle was smiling and telling him she was his now, he could do what he wanted with her. Ludic was staring at nothing. His uncle was patient with him for once, believing he was considering the great opportunity he was presented with. Before his uncle knew it, he drew a revolver and shot his uncle three times. {His feelings came back.} He then told the girl, who (for resons he didn’t know) surprisingly knew his language, that he would help her leave but he wanted to know some things. [here he leans some things. She was a dissident, and she ran out of the nation to escape. Most of the world outside of the Aristocracy is made of people like her. The army could destroy them, but instead they just make very aggressive moves and then leave. It is the only possible life beside living in the Aristocracy. Etc.] She explained she was a dissident from his own country, and that she came here because there is no place else to escape to. She suggested that he leave with her. He declined, saying he was too afraid. (He picked up his uncles cigarettes and lit one. Smokers seemed to enjoy them in times of stress.) He walked her out of the town, dodging soldiers. (Few were on patrol, since it is actually unnecessary. The ones that were didn’t do it well, since the soldiers have little reason intraining to be taught how to do their work efficiently) He knew first hand that he would be at the mercy of the Aristocracy if he were to try hiding. [YOU MIGHT MENTION ALSO HIS FEAR OF WHAT WOULD HAPPEN WITH HIS FAMILY.]

When she was finally away, he looked up to the star that was actually the world of Barren and wondered what would happen now. His comrades would not consider his uncle’s actions badly as they were considered in his mind; in fact this was common in the army. He wasn’t sure if what he did was justifiable. His uncle certainly meant to kill her later. He wasn’t sure how he felt. The next day he reported to his comrades that his uncle was attacked and killed by a survivor that was hiding out. He showed them an already dead body and claimed it was the corpse of the assassin, and also showed them Besor’s body. His comrades accepted this totally. -Until he meets and talks to that girl, he tells himself the people they are fighting may be as bad as they say, and he ignores the fact that his people were wrong about Barreners. -Nobody cares about or looks into the murder. He and his uncle are that obscure. [OKAY. MAKE SURE THE READER UNDERSTANDS THAT. BUT STILL, THEY ARE IN THE ARMED FORCE, AND THINGS LIKE LOSING A SOLDIER ARE NOT TAKEN LIGHTLY. THAT SOCIETY ESPECIALLY SEEMS TO DEMAND SERVICE FROM ITS PEOPLE.] The troops in the army are considered quite disposable, and nobody was suspicious of him. -At this point, maybe he actually should have strong feeling of rebellion and of changing the world. Gradually does he see how useless it would be to try. Even before he met his Barrener friends, he felt like something was wrong. He was very uncertain about things, and just rolled with it. The incident with his uncle forced him to make up his mind. Now he is still uncertain about morality and truth, but in a world where he must essentially live one way or the other, he has chosen the unsafe path because he knows the other is wrong. Now he means to do something to change the world, or at least he means to separate the truths from the lies he has been told. One lie is that there is good, being the way of the Aristocracy, and evil, being everything outside the Aristocracy. He doesn’t feel like the Arostocracy is totally evil and everything else is good, because among the bad things in the Aristocracy he knows they are very peaceful internally, and some fair justice exists. As he learns more about the way it works, however, he hates it more. He appreciates many things in the culture of foreign people, but he is aware they can do bad things as well. He goes into the metropolis to find a place of safety and to try and get help from the people on Barren. After he sees the futility of trying to rebel and the costs (more than money) of it, and with convincing from the Barren friends, he decides to just run away with them. -He has heard of militantism from his Barren friends, how people have banded together against conquerors when they were unhappy with them. It happened in their past, and it is common in places where the Aristocracy asserts itself. - He doesn’t reveal the murder to his friends. She feels like he had a tough and dissident history, but she isn’t aware of how far he’s gone. In concern to his military history, she mostly feels like somebody in this time would when they hear someone is a soldier. -How is Ludic on religion? Since religion is the thing that keeps people in check even after they find fault with things, Ludic should be somewhat beyond it. Before he met the siblings, he didn’t have religion programmed into him. His mother was never common mentally, though she never actually went far enough to endanger herself or her family.

Unlike other peasants, she didn’t try to drill anything into his mind. Consequently, he was at least neutral about religion from the first. He is an unacknowledged atheist at this point. The death of his officer and former guardian made things very difficult. Ludic now had control of his group, but he did not want the duties expected of him. All the soldiers under him would now scrutinize his actions. It was a landslide of pressure for this man who didn’t even like hurting animals. It was the day after killing Besor that he began his plot to escape. He was afraid he would throw his life away, but the alternatives were either brief freedom or an unbearable life as an animal. By escaping to whatever there was outside of there, he might eventually have some sort of satisfaction and answers. Move somewhere. He considered that among the billions of powerless people, he was one of the few who had weapons, technical expertise, and foreign friends. He didn’t know what to do, but he was done accepting the world. He would leave the army, but he knew it was futile to live in an outside country. considered trying to change the people from within society, but he realized that it would be impossible and revealing himself would get him killed. He convinced the manager in charge of labor division to allow him a visit into the city, claiming he needed to set his affairs in order now that his uncle was dead. The manager was unusually understanding, but it was true that Ludic was a soldier in a war, and the war was going on since the beginning of (his) known history. He took a boat into the city instead of a train because the many seas ran parallel to each other in an east-west direction, and he was stationed west of the metropolis. The train would be faster, but he wanted to avoid anybody he knew. (and he was afraid to face his comrades) -Truly alone -It would make more sense if he learned about traveling stealthily from a rebel. [A Week] later the boat arrived near a train depot, where he was meant to take a train to an administrative building. Instead, he wandered into an empty building where they kept broken trains. Ludic disassembled and scattered his rifle and equipment and put on the bland clothes civilians wore. He didn’t steal the clothes, because he knew it would inconvenience somebody. He wore his own. He kept his revolver in his jacket and bullets in his pocket. Every citizen had to carry a small book of identification papers, he dropped these in mud and tore some bits of paper off. Some other little items were in his pocket, such as a military multitool. His uniform was burned. He was now a mostly anonymous thing. He hopped onto a train bound for a close friend’s neighborhood. When a train conductor inevitably began walking through his car and checking papers, Ludic was able to move behind other people and avoid him. [Trains there were wider and passengers often stood close together] Train conductors often had hundreds of people to check, so they were quick instead of thorough. He remained uncaught by picking the most crowded cars.

What does he eat during these weeks of traveling? Eventually he got into the thicker part of the metropolis. The only refuge was in a place of disease, a bunkhouse where the contagious aliling who could not be treated were sick and nobody could take care of them they were dead to the world until they were fortunate enough to get over it. While he was in his lonely room, he considered his position again. No friends remained to help him. He didn’t know why … left, the only friend he might have trusted has betrayed him, he cannot return to his parents, the military he was a part of is pursuing him, all of his other friends are still in the military. At that moment, it was obvious police would know about him. Luckily, they would sooner look in his old home and in the homes of his contacts than in a poor persons asylum. The next morning, with things looking grim, he decided he would wander the Asylums until he found some sort of opportunity. Taking trains and boats seemed inconsiderable, since the police might know about him now. AMONG BILLIONS OF PEOPLE? WAS HE THE ONLY ONE WHO WENT AWOL? ARE THERE NO OTHER CRIMINALS SUCH AS RAPISTS AND MURDERERS AND KIDNAPPERS THAT PEOPLE WOULD RECOGNIZE? (A wrongful fear, since AWOL soldiers are expected to run to the foreign lands.) He continued to stay at free, disease-ridden poor houses. He found from a very elderly woman that these houses didn’t exist until Homeworld made contact with Barreners. He also found out that Barren was first contacted over [100 years ago], but not why or how. During the journey, he also met a woman like him named Illa. They were drawn to each other by their similarities. They were both smart, and working toward similar things. She was not being pursued, but she would be if she were a man. She talked about her opinions on the state, and about plans for revolution. She was in the poor house to help others, and not just the sick. In this poor house and some others Ludic visited, dissenters gathered, mostly young women. Ludic learned that one of the true purpose of the military was to teach men to fall in place while they were young. When the system lf living on this world was finally changed, it was because the timidity of women was overestimated. Illa introduced Ludic to other people like him. The men in the group were never soldiers; none of their families were in so disapproved with the state to make it necessary for them to join, so they were men of technical work and positions of management. The women were also from plain backgrounds, and like other women they either had dull jobs or they were married. Ludic found dependable friends in them, and he shared his past and his plans. The men, never having been disciplined, were all eager to go with him, and so were some women. He left the day after meeting them with six companions, three men and three women, including Illa. The trip was much easier now, because they could base their trips around the various refuges. Most people in the metropolis were ignorant about what happened outside their neighborhood, [I WANT TO HAVE A SOLID IDEA OF HOW MANY PEOPLE LIVE IN A NEIGHBORHOOD] [A neighborhood is just supposed to be a general area where people socialize, like one island or district of governance. A

neighborhood could have ten thousand.], so they would go from one refuge to another, learning about the next leg of the trip from the ones they visited. In each poorhouse they learned a little more about how they might get off the planet. The news about them slowly grew. There was an acknowledged consensus in the group that Ludic was the leader. He didn’t want to lead at all, but he knew the most about how their enemies operated and thought, plus he had a weapon while the companions never even touched one. The diseases in the poor houses are mostly sexually transmitted. The careful control over the people meant diseases were eradicated or cured quickly, but STDs stayed because the conservative government does not give education on that and it is a rare topic. Because most of the diseases are sexual and because he gained some resistances after gaining diseases from Barreners, he stays safe. -He knows that it would be hopeless to try and make a major difference. He considers that if he actually had the opportunity he could try, but much later that world seems relatively insignificant so he does not return. Ludic carried a sniper officer’s revolver. They were the same as other long-range pistols, except it had and inlaid copper design and was not a military hand-me-down like other weapons. It was a tradition for families to display the trophies of their men’s accomplishments, a decorated revolver was a symbol of trustworthiness that could be displayed above the fireplace if the family was loyal enough to keep it. He didn’t prefer it for its status, he preferred it for its quality. As they drew closer to the spaceport, they learned about a significant movement that could help them. A mans named Spek Arrech recently returned from an exodus to the foreign countries. He was one of the most wanted men by the state, and he was also seeking a ship to own. Joining his association and getting his help was the next obvious course of action. They were sent to an apartment building instead of a poor house. It was between a river and the street, and looked like any other place from the outside. Ludic went inside while the others stayed out, considering it might some sort of trap. Ludic went to the apartment number he was given. Inside he saw one man alone in a room. [Perhaps here he is given a loyalty test, but sees through it. It involves bringing the man to a spot very near a police station, and the idea is that he could give the agent to the police or moving on to the next place. After they pass, Ludic points out why it’s such a terrible test.] They were led from this place to a new building. This building was also a plain apartment structure, although it was set in higher ground. They were brought to a sub-basement, and then through a door labeled for service and maintenance. They walked into a large and crumbling room. This room was built to hold workers and equipment during work on the massive underground water systems. It was directly above the water level, and the sound

