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ENG 121/Spring 2008 Advanced Revision Worksheet You may handwrite your answers on this sheet or download the worksheet from the class Website and type your answers. 1. If you haven’t already, complete a Revision Plan Worksheet for the draft. Number the draft you are working with depending on where you ended with the Revision Plan Worksheet. 2. Think about the feedback you’ve received to the most recent draft from readers and think about what you want this essay to be or do. What main point do you want readers to hear? This should be written in a complete sentence, such as “We need to take global warming seriously.” Who do you hope will read this essay? Be specific here about naming a group of people, such as mothers of pre-schoolers or former high school athletes. What do you know about this group of readers? The tone of this essay should be This essay should convey the insight This essay will convey the insight by This essay should connect with readers by This essay should convey passion or humor by 3. Revise. Number your revision. 4. Now consider what readers can tell you about your revised draft and come up with at least two questions for them. Remember that your questions should be open-ended and questions that you sincerely want the answers to. 5. Workshop your draft with the whole class, your group, a Writing Center tutor, Liz, and/or another qualified reader1. 1 A qualified reader can be your response group in class, me, a Writing Center tutor, or another intelligent, adult who is familiar with the type of substantive response you need. ENG 121/Spring 2008 6. Revise again. Number your revision. Repeat steps 3-7 until the draft has a clear thesis statement, main idea, or intended effect. 7. What is the thesis statement or main idea or intended effect? 8. Who is the ideal reader for this draft? What does the draft do to appeal to this specific reader or group of readers? If the answer is “nothing,” how could the draft be revised to appeal to this specific reader or group of readers? 9. Ask a qualified reader to write a content/descriptive and function outline of the draft. (Attach the outline, clearly labeled, to this worksheet.) What does the outline tell you about your draft? Remember, the outline is a tool that you must use—unless you use it, it can’t tell you anything. 10. Now, make an abstract out of the content outline. (Attach the abstract, clearly labeled, to this worksheet.) What does the abstract tell you about the draft? 11. Revise again to appeal to your idea reader and to take into account whatever the outline and abstract told you. Write a title and introduction that say “Read me! Read me!” and a conclusion that will leave an impression on the reader. Number your revision. 12. How does the introduction of the draft indicate the topic and purpose and say “Read me! Read me!”? 13. How does the title of the draft indicate the topic and