of water was always present. The rebels turned it into a headquarters, though most of the available space was used to house Spek and other regular rebels. Spek welcomed them and let them know about the things he heard. He said he didn’t accept them for their wish to deviate alone, but because he hoped Ludic could get help from Barreners. He expressed that help from these mythicised aliens could bring so much help to them. [He actually wants Barreners because their speed and skillfulness can help him steal more.] They settled down in the hideout. Beds were improvised using materials, they didn’t need much since they brought few possessions. They seeded the nutritious moss in buckets of water, growing their own gruel. They were taught about the many routs to their place, and that the basement entrance was only used because the others are harder to remember. They learned that their host was forced to flee from the country after he became an infamous character and the state slandered him with lies. [Here he is lying about the degree of his fame and about his actual reasons for being a wanted criminal. He was a thief and murderer, and he ran at age [22]] He learned about things from foreigners [and he gained the little ideals he had from here], and then he returned to the country to undermine the Aristocracy and bring life to revolution. [He is basically a false character; he manipulates the mostly simple people under him so he can gain personal power. Like Ludic, he is smarter than average citizens but this is because he is from a foreign country, a fact he doesn’t reveal to many.] With the seven new recruits, the permanent residents formed a group of 15. With contacts included in the plotting they numbered about a hundred, and with potential contacts they numbered about three hundred. Spek enjoyed his position as leader, but he treated Ludic as the second highest in the hierarchy because he had the most experience and only he had contacts with Barreners. He became an underground hero, but only among the people in the same racket in their neighborhood. {Ludic was sent out on tasks with other dissenters, mostly doing simple crimes such as stealing things for their living and cover up their own tracks, but a number of tasks were about contacting Barren. He eventually found a way to contact his military friends, and called them (After collecting the numbers from a military directory and breaking into an official’s office) under the guise of family calls and asked them general questions and ambiguous information to the ones willing to help. He managed to get the help of one officer who sends a letter in a mail shipment to a headquarters on Barren (even though the Aristocracy has walked all over Homeworld, they bring some things such as an expensive mail service, which was already supplied for practically nothing by the migratory people) The letter arrives in an official fashion at the house about two weeks after being sent, and the high charge is paid for since it is demanded. The letter is a lengthy piece that is the words of Ludic after being transcripted to the military friend over the phone. Ludic describes his times in brief, laments over …’s disappearance from his life, and he describes in detail his current location and actions and begs her to do anything for him that could help such as politics, but in particular coming or sending help. F herself at this time has been acting very different, like momma’s girl. She does

this to keep her mother, who is becoming insane, happy. She accepts things more blindly than she did when she was younger and she barely uses her education and abandons her better qualities to live loosely and seek fast pleasures because she feels her life as it was before the parent’s divorce is irretrievable, since her life has been taken over by others. The reasons for her behavior are not yet decided, but it may be that her siblings and friends distanced from her when their mother chose her to be the one she imparts her values on (she does this because she is the eldest daughter, her eldest son is too rebellious to stay.) She fell into the lifestyle, using her good looks for instance to get more. Now she is actually very sad to see how things are going because her crazy mother is controlling her life, and she is especially sad when she reads the letter. She really wants to go and join Ludic and maybe even run away with him forever, but she simply can’t do that herself. The letter is shared with everybody in the family and her brother decides he will join Ludic in leaving since he is as tired with the place as she is but able to leave. Her brother also brings two like-minded male friends and a female friend. They tell the Homeworld people they want to explore business opportunities on Homeworld and they get a ride in a ship. Once they land, they take a train to the place and show up outside the apartment building that is above the hideout. They hung out there for a while, and many locals spotted them. The police were informed as well, and that report seeded an investigation of the area and several individuals the police knew to be in the area, which would later become the investigation that catches them} -Look up the actual practices of partisans and other rebels. -Express in places that Barren isn’t actually held by the Homeworld, but the Homeworld is the largest presence there. They are turning the society into dependants, but most of civilization on Barren is in small, self-governing pockets, which mostly have Homeworld connecting them together. -After a little while, the Barreners there have difficulty adapting to the new conditions. They are starving, even though they eat more than the others (their metabolism needs lots of meat) They hate the confined quarters. After half an hour, they were spotted by someone retuning to the hideout. Ten minutes later Ludic personally showed up and brought them in through the apartment entrance. Spek was joyful, but Ludic was happier. With the help of these able friends, he could accomplish goals much more easily. They made everybody uneasy except Ludic, they looked very different (everybody basically looked the same on Homeworld with black hair, dark blue eyes, similar height, and practically identical skin) and acted differently. (The Barren women are as tall as Homeworld men, and the Homeworld men are usually at least three inches taller than the women, so Homeworld women are under two thirds the height of Barren men.) They told them they were there to help as long as they got help in exchange getting a took a ship that could travel to a different star, and not specifically to help anybody’s cause, which created some distance between them and the others since most of them couldn’t imagine actually leaving their home world and since this made the Berreners mercenaries in a way (Ludic wasn’t sure if he wanted to go to a new star, but changes his mind eventually. The four Barreners were partially drawn by a great want to know what was out there). …’s oldest brother told Ludic later that he was willing to help him because his sister wasn’t able to help, and she was very worried about

him. He brings up the question of if Ludic is really friends with her or if he just wants her help, and if he just likes her because she is pretty. Ludic says he never noticed if she was pretty since he hasn’t seen her for years, and he promises she is his most treasured friend ever for many reasons. (He proves this over time) He spent hours explaining to him the events since the last time she met. She could not meet him because her mother kept her close, and the trips stopped to his planet stopped when his country extended into the town by making it a center of government which covered about a thousand miles. He was as interested in leaving the planet as his fellows, but he would take care of Ludic for his sister. -Over time, Illa begins to put pressure on Spek. She sees through him better than anybody. She became Ludic’s friend when there was nobody there for him, so she and him are good friends. In the same way the Barreners changed him from the others when he was only a little different, he changes her when he tells her about his own experiences and shares knowledge (He doesn’t share the murder though. He feels like the murder was no worse than the ones he was made to commit in battle, but he knows others won’t feel the same.) Over time, she sees through Spek even better, better than Ludic, and she eventually takes his place. Even though she and Ludic are friends, he never has any desire to start romance with her. He never had things like love on his mind. -There is some conflict with Ludic and the others about how he can’t stand the place, while the others mostly can’t imagine leaving. -How does religion work into this? The peasants have been raised conservative and follow a religion, and in fact Ludic is the only one of them who is actually Atheist. Maybe Spek is a religious leader as well, claiming he learned god is on his side because the government has become corrupt and lost the way. Maybe he also claims that their socialization with the Barreners is part of it, and perhaps he also claims the barreners who came are exceptions from the others of their kind. When Illa takes over, the whole group might become unruly, but then they could somehow be kept in check by her careful planning, and that planning might involve the power of the Barreners. -The older brother has been a rebel since youth. Although Barreners are similar in appearance to 18-late 20 year olds until their [late 40s], he looks more grizzled. His face is alittle rougher, because he has spent time in the desert. He isn’t so bad that he’s killed anyone yet, but he does that later. The new visitors settled into the underground hideout, but they were very uncomfortable. Their world was mostly desert, so their own lifestyle was very different. The skies were usually clear during the daylight half of the year, but on Homeworld the hazy clouds above the central metropolis rarely ever left, and they constantly drizzled but rarely poured. The city was very confined, so confined that many parts were built over others and roads were built over others creating the feeling of being in a tunnel. The quarters they lived in were very cramped, since all that could be done once they arrived was empty some small closets full of pipes. They brought some birds with them to compensate for the lack of meat they could get, and these were kept in coops and fed the same gruel the people ate. Ludic tried an egg once and was unsure what to think of it. He knew how babies were made, but he had no idea how it worked for birds. The Barrener who gave it to him felt like assureing him it didn’t work the same for his species. Ludic

didn’t know if it counted as meat or not, so he reasoned that if it wasn’t alive yet it can’t die so he ate it anyway. His friends considered it a good imitation of a luxury. The Barrener’s possessions and presence was very entertaining, since the most entertaining thing until then was a stolen radio they used to eavesdrop on conversations. Even though they lived under pressure, they were the most entertained peasants in the metropolis. -Ludic learns a lot about things from his arrived friends. Previously, he knew next to nothing about history. The date is only known by officials and Aristocrats and a few other people who actually need to know. He learns about the Barrener’s version of history from the older brother, but his own planet’s history is still pretty mysterious to him. He learns more about cultures and other people as well. One thing about Barreners is that they generally don’t use money with assigned value, their planet never had a united power running it and so no common currency was spread. With the daily (meaning yearly) migrations of nomads as a source, trade and exchange was unregulated, so barter continued even after Homeworld people arrived. While most of his peers wouldn’t even be interested in the universe outside, he was happy to expand his horizons, and he wanted to leave the place even more. -the barrener’s presence contradict the belief that they are bad people The Barreners were quite tolerable with the company they were among to begin with, but the hosts (except for Ludic) didn’t relax for a while. The Barreners proved their trustworthiness when they went with on an outing to learn about their setting. They could move as quietly as anything, and twice as quickly as anybody. Spek was pleased in particular. The next day they were sent to steal more, which they did with proficiency. They were restless, though. They insisted, with some undertones, that they see some progress on their goal. Spek assured them he was forming a plan. Unlike the other conspirators, they didn’t accept his assurances very easily. They went to Ludic next and asked him what he would do if he was leader. He told them he didn’t want to give orders to anybody, but that Illa had ideas. They couldn’t consider becoming leaders themselves and they had no place else to go, so they went to her. They let her tell them what to do from then on instead of Spek. They worked best on their own already, so she became their leader. Now that the super people were following her, the advantages came to her and Spek began losing his influence. -The thing about Barreners is that their planet had a lot more radiation and difficult conditions (They are all humans too, but they evolved more dramatically.) Besides some mental characteristics (such as a low likelihood of neuroticism), they have better senses, shorter infancy, darker skin, different hair colors, much slower ageing (they look young until they near old age, when they age dramatically) and they are faster in movement and reflexes. The drawback for them is their fast metabolism. They move about twice as fast, but live half as long. A peasant on Homeworld can live to be a hundred, but a Barrener doesn’t live long past 50. -Ludic’s cigarettes are sort of an unintentional sign of stature. They are usually used as cheap rewards to citizens doing special work for the state, and they work well since they are addictive. He loots them from offices of officials. He unintentionally impresses others.

Over time, they had gathered plenty of information from files and records to bring the conspiracy forward. Illa took it on herself to form a plan, with help from Ludic. The first they considered was a complicated one of planting documents and creating personas for themselves within military records and then arranging through deception a way to get themselves on a ship and then steal it. (This would be easier than it seems, since people in the Aristocracy simply trust each other. If ever asked why they wanted to go to Homeworld by an official, they could claim they wish to be heroic). The second plan involved stealth, which would be simpler than the first plan but less likely to succeed. The third plan would be asking all of their friends and contacts for favors that could bring them onto a ship in a legal way. Nobody thought that could work. The fourth plan involved braking into or sneaking into a spaceport, getting as close to a ship as they could, then running into it and winging it from there. TAKEN FROM EARLIER SPOT: He eventually came to the home of his friend, Thersu. He was an engineer Ludic worked with before. In the [months] since they parted, Thersu was relieved of his military duties and became a regular engineer. His family was always loyal, and he was a more than competent worker so his military career didn’t last very long at all. Thersu lived in a small apartment with his wife. [Marriage is quick on Homeworld. Men are expected to marry as soon as they are employed.] The apartment was on the first floor of a street that had another below it and one above. Ludic approached apprehensively, but once Thersu greeted him Ludic was rather bold. There was no place else he could go. “Ludic? Good morning! Where have you been?” Ludic spoke very seriously: “Are you a completely loyal adherent to the Aristocracy?” [WHAT A STRANGE GREETING! HE SURE DIDN’T WASTE ANY TIME!] -Throughout a good portion of this conversation, he is unsure if Ludic is an officer testing him or genuine. Now Thersu looked confused and worried “Of course! Yes! I have always been. Please tell me, what have I done that calls for the military to question me?” Ludic was worried now “If you are as loyal as you say, I am at your mercy. I have left the military on principle and I came because you are the only person who might be able to help me. If you are still my friend, I beg you will at least let me leave without telling anybody I came.” Thersu was relieved and he smiled now. “Ah. I exaggerated a little. I will always help my friends. If you’re running from the law as you say you may come in, but only because you are a friend.” [THAT “I SUPPOSE” IS A LITTLE WISHY-WASHY AFTER HIS AFFIRMATION OF FRIENDSHIP.]

“Thank you so much. I don’t know where else I could go.” He walked into the apartment. There was a plastic pad with shoes and a hanger with coats next to the door. Although he never knew of people doing it before, he took off his shoes and jacket once he was in. [THAT’S AN ODD THING CONSIDERING HE’S NEVER KNOWN OF IT BEING DONE. I WONDER WHY THERSU HAD THEM THERE IF IT’S THAT UNUSUAL A THING. HMMMM….] It’s a class difference. He has always lived in a very poor and dirty home and he never saw an upper-lower class place. It’s because of his broad knowledge and his intuition that he figured out not to wear his shoes in the clean apartment. “Take a seat.” They both sat down at the kitchen table. “Explain what horrible things you have done to make you so fearful and tense.” “What? I haven’t done anything horrible! Have they told you things about me?” Thersu chuckled. “No. I don’t expect you’ve done anything too bad. I know you wouldn’t. You’re here because you don’t fit into the army, right?” “Yes. That’s it. Are people looking for me?” “No. You can calm down. I heard you deserted when I talked with our mutual friend Captain Schesi a few days ago, but we were just worried you would be so scared you might go hide among barbarians. You remember Captain Schesi, when he was High Sergeant of the platoon? He told me how the death of your uncle, god rest him, made you so upset and jittery. I suppose a person can only take the death of so many friends.” “Why were you so worried when I came to the door?” “Ah. Well, I thought you were an undercover man, and I was being tested. But I’m absolutely sure you aren’t though. Um, I’m sure that you’re just a citizen who merely didn’t adapt to military life, which is very common and forgivable.” Ludic was more comfortable now. “I don’t believe you’re sure I’m not. If I am, you could be arrested for letting me in. You’re aware I’m a traitor now, aren’t you?” “Well, you haven’t killed anyone or tried to hurt anything. Spreading lies? Right? You’re just a friend who ran away because he knows he can’t cope. Aren’t you?” I’m glad you still decided to stay with us all instead of running to a barbarian country. “I am. I would never try to hurt a friend or damage his reputation. I just want refuge.”

“Yes, of course. You’re just like the rest of us. You may have run away from duty, but you’re a true countryman. I’ll let you stay. You have a friend in me, even if you aren’t a model of a man.” “Thank you. I might not need to stay for long, because I just need to know some things. First, do you know how I can get on a spacecraft?” “How far do you plan on running? Don’t you think you might change you’re mind eventually and stay?” “That is impossible now. As I said, I left on principle. I don’t fit here anymore. I just want to leave.” “I didn’t think you would give up so easily. I can tell you what I know, but first tell me: where do you expect to end up? Do you expect those gods would even allow someone like you to travel with them? I can only wonder where this journey might end. Someplace strange, I’m sure, where you will fit in even less.” “I have friends on Barren., but I have learned about the place and it isn’t as different as you my think. I’m told they actually have their own government and civilization. The place is different, but not inhabitable. Maybe adapting sounds impossible to you, but I want to risk it. If that world isn’t good, I think there might actually be more worlds out there.” [BUT HE DID NOT ADAPT TO THE SERVICE AND DOES NOT SEEM CONCERNED ABOUT WHAT PUNISHMENT WILL COME TO HIS FAMILY— THE ONES WHO RAISED SUCH A REBEL.] -If they be gods, I will be humiliated. -I wil be happy if I was wrong about everything, but I would not regret my actions. Someone has manipulated me, and I’m certain about who. “Well, I suppose you might know some things I don’t. If you are really this confident, I’ll tell you what I know about spacecraft. First of all, they travel to Homeworld from an unimaginable distance. Let me tell you the only way to possibly leave is with them. The only people I know of who are allowed on a vessel are military expeditions, and most go to Barren. The Aristocracy carefully controls which people are allowed.” “Where did these spacecraft come from originally?” “Is the past important to you? You always were some kind of historian. They are here, and they move people between worlds. The heavenly people use them. As far as I know, they were built here. All I am certain of is that only those who the aristocracy allows can leave.” “Have you ever met a Barrener?” “You know I don’t socialize with anybody outside the Aristocracy.”

“Do you know how I can talk to one? If the spacecraft are there, maybe they can bring me with them on a return trip.” “You are really pursuing this. So do you not belong to this nation anymore?” “I told you, I am a traitor. I belong to no place and no people. Just consider me a neutral being that will decide where it belongs later.” “Well, you can only get in contact with Barren through the authorities. I have no power to help you leave myself, but if I did I would help. You can stay here tonight, but not tomorrow. I hope this doesn’t end badly.” Later his wife arrived at the apartment after working. Thersu shared Ludic’s story with her in private. His wife was not as understanding, probably because she was not friends with Ludic. She explained that being soft on traitors and deviants allows them to spread, and that he was a danger even if he only meant to leave. She insisted that Thersu call the authorities to subdue the menace. After dinner, Thersu acted much differently. He told Ludic that his idle time was over and that he would be brought to prison. He told his friend he expected him to come to prison without argument and that all Ludic needed was reeducation. “Yes. You’re right. I’ll trust your judgment and come with.” He put on his shoes and jacket while Thersu did the same. Ludic put on the jacket while he was facing the door, and he discreetly pulled out the revolver. He qouckly turned around, bearing it on Thersu. “Back up against the wall. Both of you.” “How could you? You made me think you were a good man.” “I don’t intend to shoot you, but if I must I will. I see I must be more selective in my friends. You are as simple as the rest of them, but I expected you to be more tolerant. I’m grateful for your hospitality, so thank you. Now I will leave, but if you are stupid enough to send a good man like me to jail I will kill you. Goodbye.” He opened the door and stepped out. He added, “I’ve done more than you or anybody else knows, but I didn’t tell you because you will be happier if you don’t know what I know. I did that for you. I would tell you how this place really works, but they would kill you.” He shut the door, put the gun in his jacket, and ran out of the building. END

Ludic was surprised when Illa told him she herself didn’t intend to leave. He was surprised at the trouble she took when she didn’t have a stake in it herself. Even though she could benefit from his help and the Barrener’s help, she knew how they felt and she didn’t want to deprive them of their ambitions, but she was also willing to make the sacrifice because she loved him a little. Ludic told her he was sad to know she would be left without their help, but hearing she would stay did not change his mind at all. -Among his personal friends is/are an opinionated revolutionary who does not appreciate things and is much less wise. He is like the common modern revolutionary, who might be on the right side, but is actually just a common except for that he has learned differently. He probably was upset about some things, then was brought into the revolt by chance and learned about things from them. The main gang that was around before Ludic and his friends came were mostly criminals that passed as good guys, like Robin Hood. After Ludic, they were made aware of more things and grew a little less criminal. After the Barreners came they changed more, and once Illa takes over they are mostly total revolutionaries. They presented the plans to their comrades the next morning. They got into a debate over their wants, and the subject came up over why they should all concentrate on something as risky as stealing a spaceship that only a few of them would learn. After a while, Ludic asked why so many of them didn’t see running from that terrible place as an option. He was put down with arguments from patriots who still had nothing but appreciation for their place (Many people are part of this because they have wishes for personal gain or wish to take some things into their own hands). Spek spoke up, questioning them all and asking who was the leader here in the first place. He was the one who kept his people happy this whole time, but he rule was faltering since the Barreners sided with Illa. She asked what progress he made in changing the Aristocracy, and he argued that he would if his people were more loyal. She told him she doubts he had any real plans, and declared he was no more than a mob boss. He began to rant about these attacks on his integrity, and how they are just ignorant fools who did not know what he knew, but the audience turned on him when they heard Illa’s calm and appealingly stated counterpoints. She was cleverer than he, and she was honest while he was not. Eventually, he backed up against the wall and took a revolver from a pocket. He started yelling nonsense and told everybody that things will go his way from now on, and he started talking directly to Ludic, about how all of it was because of him. His tone and words grew harsher and his looks grew crazier, but […’s brother] quietly walked up from Spek’s flank like a predatory animal and in an instant had him disarmed and on the floor. He cringed and cried and babbled something, then he looked at the people around him and got up and ran out. Ludic told [the older brother] he had better follow him in case he does anything crazy, and he told him to bring the gun just in case. As Ludic and the other learned a long while later, Spek came close to reporting to an officer and having revenge on his former friends. Instead, he was shot by [the older brother]. After Spek left, the renegades were much more divided. The sides were separated among the deviants and the conventionals. With the deviants are Ludic, the Barreners, Illa, the sincere rebels, and a few similar, close friends. People continued to argue, mostly about

goals and such. After [a few hours], many left the place until mostly just the deviants were left. Illa pointed out that after all this they would be in danger if they stayed in the current hideout. They would have to leave most of their possessions behind and travel lightly. They were able to stay with a local rebel that still kept his civilian life. They left behind all the furniture and large items and the radio, bringing their clothes, stolen papers, personal belongings, and small weapons. -The whole thing lasts about seven months. -Sometime shortly after this, he might see his mother a last time, and he explains himself, to her sorrow. He never tells her the full extent of his actions. He explains that he changed his mind while in the military, and he is unwilling to continue living the way he has been, so he is running away with his friends. Then, for one thing she asks how he became this way. He supposes that he learned to see the world from the outside. -There are no heroes on Homeworld, because a mythology to the religion would give some education of history. -They run across the densely urbanized country, and it’s similar in feeling to Kidnapped The next day they all stayed in the apartment, out of sight from the surrounding city. There were eleven now. It would be impossible to form a new hideout now that they were so few and knew of no other concealed locations. Illa had not expected this, she had no idea where to go. Ludic decided the next move was to take action. They had no permanent harbor in this hostile city, so they would have to call every favor and take every advantage to survive. He paced, puffing a cigarettes. “There are only two choices. We can’t go the way we’ve been and continue to go on, it doesn’t work. There are two paths we had to choose in the beginning, and they were to go on as we were or be different. We have chosen the less beaten path, and now we are alone. Now we will either leave or they will destroy us, so the next choice is clear. We must go directly to our target, the central spaceport.” The central spaceport was in the heart of the metropolis. The center was the most overbuilt place in the world; the city spread from this artificial island in an artificial lake on an artificial mountain. Approaching the heart would take over [a month] walking across treacherous territory, over [three weeks] in a boat (it would be tricky to get through the many locks), or a few days of constantly riding the trains. Even though the trains would bring them closest to others, the overall difficulty and risks would be less if they could manage to stay inconspicuous. Since Ludic was an ex-train engineer and exsoldier, the planning came to him. Things considered: -Because the people are not naturally suspicious, they are able to move round more easily than an escaped prisoner. -Maybe they can steal a rare truck. Automobiles are rare there, the top roads are made flat for these vehicles, and these are used for important things like priority transport. (the lower roads are made for people on animals, moving carts, and foot traffic) Once they get one, they can travel mostly unchecked.

-Maybe they are smuggled through the trains with the freight. -The best stroke of luck was that there were several express trains to the center. Ludic supposed that if the engineer for one of these by some scheme failed to turn up, he could appear when the engineer was late and pretend he was a normal citizen appearing by chance and offer to drive it, and then he and his group could travel in the engine car and basically travel with more freedom. -The Barreners could turn up at the police and claim they were captured by the others for rebel purposes. They could then claim they wanted to bring them to Barren to face justice in their own courts. -They could also try and combine the multiple means of movement, but then their chances aren’t good. -Sometimes it seems like Ludic is too clever to be realistic. Maybe more ideas should be from Illa. They next day, they parted from the friend that hosted them for the last time, just walking toward their goal. They let him keep the [chickens]. As soon as they walked out of the neighborhood, they were much safer. People knew of them in that neighborhood, and that’s where the police were looking by now. They walked in the darkness, in the bottom tier. While they were journeying, the police pursued leads. On the night of the coup, they received an anonymous report with plenty of information. They raided the hideout immediately, but all they found were fingerprints. They went after people whose prints matched those in records. Officially, Ludic, the Barreners, and three other people with them are recognized as “missing”, while Illa and the other three are matched as runaways. The police have only made a small connection between them and the Barreners, knowing that four were spotted outside the location of the hideout [a month and a half] ago. Other conspirators were very unlucky. The police matched over 50 prints to people, and all of these people were arrested and investigated. Most of them were sent to a strict reeducation center, but a number were interrogated, even tortured, and a few were even killed when it was decided they were too far gone to tolerate. After these people were gathered, the police found over 30 more after gathering information. When Ludic and company eventually heard about this, it was a little consolation that most of the people were merely involved because Spek brought in money, so they weren’t good friends of theirs. The police started a new investigation to find what happened to the eight unaccounted for rebels, and put an experienced officer in charge named Riniv Ketsa. Ketsa suspected from the start that the missing people were going to continue their pursuits rather than flee to the foreign lands, based on his experiences in the past. He figured they were a group that chose to stay in the country to undermine it, and they still had pretty much the same reasons to continue. He also was the first to suspect the Barreners were on their side, simply because they were last seen in the area. He had no suspicions of Ludic, because his name never came up and his prints were not matched because he went missing over a year ago and so the police had no reason to include him in the print comparisons (only people living in the general area of the hideout and known rebels were included in the comparison, meaning several million people).

-Not all of the people taken were just profiteers. There was at least one good friend of Ludic who was also pretty smart, but he didn’t want to come with because he felt safer just going home. The police eventually find him. He is interrogated for information, and when they find he never received much education past early school and that he has a history of not working, they just kill him because they don’t think it would be worth itt o send him to re-education. Maybe this character was a rare artist, and he was in the group because it was to only way he could get the chance to work on it. The officers don’t care about his art, even though they are the most skillfully done things they ever saw. Almost all of it is destroyed. Later, Ludic is shown that this friend is dead when the leader gives him one of the paintings to take away. While in the hideout,he also learns how to play a small instrument given by a Barrener. No major plan was formed yet, but Ludic had an idea that would cut several days off the trip. They traveled to the top tier in dawn, to a goods allocation building. It was one of many industrial structures connected to the tracks and made for the purpose of carrying goods from one place to another, but this place had trucks and cars. None of them were ever in a car before, but if they could get one they might be able to travel all the way to the spaceport in a few days and in relative safety. {This is when they steal a car. The Barreners sneak in, open the outside gates to let the others in, and Ludic figures out how to drive. He knew how to do it best since he was a train engineer. He plays around with the controls while the others anxiously give suggestions while they try to figure it out. After a while one starts making noise but he accidentally breaks it by flooding gas or something, so he moves into the next truck. He does better with it, but then it also breaks. The third one he tries works. With foresight, Ludic realizes a machine must have a source of power so they load cans of gas into the back. They leave the place successfully, but the broken trucks alert the police. Luckily, they don’t use license plates since civilians don’t own cars. Eventually he gets the hang of navigating traffic and driving.} -I could change it so the things they get into during this time could be made to show what their willing to do for freedom. They might do desperate things to escape and live as they are. Now that he is in a car instead of a train, it is a comparison to how his future is now more in his own control. Meanwhile, officer Ketsa’s investigation continued. On his orders, the police questioned many locals, as well as known relatives of the missing people and train workers. A few people reported seeing tall, hooded strangers moving in a group at night, and all descriptions indicated they were traveling East. It appeared the missing people were running somewhere, and the officer expected these tall people were the Barreners, and the group was the rest of the runaways. He had people questioned that were in the vicinity the people were headed, and eventually he connected the report of two broken trucks and one stolen truck to them. The theft occurred a little farther than the location where the last report of the strangers was. With his powers of authority, he ordered police east of the site of the theft to watch out for a truck with suspicious characters driving it. He still did not suspect their ultimate goal was to go off the planet, but he did have some fears they were going to attack the center of the city, where most of the Aristocrats lived.

After a few days, they encountered an area of the road where trucks were lined up. Police were talking to the drivers and checking the insides. This was obviously a checkpoint, and some felt they should just try to drive through and maybe the cops couldn’t pursue them, but Ludic (the one in charge of driving) knew degree of control they had over the city. They drove south a few miles, and found they could go around the check points. As they drove closer to the target, they found more checkpoints, and even when they went south again they encountered more. The reason for this was that a policeman at the first checkpoint observed their truck sitting stationary for a while and then turning, and he reported it to the police, and this reached Ketsa, who increased the checkpoints accordingly. [This wouldn’t attract much attention on Earth, but any odd behavior drew attention] Eventually, after more than a day of traveling around so many checkpoints they made a quarter circle around the area they were headed to, they had to leave the road to continue moving. They would take long detours across train tracks and through secondtier roads to go around them. At nightfall, they actually pushed the truck into the water and decided to walk the rest of the way for about [120 miles]. Their driving behavior when they were evading the checkpoints attracted police attention, which went to Ketsa, who was confident they intended to enter the heart of the metropolis or conduct conspire near it. He concentrated police and brought some military officials into that area. Coincidentally, Ludic still had friends in the military. After a day of anxious walking, evading police and military, they snuck into an administrative building. This was a great rest, since they camped under bridges and in hidden alleyways for days without much rest or food. They found a pantry with good ood and meat, which the Barreners enjoyed. They slept on large, padded chairs, a relative luxury. A night lasts about one and a half times longer there. Ludic used the [couple of hours] before dawn to get help. He made a bunch of calls, pretending to be an official gathering information for various purposes. He managed to get through to a few military friends. He couldn’t tell them much about himself, but he enjoyed talking with them for what he knew would be the last time. He told his friends a little about how he was trying to stay low, and he pretended to still be a runaway afraid of the army’s judgment. None of them could possibly come to him or exercise any power, but one of them did have something to offer. He told Ludic about a friend of his that was stationed in the deep inner city. This friend was someone that was always friends of his friend’s friends. He also shared some disagreements with the state. After talking to his friends, he called the trains and found a freight train was headed for [a few miles] outside of the central city, and it was leaving in [an hour]. Besides bringing some food, they also forge some signatures onto papers that they might show to guards if they are stopped. As the fist light of dawn appeared, the company walked to the trains through the morning mist, where they would meet with the friend. -Because all the water runs in one direction and the climate everywhere is the same, weather patterns are very regular and uneventful on Homeworld. The morning mist is a dependable occurrence. -It’s not unlikely that Ludic could be mistaken during his earlier times for being gay or psychologically androgynous.

-Possible: Maybe one of the travelers should change their mind midway through it all. Perhaps this person just wants to go back, but realizes this is impossible since the state knows their a vagrant now. So, instead the person tries to betray them to go back into favor with the state. Then, as usual, the older brother puts an end to it (being the harsh protector of the group). The officer gathers information about the calls put through from that location, and learns about the actual conspirators and gains insight about their plans from the locations the calls were directed to, such as the train station. Any riders at the local station were checked before boarding. Even though the gang arrived in the early morning, plenty of guards were at the entrances already. Ludic went to find the friend while the others stayed in an alleyway. He walked to the arranged meeting place, a lamppost just outside a military bunkhouse. A soldier in uniform was standing there, smoking. Ludic walked up to him. He walked up to him and asked “What’s your name?” “It’s Asac. Do you want something?” “I was told to meet you here.” “Oh. Hello Ludic. I thought there would be a few of you.” He stepped on the cigarette. “They are busy right now. Can you help us onto the express?” “Of course. Bring them and we’ll go.” “I would like proof of your intentions. Why do you want to help us?” “You hurt me. I’m doing this because you rebels and I share a lot in common.” We learn about him and the person he is, such as how he is less than patriotic and is in the same boat. Asac is actually working with the police. When the friend from the military called him on Ludic’s behalf, Asac meant to go through with helping them. Asac is actually rather similar to Ludic, but he has taken advantage of the benefits of military loyalty. Even though he is actually less than a patriot, he changes his mind shortly before Ludic arrived, and he makes a quick arrangement with the police. He would bring these people to a part of the train depot where they would be ambushed and arrested easily, and Asac would be rewarded. He reveals himself when he says something he shouldn’t know (This is because the police gave him some information when he told them about him. The police weren’t sure if these were the ones they were after, so they don’t bring all of their cops into the trap) Ludic brings him back to the group, and as he is apparently leading them to the trap Ludic carefully informs the others and they divert him somehow off the intended path toward a secluded place, probably another water area. Asac tries to continue his plot the whole time, even afer he is confronted with their suspicions. While talking, he gives excuses for what he is doing, and it ends in his death because of Ludic’s

accuracy and . He ends up dead, and they are unsure if he really meant the things he said about himself. (Years later Ludic reconsiders all the events and determines he was probably being honest, and the event becomes another regret.) -Maybe Asac, despite seing things wrong with society, belives in the importance of duty and his assigned role. His sence of duty betrays allies and leads to his death. They leave the place stealthily, and it turns out getting onto the trains is easier than expected. They just walk among the many trains being pulled around until they find the right labeled train, and then they just jump into a loaded car. (They get some luck because the trainyard has curved rails and they chose a loaded car so that nobody comes to put more inside it.) The train is an express to the center, where the aristocrats live and the most supreme efforts are carried out, so it is carrying a huge amount of goods. -It seems odd that a somewhat less than common person and a group of renegades could make it into the center of it all. What are the key factors that make this possible? They are well learned after their rebel operations, Ludic particularly since he has experienced so much more. The four Barreners should help in those critical moments when they come close to being caught. They also have the naiveté of their countrymen working for them. -The older brother character is distinguished by his general anger, which comes from the dissapointment at home. He is one of the first to consider killing an enemy in any situation. The train takes them directly to the central city. (They aren’t checked because the sheer amount of traffic makes it unfeasible to check everything.) They leave the train at a stop just outside the city (A careful and wise decision, because the police mean to check every train arriving from the neighborhood they were spotted in). The center is about 100 miles across, from one end the outer shore of the lake that surrounded it to the other side of the shore. They are only just inside the city. The grand spaceport is near the center, meaning they need to walk about 50 miles through the densest part of the city. Even though the place is the home of the Aristocrats and the center of the unarguably greatest government in the world, security is more relaxed than expected. Guards are quite common there, and so are military being sent out for missions, but they aren’t all that careful because in reality (opposed to what the public is told) there are few serious threats. Their more in danger by the people under officer Ketsa, who are pursuing them in all possible places, particularly the capital. A few days later, the disorderliness of the car they were in brings some additional attention. -Around here, Ketsa’s investigation finally identifies Ludic’s prints. His suspicions are confirmed when somebody realizes the odd prints found at the scene are those of Barreners (the finger has a little bump where retractable claws are). He expands the search to be more thorough, including all military runaways. The reason the searches take so long and are so small is that the Aristocracy doesn’t like letting their people use computers for anything. -As said earlier, remember not to make Ludic unrealistically clever. Let Illa and others think of things.

-When they get into the center, maybe that is when Ludic makes up his mind to go. They began walking through the dark streets. They had no idea where to go from there, but they needed a place to stay. They were all surprised when they saw a pair of Barreners walking towards them. After some quick arguing, they decided to ask them who they were and what they were doing there and to see if they might help. [The older brother] stopped them. He greeted them in his own language (the chances that they were from the same area were low), and asked if they knew the local language. They replied in the local language. A conversation started, and the two strangers said they were some hired servants and they were brother and sister. Ludic This is when it came up that many workers were brought to the capital for certain jobs, such as entertainment, servant work, and special security positions. They were very curious who the gang was, and how the Barreners could be unaware of this. [The older brother] told them he was aware, and that his whole family was offered positions and residence there in exchange for their property, but they declined becauase the locality was so unpleasant (to a Barrener, the constant rain and the smog and close quarters would be very unpleasant compared to where they come from). asked them directly if they were loyal patriots of the state. They acted uneasy, but since the Barreners in the group didn’t talk highly about the state they admitted with smiles to be there for the high paying jobs. Going directly to the next point, Ludic asked if they would harbor fugitives. They were surprised by this, and asked if they were the fugitives. They said they knew a place to stow them, but they couldn’t keep them for long. They knew that being a fugitive there could mean you simply didn’t like the state, and they were sympathetic. They didn’t suspect them of being murderers or terrible thieves (though one of them was a murderer). They lead them a few blocks away to a wine cellar where they talked more. Illa carefully told them the parts of the story they needed to know. She told them about the refuge for those who didn’t entirely like their life, about the false leader, how they just wished to leave, how their new friends came along to join them because they were tired of both worlds altogether, how their false leader betrayed them, and how they made their way to the capital so they could escape, pointing out that they went to the capital spaceport instead of a smaller one because they could get the extrastellar ships there only and it was part of the deal wit the Barreners to get an extrastellar ship. The two were intrigued, particularly by their want to travel out of known existence altogether. They told them they were impressed and sympathetic, but they were very worried about the risks of harboring them. They could be fired for it, but they would probably receive worse. They told them they would let them stay in the cellar for the night, but that others come by often. They asked what their plan was for getting into space. They used to have plans they could try, but they thought they would try just getting in there and stowing away. The two told them there were better ways to try getting in. They told them what they knew about the capitol, and that nobody was ever known to get onto a ship without firm permission. They suggested they might get across much more safely if they had disguises and if they could forge the right documents. The two could tell them how to get to an office where they had that, but they couldn’t come along to help. The gang stayed the night, and the next morning they thanked them for the help and went off.

Officer Ketsa was getting very frustrated. It felt like he was receiving evidence of the runaway’s locations just a day too slow. He had sent his police after them as they journeyed over a thousand miles, but they were more difficult than any other runaways in his experience. That morning, he just heard about the death of a loyal informant who was killed by the gang a couple of nights ago. Now that they went far enough to commit murder, he would have many fewer restrictions on how aggressively he could pursue them. He suspected they were in the center by now, so he might not even get the reward for their capture since he suspected the local police would stop them. The gang broke into an administrative building they were told to go to. It was daylight this time, and the Homeworld people stayed in an alleyway while the Barreners actually climbed the building a few floors and entered through a window. They walked among the workers, and even though they didn’t pretend well the people assumed they were there on their own business and left them alone. They found a store room full of unissued military items. They took uniforms for the four Homeworld men in the group based on the sizes given to them and the appropriate ranks Ludic wrote down for them. They also took four rifles and other accessories. They sneaked out through the window, and the four changed into the uniforms. They were now well disguised, but the four Barreners looked a little ragged for high-class servants, and the three Homeworld women didn’t look like they fit either. The Barreners break into an Aristocrat’s home (which turns out to be surprisingly easy). They steal clothing and information. Other servants try to stop the theives since the Aristocrats will suspect them, but they lead them to where their armed guys are and they explain that they can blame the stolen clothes on them, and they ask nicely that they don’t tell their bosses about noticing them until they actually notice the missing clothes. They accept as long as they get payment. OR, the Barreners, having heard many Aristocrats can’t tell the difference among Barreners, pose as servants at the time when they were told the regular servants will be out. They act the part and steal clothes just before they bail. -Narrate some part from the point of view of an officer or official documenter, showing the bad sides of their actions. -They try their best, but the state catches up with them. The gang walks toward the spaceport. They find that despite the higher police presence, they can steal from homes much more easily, taking food and such. They even manage to find the location of the office where they process permissions for getting onto ships. When they get very close to it, officer Ketsa finally narrows down their location after their increasingly reckless activity, and his police close in. Eventually the group made it to the last part of the journey. Because the purpose of most space voyages was military in nature, the area surrounding the spaceport was essentially a military base. The plan was to disguise as military and service personnel, sneak onto a vessel, and either hijack it or run away and disappear as soon as they landed on an alien

planet. The plan was doomed from the start. The military had their identities, and the plan was easier to imagine than carry out. Before they entered the boundaries of the base, they were spotted and quietly surrounded by the black-suit police. “We’ve been found.” Ludic said to his nearest friend. “What do you mean?” “Have you noticed how quiet it is? Barely anybody else is out, the residents are hiding in their homes. That is part of the police strategy, allegedly for their own protection, but also so nobody sees what happens. Remember? We’ll disperse, and then meet in the square at nightfall. If you don’t find me then, stay in this neighborhood. Whisper it to the others, tell them to split up and run when I start running.” “Yes boss. Oh, sorry. You don’t want to be called that.” They continued to walk down the street in the bottom tier of the city. Ludic could see his friends were getting restless from the news. The cops would move in soon. They continued walking until they reached a staircase, and several alleys were around them. Ludic sprinted up the stairs, and his some of his friends yelled things out as they broke off and ran in different directions. The police were very close, and a few jumped out from their hiding places and pursued. One shot his machine gun in their direction, but hit nobody. Two runners were caught as soon as they ran into alleyways. Ludic reached the second tier street, and ran into an apartment building. He continued running until he reached the other side, and ran out into the street and up another staircase to the top tier. He was spotted by an officer here, and he threatened to shoot if Ludic didn’t surrender. Instead, Ludic shot him with his rifle, and kept running. There were pedestrians up here, and some people screamed. Three uniformed Barreners emerged together as if from nowhere, armed with Sub-machine guns, and ran straight for him. He knew how much faster they were, and even though they would intimidate others into surrender, he ran behind a car, turned around, and said “Stop” while he pulled out the revolver and aimed for one of them with the rifle in his right (while it rested on the car) and aimed the revolver in their general direction. They actually stopped. They were still in the middle of a populated street, and more police would be there soon. He said “I know you are in this fight for money, but mine is a fight of ideology! Just stay out of this, unless you love this place like the rest of the simpletons!” One stayed in his place, but one started running while the other opened fire, just as three police emerged from the second tier. With accuracy the police didn’t anticipate, he shot the fast approaching Barrener in his tracks and then one of the officers. He turned into an alleyway, and continued running erratically, while just two police and a mercenary followed him, the officer being officer Ketsa. Even though the special enforcement (The black-suited) cops being former military officers, were among the most qualified in the country, Ludic had experience enough to evade the other two, but the leader could predict his path whenever he turned a corner. Thinking on his feet, he led him into a populated office. It was noisy and busy. Ludic ran until he reached a quieter hall, and he stopped at the end of an empty dead-end with the gun drawn, and listened for footsteps. He meant to hit the officer with a single

shot. When the officer didn’t appear after several [minutes], Ludic saw he made a mistake. While he was running, the officers couldn’t guess where he would be. He did lose the officer in the factory among the workers, but that meant the officer could call other police. Now that Ludic shot policemen, he was a high priority offender. He put the gun away and walked casually toward an exit, and he found the workers were all leaving. Unfortunately police were identifying all of the workers leaving the building. Ludic retreated toward the deep basement, and finding soldiers arriving into the building from all directions, ran to the roof instead. Even though Ludic has a revolver with a few shots, he is a much better shot plus he is clever enough to gain advantages when he makes the officer come to him. The police rush into the building (not in a tactical way like SWAT guys, they just run in there) and Ludic locks himself on the roof. The officers check the rest of the building, and they try to have him shot from the rooftops of surrounding buildings, but Ludic uses his experience to move some objects around and wisely maneuver so they cannot shoot him. Ketsa is brought in to kill him because officers traditionally get to execute the one they are in charge of catching and he wants to continue it (basically for beurocratic reasons and those conservative, “must do things the right way” reasons, plus he want the honor), and they break through to the roof and he goes in with a sub-machine gun and body armor and a few other well-armed guys. In the couple of hours he was up there, he formed some good defenses and traps. He waits in a shadow, surrounded by some defensive things, where waits for and shoots an officer. He uses the advantage in similar ways to eliminate more of them, until he runs into Ketsa. The officer says some mean things about him and his type of people while he walks around trying to find him. Here he also announces his suspicions that Ludic killed his uncle. He is the only one that figured it out. Ludic manages to flank him and shoot his weapon arm. The officer drops it, and falls to the ground, and apologizes and tells him he only wanted to anger him so he would reveal himself. He says he knows Ludic is just an unlucky kid and that he hopes he can just return to society. Ludic asks if he feels the same way about the other people he was sent after. Unlike a common hero type, he shoots this villain instead of walking away. Four were sent up, and he killed two. The other two run back into the building, and a few minutes later regular soldiers are sent up. He is ready to fight to the death, but when he sees they are army men he put the gun down and makes it clear that he gives up. [Later, when asked why, he explains he does not want to harm the ignorantly innocent. The officers were dedicated loyalists, but he knows soldiers are simpler people.] The soldiers beat him up a little, arrest him, and take him to a prisoner van. Inside are all of the people in the gang, except for one Homeworld man that was killed when he fought back. In the van, one thing that happens is he counts the people he’s killed and counts who he thinks deserved it. They are taken to a prison, and the police promptly begin to interrogate them. The officer in charge of them now is even worse than Ketsa. He is almost 70 years old, but he is not at all a kindly old man. He berates them and wonders out loud at the same time “All of us accept the way of things but you. I wonder why. Foolish.” Ludic argues philosophical things with him, and he demonstrates a thought-out philosophy common among the

commoners. They don’t stay in that prison for much longer than a day, because their extreme feats are a freak occurrence, and they are brought to Aristocrats. They are restrained while the Aristocrat’s guards guard them. Some of the Aristocrats have a conversation with them, and some things become clearer. “Since we were created onto this world, the only choice was total unification or destruction.” “How long ago was that? When we were created?” “I have no idea. It was a very long time ago.” “I doubt many of the things you say.” The personalities of the Aristocrats are shown. They really don’t act very differently from the commoners. They are likely to be smarter, but not very. They don’t even have to exercise their minds much; their roles in society are to control the people who manage and to exercise high judgment and law. They make executive decisions for society, so they don’t actually do much work. Mentally, they are as bigoted and simple as the rest of them. They aren’t much more educated than a common person, since an education feed open-mindedness, and they don’t need to be much more open-minded than a common person. The band sees definitely that the Aristocrats are no better than any commoner. There are some arguments of philosophy in the conversation. -remember philosophy in the conversation. For one thing, what’s been presented as truth have been lies. Foreign people can bee good. In fact, just about all the foreigners Ludic has known were good to him. Another thing is that the Aristocrats are totally unaware that they are very similar to commoners. Ludic and others are unsure about what to believe now, but the Aristocrats say that is because they are (in some way) retarded. When asked to explain what made them retarded, the Aristocrats say they were exposed to the evils from outside of civilization (few of the people there are aware actual civilizations other than their own exist) and they are pitiful for it. Ludic asks how they can be against that when they interact with Barreners every day, but they explain they are the smartest and wisest people so they can benefit from it without being harmed. Another argument is that society is perfect compared to the other places people live. There are rarely murders or social disturbances of any kind, and therefore they as a nation are the strongest force anywhere. Crime and separatists are actually a recent phenomenon, starting a few hundred years ago, shortly after the first space vessels were known to have traveled. Ludic tries to clarify who his grandfather was. He wasn’t a particularly special person, just somebody who was too different. He looked around and knew too much. He actually would not have been a bad candidate for Principal Aristocrat, but he had feelings against the system. He eventually went too far, and so he was killed and his family was dishonored. After conversing for a while and having their fun, the Aristocrats give their judgment to execute them. The gang turns militant again. They try to break out, and almost escape the mansion, but they couldn’t go very far since they are in the center of the Aristocracy. They are put in a basement, apparently for immediate execution. Some people pray, but just stares at nothing and talks about his thoughts on things now that it’s all seemingly

over. He also asks who they think they are praying to, since if they believed in god he must be against them after all they have done. (Despite being alleged sinners, they get pretty lucky in the end. Who would expect that after defying the deity?) A few hours later, they are taken instead to the seat of all power, the mansion of the Principal Aristocrat. Because the people are worked hard until the day they die without any objections, the members of the aristocratic class live in ridiculous luxury. Maybe the actual intention of the aristocracy is to breed their people into a sort of submissively communal race. This would be how they view what they are doing, as simply the caretakers of a new race. Their reasons for sticking to it are not scientific, however. They continue because they are accustomed to the fantastic lifestyle. The position of Principal Aristocrat is kept secret to minimize any quells for power. Maybe he gets out by threatening to tell somebody who the principal aristocrat is. The aristocrats know little history so that they have few examples to draw upon. Maybe just before he leaves, he tells an are rebellious aristocrat who the Principal is. While the commoners are quite calm, Aristocratic society is the most turbulent. TO ELABORATE ON: The Aristocrats are not necessary, since the system can run itself if it was arranged right. The Aristocrats exist essentially because they can. The founder wanted people to socialize and work with, and he believed countries should be ruled by a selected superior class. He meant for his civilization to be brutally efficient and utopian; for the Aristocrats to do all the thinking and head the intellectual pursuits and for the commoners to provide all the labor and do the work, keeping the two classes separate. -A while ago, I thought that the Aristocracy might constantly be engaged in some sort of warfare games. These might be used to keep the cooperative people of the planet suspicious of those outside their local areas. Just an old thought. -The aristocrats have “manners”. They have many high society traits that show others and themselves that they are the superior people. In the past and now, following the trends and all the mannerisms of society is one way to show your value. By doing these status things and emulating the values of the best race in the world (your own), you show your value. People who didn’t follow the practices of society, such as low-class people or counter-cultures, haave been valued less by all civilizations. This has gone on throughout history. -The state is self-perpetuating, really. It depends on the traits easily inherited in people such as bigotry. -The Aristocrats have no actually redeeming qualities. No artistic vision, for instance. - Many aristocrats are fat, but the principal isn’t. He is quite different from them, reminiscent of an alien or the god that isn’t a hypocrit because he creates the rules. -Reveal what it is that sets the Aristocrats apart. Are they more intelligent? Are they the most gullible? Are they the most similar to the leader? The aristocrats are really the only source of ideas, and they are the management. -At it’s best, religion can keep people safe and from committing evil. Leaving religion frees a person, but it exposes them to unfiltered reality. -The religion is a tool, but not the cause. -Many of the Aristocrats heve a personal or family history of loyalty mixed with aggresive manipulation for power. They expect them all to be executed, but they speculate that he not a farfetched candidate for an aristocrat, even at this point.

-As part of their frivvolizm, the aristocrats have many fads. Many keep their hair long, and many also play with styles. -religion plays a major role, and the aristocrats are royalty and clergy. -The topic comes up of who the Barreners are. They are actually all humans, but the principal hold they are aliens and they are animals that developed independently. -It is here they learn the identity of the Principal Aristocrat is kept secret. The pprincipal is actually there, but he appears to be just another aristocrat. His name is mentioned onece when somebody addresses him, but few recognize him when he talks to them later.

The principal talksto them individually, but the major thing is Ludic’s conversation. His own people would want to kill Ludic, but the Principal Aristocrat sees Ludic as just one abnormality out of billions of carefully crafted and loyal people. He asks him questions about his life and how he came to be the way he is, and he just lets him go eventually. Part of the conversation: “We believe in what we say. We have goals for our people, and isolating them is an important part of our plan.” This guy explains his view, explaining how what Ludic has done will create some difficult to repair damage to civilization. He also explains what he has been trying to do for the past thousand years with these people, in much softened terms. He doesn’t explain in great detail, he says he is a leader of a nation and he does what he wants. He also argues it is a benefit to the human race since it shows what they can do when they are united. “Are these people from out of our sun’s area really the gods? Are they the ones who made us and created the rules?” “Of course! And the members of the aristocracy have always been their representatives.” “This doesn’t make sense. I’ve heard god is the supreme power, but then why do these gods simply use machines? It seems like gods are no more than people with more power than we have. It seems like you have all the power on this world.” The guy continues to say these people are gods, but he’s a skilled liar. He knows the truth because he is the one who continues the project. They get onto the personality of the guy, and who he is anyway. “You haven’t said anything about the people that died because of us.” “The officer you shot is a hero, who died fighting for what he believed in. He will be celebrated among his peers.” “But he will be forgotten after a generation.” “Why should that matter? Everybody is forgotten in time.” -In the conversation the guy should use those common argument cheats. Ludic argues that the barreners turned out to be good people. The guy argues that they are not dependably good, and they came not to help, but to get a spaceship. … has been the only person dependably good to him, since they came to help partially on her request. “I see you’re a smart person, you’ll understand in time. You will be an asset if you let us make you into one.” He doesn’t want to let him die, because he is interested in him. He tells him he should be raised as a member of the Aristocracy because if he is not one of the lower classes he must be an Aristocrat. He calls him a misplaced Aristocrat. If he actually was turned he would make a good one. He tells him the reason his grandfather was outcast and killed, but in his own version of it. Maybe he has discrepancies in the story that allow the reader to see the actual version out. He thinks Ludic could make a

good Aristocrat because he has qualities that most Aristocrats lack (because they have been bred to the point of dullness) and the guy has few personal friends. He also feels that the other one’s are very dull and really all the same. Most of the Principals elected in the lines have been somewhat different from other Aristocrats, so he hopes Ludic could be a friend at least, and possibly even his replacement if he could be made to understand his point of view. He’s lonely at the top too. Ludic refuses. Among the reasons, he knows he would be reduced to the stupidity of the Aristocrats. Even though he would live in absolute luxury, he would sooner go out into unknown space. He tells the Principal his only goal remains to leave the world. “So bizarre. You expect to simply fly to heaven, and for the gods to just let you in?” (the founder himself was Atheist, as were the other people of his civilization, but religion will always be a tool.) “I don’t think these are gods. I think they are people just like us from far away.” “That’s interesting. How did you come to that conclusion” “You’ve lied to everyone, but I think I know the truth. I’ve been told Barreners are completely alien from us, but that isn’t true. They are the same shape as us, they act the same, and they seem to think the same even. If this world wasn’t under one country, they wouldn’t be all the same. From what I’ve heard, Barren is extremely different, but even though it’s the only other world that’s admitted to exist it’s been treated by the army as just more land to exploit. To me it seems like an amazingly different place, and I’ve been told civilization exists there, and that it existed even before we came along. Since this is the case there, on a world that isn’t all that special for some reason, that must mean there are more worlds with people living on them, people like us.” “This is why we don’t educate you. You would be so happy if you knew nothing.” “Yes, I would. But don’t think I’m unaware of why the people here are kept ignorant. Once they know things, they become like me. They stayed content because they only know one world and one way. I know it would be fruitless to try and change this world, and I don’t want to. There are greater things, and I would never be content if I lived as an Aristocrat here.” He asks Ludic if he thinks badly of the state. Ludic says he is very angry at it. Then the guy asks if the state keeps it’s people happy. Ludic admits that it does, but he loathes the world and cannot live on it. “I guess you’re just a different person from the rest of us. The founder was like you; he couldn’t accept the civilization he lived in. He was great, and I know I’ll never be like him. If he wasn’t given the opportunity, our race would never exist. You have gotten so far, and you only mean to leave. I don’t want to just let you go, but you won’t stay, and I would be unhappy to see you die.” At this point Ludic still doesn’t know about the planet’s actual history. -The character could be a fickle one, quick to change his mind. -New possibility: maybe the character is more of a person that has learned a lot about reality, like Ludic will. He thinks more like a computer, acting subjectively but with little feeling. He is a little hypocritical, though he does sincerely think of humself as a good guy. -Remember the old friend who wanted to be artistic, but is killed. Ludic is shown that this friend is dead when the leader gives him one of the paintings to take away. -Whether he is let go or what, while he is leaving he reveals the name of the Principal. Maybe another Aristocrat asks him, and possibly in exchange for freedom. Another possibility is that he just announces it on the radio. Effectively, the thing is he would successfully break the Aristocracy by providing a chance for power-hungry

Aristocrats to rebel. An Aristocrat in an inferior place might try to convince people otherwise from what they have learned. -From where did we originate? | The first settlers came from a……called…… | And where did they originate? | I don’t know. | -It is very difficult to keep people simple while introducing technology. If they aren’t kept simple, they will differentiate. Society must be carefully prepared for every new thing, or else the structure may fall apart from the inside. -You have aggressively pursued the truth, but there are great questions I can only speculate on the answers to. How far are you going to pursue it? Are you brave enough to gamble losing your mind? The answers may likely be worse and more destructive than you can imagine. Our peasants are happy, they have purpose and meaning. | …They’re meaning is to serve you. | That isn’t all of it. I am working toward bringing society toward an ultimate goal. When this society is greater, it will be decided what that goal is. | Nobody alive now will take part in that. Many have and will live their lives without even knowing what they are alive for. | And you have decided that is not good enough. Don’t you see it’s possible to know to much? | I would rather know everything. Even if it would kill me, at least I would know it all. -There are good people and there are bad people. The world is simple. | How do you see those that posess some good traits and some bad traits? | Those people are ugly at their best. I consider them bad. | Maybe good and evil varies on opinion. [Reality is more complex than it would seem] -He knows that an actual invasion would be quite easy, but it would be impossible to keep them under power and keep societal stability. -Part of the ideology is that the human race is sure not to fail. The way it operates is similar to being in a constant state of emergency, so if anything severely bad happened, such as an invasion of some sort, they could mobilize to handle it. -“are you aware of how inconsistent religion is on that planet? Doesn’t that say something to you?” The religion of that planet is not consistent with theirs, but religion on their own is rarely totally consistent. -What a huge lie heaven is. It’s a terrible illusion. People have and continue to take terrible treatment for the promise of heaven. It does keep people from investigating and exploring though.

---------------The story of the planet’s foundation and it’s reason for being the way it is: The first settlers were from an extremely advanced civilization. This civilization was able to do unimaginable things because they were so afvanced. The original people had ideologies different than the mainstream of the culture, so they were allowed to start from scratch on this terraformed world. Once they settled, they divided into groups and decided what each of their new civilizations would have technologically and genetically and such. Afterward, they were cut off from outside contact and these original people were free to develop on their own. (The philosophy of the society that released them was that people are free to have their own philosophical beliefs. The mot major issue is the ultimate end or goal of humanity. In this civilization, that issue was an extremely controversial topic.) Unfortunately for the rest of the world, the one who created the

Aristocracy had specific, sort of crazy plans for his own civilization which involved getting rid of the others. He united his people completely and conquered most of the world. He left a third unconquered deliberately as part of his big plan, since people controlled by fear need enemies. After a thousand years, his position was passed on to others who could keep to his philosophy (It wasn’t hard; even the Aristocrats are very similar. When a person deviates a little from the norm, they aggressively reject that person or force him/her to conform.). He considered his nation a success, but he left to higher civilization to enjoy himself while his civilization grew. The position of Principal Aristocrat is designed not to create contention for power. The head aristocrat is actually kept very private, and only his personal police and staff know who he is. Every Principal passes his position secretly to a successor who is considered the best candidate for carrying on the founder’s beliefs. His decestors recently (200 years ago) renewed contact with the outside universe, being the beginning of the next stage of society. The newest successor has some complex plans for spreading his race. He must be careful that his people don’t take too much outside influence. The stated purpose of the regime is safety against fictional enemies and dangerous influences. The original leader ironically wanted to create a new society from scratch in which there would be no deviance allowed, yet he desired to create a new society form scratch because he didn’t like the one he lived in. He and a few thousand others were brought to Barren and Homeworld, far away from the civilization they lived in because they had ideological differences with the civilization they were from. One problem that could produce these people is that there are so many different things a culture might consider to be the ultimate destiny or goal that there will naturally be deviants who believe in some other path. One of the core ideals behind the creation of Homeworld was a strict hold on people, so they can do things with unity. Ludic asks what that society and culture is building up to, what the ultimate point of it all is. The guy explains it is assuring human existence, which they will continue until such time as they are advanced enough to some to that decision. He says are working for something that will benefit all humans in time, since so many end up leaving the universe for other things. The planets were chosen for terraforming specifically for their gravity and proximity and they’re far away from any great technological civ. Barren was also settled like this, but one specific ideology can only be spread so far on that world before it loses strength. The excelled radiation on barren was supposed to be temporary, but all the original people died out after a hundred years. People continued to evolve on their own after that. (Their basic human attributes, such as their faces and body structure, were not changed as much. Their appearances are mostly the same as what can be found in regular humans today (skin color, facial structure), except for commonly shared differences. (Most of the planet is the same environment, so the differences are found from the specific types of regions they settle in and the history of their family lifestyle (such as dawn migrators)) The most recognizable common features were much increased metabolism and the animal-like tails and ears for balance and improved senses. There was much interbreeding, since people were culturally very flexible, and these features were very suited to the planet’s harsh conditions. These dramatic changes were much increased by the radiation. The reason Ludic’s people aren’t in control of F’s planet is because it is not a feasible idea. The geography and culture would make sustained dictatorship very

difficult. Instead they do business and trade with them. They assert ownership of some small parts, such as vacation cities for the rich and remote sites kept for storage and experiments. Perhaps thy keep prisoners and other people deemed undesirable here and put them to work. Maybe some elderly that are not useful enough are sent as labor. [AND DON’T LAST VERY LONG. MAYBE RELATE THIS TO THE MOTIVE OF GREED; IT ENABLES THE CHILDREN OF THE ELDERLY TO TURN THEIR BACKS ON THE AGED SO THAT THEY CAN INHERIT. REMEMBER THAT THE REFUSAL TO ALLOW INHERITANCE WAS A PUNISHMENT TO LUDIC’S FAMILY. A MINOR THEME LIKE THIS WILL HELP TO HOLD THE STORY TOGETHER.] The society is impeded severely because it’s too hard for anybody to adjust to new changes, such as spaceship technology. The ideology has kept society stable and productive, but among the advantages is failure to change. It moves very slowly, and must be very carefully controlled or else the system will die. The unfortunate and hard to accept thing about the place is that it does work. It lasted for a thousand years, and so the people have adapted to it and accepted their roles. The people work together very well, and the entire nation is capable of coordination and moving toward goals collectively. Many social issues are eliminated. (Individual greed is absent among the common people, since everything goes to the Aristocrats. Crime is very low. (most crimes involve people trying to get wealthy without acting in favor of the government) People get along very wel, but there is high discrimination against different people. There are no gay rights or birth control or sex ed, since it is part of the prerogative to have as much man-power as possible. Gun control is very high, but this helps keep crime down. Homeless are absent, although this is because everybody is used to their maximum. Justice leans toward the favored. There is almost total peace within the nation, except in extreme examples. The planet could be called overpopulated, although food is not a problem because they grow nutritious gruel plants at home. Socially, there are commoners who can at most imitate the high class by appeasing them. Much of this is possible partly because the people as individuals are very weak, one reason being they are kept stupid and ignorant and very restrained. Social offences are actually very common among the higher people, such as aristocrats and military. The Aristocrats are said to be the ones the true burdens are on,and while it is true that they are the most educated and The weakness in it is that they cannot adapt to change, because changes would break the dependable regularity of the society. It simply can’t work in the long term unless it is managed really slowly and carefully. Show that such a society, though stable, does not work with changing conditions. Show that on Barren, they absorbed technology very well in the ten hundred years since Homeworld people arrived, while the Homeworld government can’t adapt themselves to that planet at all. It is noted that every smart Homeworld person who did things right was removed from position for some reason (Because these are different people, they have what it takes to adapt, but are unpopular with their own people. Maybe some leave the government to live successful lives on Barren.) Little changes can go a very long way. Because the people are worked hard until the day they die without any objections, the members of the aristocratic class live in ridiculous luxury. Maybe the actual intention of the aristocracy is to breed their people into a sort of submissively communal race. This would be how they view what they are doing, as simply the caretakers of a new race.

Their reasons for sticking to it are not scientific, however. They continue because they are accustomed to the fantastic lifestyle. Because the people are worked hard until the day they die without any objections, the members of the aristocratic class live in ridiculous luxury. Maybe the actual intention of the aristocracy is to breed their people into a sort of submissively communal race. This would be how they view what they are doing, as simply the caretakers of a new race. Their reasons for sticking to it are not scientific, however. They continue because they are accustomed to the fantastic lifestyle. [ALEX, I BELIEVE THAT TO MAINTAIN INTEREST WE MUST SEE THE EVIL IN THE GOVERNMENTAL STRANGLEHOLD ON CITIZENS RIGHT AWAY. THE ENEMY MUST ALWAYS REAR ITS UGLINESS SO THAT WE CAN APPRECIATE AND APPLAUD LUDIC’S EVOLUTION INTO WHO HE BECOEMS.] Don’t blatantly make them look evil, like there is simply a good side and a bad side. The way it operates should be shown more completely through examples. -Perhaps the Aristocracy can be said to be an example of an authoritarian state that has successfully and completely assured it’s power over the world and one that is moving purposefully toward a goal. Unlike the dystopia in 1984, the aristocracy isn’t terribly self crippling. For example, information can move around quickly, and common people are aware of most major events. -1984 has a specific type of authoritarian government, but the Aristocracy is like all the right-wing governments in the past, with the same strengths and weaknesses. -Usually, when people threaten the status quo, religion serves as a second form of defense. -The society should be open to discussion. It has good qualities for sure, and people should definitely be able to see things in it. -It would be interesting to see the future of that civilization. One thing is that it might assimilate many other people. It might have extremely great technology in the future, but it uses them simply to assure that it continues as it is. People might live with this technology, but their position would be the same. -technology can be seen as bad, and for those reasons advocates of that view can see the reasons they believe this to be so in the Aristocracy. -The advanced civilization that gives the Principal technology has a complicated relationship with them. They share the objective belief of the society that preceded them, which is why they observe and give some essential help to them. They also are aware that this society could some day become a major stellar power, even a threat. That is why they do not give them everything, but do not totally ignore them. -------------------------------------------

He thinks first that the only thing is to make him an aristocrat or execute them. Ludic says that he is willing to work something out. The principal makes this decision: He will become an aristocrat, and his friends will live. (He pretends that the reason he doesn’t let him go is that the Aristocrats won’t accept it) He must go to a reeducation center on Barren, where the mother of the siblings will regularly report on his progress. His Barrener friends and all of his other friends who want to go there will also be sent where they will be free and ignored, except for Illa, who will be held as a sort of hostage. [the

volatile state that Ludic creates when he announces the Principal’s name helps her later]. Ludic agrees to this.
Courses considered: -He orders them to be executed publicly, since punishment is an important part of authoritarianism. Maybe he personally sees some interesting things in him and would be sad if he died, but has to do it anyway. Maybe he can’t because the Aristocrats won’t have it. He and his friends are released by another aristocrat after he takes them aside and they make an exchange to tell him the name of the Principal. -He offers to let the rest go only if Ludic becomes his aristocrat. -The principal wants to let them go and does. -He offers to make him a highly esteemed servant if he won’t be an aristocrat. Perhaps this is just to get rid of him. -He doesn’t have the power to give him a ride on an extrastellar ship, but he lets him exile to Barren (Where he and his friends take one.) -Wants them to be reeducated and sends them to a reeducation center on Barren. Maybe they are trusted to …’s mother. -The older brother’s relation to a friend of the state should play into it. -Instead of just being let go, maybe he is pitied by a visiting person from space. -Does he send him to Barren to get rid of him? They send him there under the guise that he is now an important person. He doesn’t want to be an important person, and they don’t actually want to make him one. He is sent to a prison camp on Barren?}

The principal promptly sends them all back to a comfortable cell, except for Illa, who is meant to be kept close and out of contact with anybody outside his office/fortress/palace (although she later socializes with aristocrats). {The principal is a very careful person, it seems a little unlikely that Ludic would just run into one and they would start conversation. Maybe they are cut off from anybody besides the trusted servants of the palace, but some ambitious Aristocrat sends them very simple messages, arranging for them to give the identity of the Principal. Maybe the principal never reveals his name or anything besides his face, but he is there in the group of Aristocrats that talk to them. His name is mentioned only once when he is addressed by another, before they know who he is. On the trip to Barren, they are talking among themselves and he finds out one of them has keen memory. They connect the name and sell it to the overseer in exchange for a promise later on. The overseer sells this to an aristocrat for a huge price when he gets back, and this sets revolution in motion.} The next morning, they are put on a ship bound for Barren. -Before they board, they are inoculated for viruses. They are put onto a spaceship transporting soldiers and other prisoners who were bad enough but fortunate enough to be sent to be reeducated (minor criminals have things taken from them or forced to have their criminality publicly known, and major criminals are usually executed or forced to change through something like this.) To keep them, there are two soldiers for every prisoner, plus the crew. All the prisoners are criminals of some kind being sent to a reeducation center. The ship that the characters leave in has many simple and rugged features. It is very utilitarian.

-The controls on the inside are very ugly. They are manual reads, using those number displays that flip and things similar to speedometers. The inside resembles a nuclear reactor, with all sorts of those little metal switches and things. -The exterior is some simple shape, and it is white and grey. The white paint shows up strongly in all spectrums in case the ship get stranded. Around the middle is a wide rotating cylinder that produces gravity. There are large thrusters on the back, and smaller jets all around to turn it. On the back, starting in the middle of the thrusters, is a crane like things with a sort of bolt gun. It shoots the bolts using a hammer and heat, and the crane means it can shoot anywhere like a turret. The interior is similar to a submarine, with metal things all over and small quarters. -One feature is a safe room with a heavy door that locks on both sides, with a lock for the lock on both sides so that it serve the purpose of a safe room and prison. The vehicle is piloted by extremely loyal technicians, who rarely ever interact with others. They have one overseer from the advanced civilization. They regard him as some sort of heavenly representative, who they think is there to correct their mistakes and guide them through their complex work. He is actually more like a foreign worker, he is being payed luxuriously in valuable items for his work. Part of the contract is that he will become an enemy of the state if he tries to do anything against their wishes. He is a sort of passive person, and he is agnostic in many aspects of life. He is practically impartial to anyone. Part of his feelings of ambiguity is that he suggests reality might be a dream. He is smart, like many of his people, but he isn’t a genius. It is not very uncommon to be an operator of a space vessel, it’s about as common as train engineers in Ludic’s country. -The design of the ship is for transport. It was not created to be a prison ship. It’s meant to be a multi-purpose, reliable, simple transport, created for whatever uses the government might have. The group already makes plans for stealing it while they are on. Some socialization with the overseer goes on, and they learn about the schedule of it and if the guy could help them. They obviously can’t steal it now, since there are so many guards. The ship lands in the desert in an empty area near some tracks among some buildings. It is a strange sort of settlement. It is entirely a transport center and depot, with a supply depot and railroads headed to many areas. As a sign of the inadaptability of the conquerors, many structures are not adapted to the conditions of the world, and are falling apart. The entire settlement is constructed around servicing and supporting the ship. They barely spend any time here, since they are escorted to a train bound for the camp. When the ship lands, everybody is offloaded so they can be put on a train. When they are out and waiting for the train, the overseer yells out that he understands some of the Barreners have been in an uncomfortable place for a long time, so they can go and stretch their legs in the empty desert where they can be seen, and if anybody else feels like running into the desert they can. Most of the Barreners just start running, and shortly after Ludic feels an urge to try (he’s never even seen such an empty area, and the strange air of the place and the opportunity to just run away makes him want to) He takes off his jacket

and runs for a while, but after a couple minutes he gets really hot and has trouble breathing, and he vomits. The years of living in smog and the smoking have hurt his lungs, and he has to adjust to the new atmosphere. After waiting an hour, during which he becomes oriented a little, the train arrives and they are sent on a [eight hour] ride to the camp. Here, Ludic and his friends part ways. They are sent to …’s town, where the Barreners will go back to their families and friends and the Homeworld conspirators make their own life. They are brought to an isolated camp in the middle of the desert. It is walled off like a prison. The purpose is total isolation, so they can be reeducated more easily while the risk of their spreading back into Homeworld society is minimized. They are all told that they have no chance of escaping from prison, since the desert is hot, dry, and empty. They are also told they would meet “hostile natives” and “monsters”. (The locals are only potentially hostile, and there are some very dangerous animals) The camps being on that planet helps deter potential criminals, since most people think the planet is full of terrible barbarians and bad influences. -It not only has prisoners from Homeworld, but it also serves as an orientation school for Barreners moving to Homeworld. They are meant to assimilate as part of their assimilation by learning from the Homeworlders, but the overall effect is that the reeducation students take in the propaganda slower. -The place is also like a small military camp, since most Homeworld presence is either education centers like these (meant to serve the state) or military camps. -Oases of the vast desert are connected by lengthy lines of straight train tracks. The ride to …’s town is no longer than two days. Even though it is many hundreds of miles, the trains are able to go very fast. The tracks and the trains are designed that way. -Ludic was specifically sent to that one because it is the closest camp to that town, and …’s mother is meant to evaluate him. -The teachers in the institution are often changed in order to prevent them from assimilating. This creates a flaw, since every new administrator must be taught how things work. -Ludic stays for something less than a month. This ends up helping him sort of ease into the new environment, since he learns about the place from the other students. All the students have somewhat specialized education, but since Ludic is meant to become an Aristocrat his is more special. The instructors only know that he is meant to have training to make him suitable for official duty, and that …’s mother has precedence over his education. The instructors give him nicer consideration, since he seems more important and more respectable than the other students because of his specific education instructions. {The situation around this time is going to be complex.} His friends are all living in the hometown, except for Illan who is being kept as a hostage by the principal. The overseer sells the indentity of the principal a couple of days after they disclose it to him. (instead of them selling it to him, maybe the information should be given to an Aristocrat on the planet. This guy will work with them later, and it doesn’t seem right if he does things only for money. Maybe the Principal reveals his

identity only to Ludic after he agrees to be taught to become an aristocrat, and perhaps he then deftly trusts him now that he has a hostage. But then, it would mean that his trust destroyed everything. Maybe somehow it could be his mistrust that fails him? If it does, Ludic perhaps thinks about it and then gives the name to the overseer. Maybe there can be a sort of “counter-invasion” plot, where angry Barreners gather to attack Homeworld. Come to think of it, the name of the principal being known shortly after Ludic’s departure would lead to an obvious correlation by the principal, and that would lead to Illa’s death. She might make plots herself, and end up being the cause of chaos. Maybe she could go to the reeducation center, and Ludic is kept as the hostage? He stays in the school for a few months, since Illa would be killed if he didn’t. It is chaos among the aristocrats and Homeworld that allows her to escape, and then he hears about it and leaves the school. Maybe the guy from the ship is intelligent and able enough to manipulate things and help the scheme. The overseer might also see them as the most interesting people he’s met in years. He might also have learned to loath the Homeworlders. Maybe … takes a part in this. Maybe the other rebels feel thankful to him, since he almost managed to get to a ship with them, and it’s because of his deal that they were left with their lives. The plot doesn’t have to be as ambitious as destroying the Principal, they just need to make room for chaos, which could be done by creating an opening for an aristocrat to try taking power.

F and Ludic are foils to each other. Not totally though.

-After the dangers are passed, Ludic tries to decide what to make of all this. He has a hard time coming to terms with what everything he has seen means. … understands it better, and clears it up for him. A person’s heredity does not settle who they are, reality is not black and white. -Why did she want him to be rescued? What are all her motivations? Remember that he influences her as she did him. She influenced him when he was young, maybe now he influences her? Yes. He was a commoner until he was shown different things by her, and she isn’t particularly unique until he comes along. Since she met Ludic, she has been very empathetic for his well being and the state of life on the planet. The feelings of other Bsrreners for Homeworders usually range from apathy to hate. Usually the ones that actually know somebody from that world have any sympathy. Even up to the time the siblings met Ludic, they thought of the Homeworlders negatively. Even though they were told positive things, they knew not to accept everything their mother says, and all of their experiences with Homeworlders until then were negative. They saw men trying to take as many liberties with their mother’s offers as possible. They were vigilantly watched with suspicion by everyone who noticed them. -She has seen dualities in human nature too. Not only is she knowledgeable in history,

-Her history: She was already a different person, although she kept it to herself until he came along brought it up. She received a lot of education, even up to when Ludic comes. She lived in one town, though it was a wealthy and cultured place, and she traveled a lot. Her mother was one of the people who favored Homeworld culture and saw it as superior. She tried to impart her new values on her kids at a young age (part of the reason she brought them on her visits), but none of them were willing. Like in the Aristocracy, the oldest children are given the most. (the children could have lived with their father, but the mother argued very strongly to keep them, and she received help form the state since by then she already had some favor with them.) … was the oldest child after her oldest son, who was outright unwilling to live with that. …was the second oldest, and also the most open minded (after the trip where she became met Ludic). Her mother decided she would be her successor. The other children received less, and so … would receive the most but she also would be expected to do what her mother wanted from her. She loved all her children, but … the most. She went along because at first she was willing to learn about the other world, but after that she pitied her mother as she was going crazy and life became easier for her as her mother took care of everything while her siblings lived on their own (She was about 18 when Ludic arrived, and he was 19. Children are expected to go on their own at 17.) In her last day [meaning year], she became less mature. Until her mother began to indulge her (raising her like an aristocrat) she pursued intelligent things. She was very sad about her isolation from the rest of the family, and she was ashamed of herself as well. She felt trapped though, since she didn’t want to abandon her mother and reveal that she didn’t actually like the Homeworld way. -Her mother is not only somewhat crazy, but she also keeps her by dramatizing her problems and taking all her sympathy. Her mother was never totally sane, and she became worse when the father of the children left. She had the illusion that his relationship would last permanently, as they do on Homeworld, but he left his wife after the kids matured enough to take care of themselves, and she became crazier after that illusion was broken. He wanted to raise the kids, but she won that right. -possible addition: She already has a one-year old child. She had it with a man early on in her “loose living” phase. The child would be a newborn when her brother and friends left for Ludic. Later, she leaves the child and her man, allowing her mother to take care of it. -Why does she leave? Is she upset with the world and willing to leave everything for whatever potential wonders are out there? -Remember that she is now as major as Ludic. Figure out her traits. She is highly educated and knows about applying logic. Maybe, therefore, she should have comparable or faster skills in wisdom. -The Aristocracy has tried many times to assert itself in parts of Barren. They usually fail through incompetency, their soldiers and workers fail to adapt. In the long term (They started relations 200 years ago, when they received space technology from a third party) they have helped the planet a lot with technology, a sort of standard worldwide government (not a powerful one, but one that makes things easier by doing things such as providing a common currency and language), and they have brought overall peace among the population now that most aggressiveness is directed toward the government. A

number of Homeworlders who were moved to the planet for military purposes have deserted their government and immigrated. They are known for doing hard work and providing knowledge in their areas of expertise (which has helped the population by giving them more technological knowledge). Immigrants meet with varying acceptance, though it’s often surprisingly good, since the immigrants are usually people readily able to adapt and accept their new environment. They even breed with Barreners (they are all actually humans, but they are just more genetically different than people on modern Earth). The Aristocracies actions are irregular and their plans are unclear. Sometimes they actually try to conquer (which is easy since they have the technological and numerical advantage), and then they usually fail to hold their cities or territory by a failure to adapt and by the ignorance of their military leaders and soldiers. Over time, they have managed to slowly assimilate Barren (such as in language and how people have willingly accepted them in parts). The presence on Barren is actually directionless. It does provide the Principal Aristocrats with experience they can learn from and adapt to society in preparation for a future of spreading their ways. They actually could devastate Barren, but their purpose is assimilation. The Principal always learns the full history of his predecessors, and part of the big plan is to assimilate other races into the Aristocracy slowly in a way that can bring strength without weakening the status quo. The thing is that any influx of soldiers on Barren assimilates it more. A time would come in the future when the society of the Aristocracy and the conditions on Barren would be prime to make a major move. A small example is shown in the workers brought to the Aristocracy. They are unlikely to change the people they come in contact with (since the Aristocrats are very happy with their place), but they might be the first to assimilate. (Maybe there could be some Aristocrat children born from Barreners and Homeworlders?) -On both planets, there is a presence of people from a nearby really advanced civilization. They treat Homeworld scientifically, respecting their unique place and plans for the future, like anthropologists that mostly neutrally observe small and relatively benign culture. They interact with the head Aristocrat only. They are willing to give his society good technology, but it doesn’t fit into his plans. He just uses it for necessary things such as keeping the planet from becoming unlivable, and he took a little technology for spaceships so he could begin assimilation. They also observe Barren, but they don’t directly talk to anybody because they don’t regard anybody as major enough to deal with them. They want to let them develop more overall before they share technology. The nearby civilization isn’t the one that the founder and his colleagues came from, that society has gone on to something greater, outside of the universe. This civilization is actually another ideological offshoot from that one. Chaos was ignited when the name of the principal’s identity was revealed to an aristocrat. He starts his own rebellion to steal the power. This upsets many things, including Homeworld power on Barren. -Ludic should have interaction with the nomadic scholar-monks. -telling from point of view of two soldiers on Barren. “We brought them peace.”

-He and her get along well. He likes how smart she is for onr thing. He really appreciates that. From Ludic’s and F’s point of view, they are learning about different people and these concepts sort of like children do. When they leave their homes or shortly after, they abandon many pre-conceived ideals and notions to learn about the worlds outside. [CAN SHOW THAT THESE ABOVE-AVERAGE INTELLIGENT PEOPLE CONSTANTLY EVOLVE AS THE PEOPLE THEY MEET GIVE THEM NEW INSIGHT THAT SPURS THEIR EMOTIONAL, MORAL, AND POLITICAL GROWTH.] -The characters are not led to think that black is white, but that both are grey. It could be taken as them going to the wrong conclusions, or it can be taken as them finding the truth. In one critical event, they can be lead to make a major choice based on how they percive the world.

-Were we sheep, watched by a shepherd? Sheep that grew into great beasts and killed the sheaperd? No, the sheaperd was never there. But we two have overcome and killed him anyway. -In Africa, genocides and such are committed by people who are dedicated to what they believe in. Nearly every person believes they are good, and inflexibility prevents them from improving. -Readers might relate to her struggle to break free from her constraints, and may sympathize when she does.

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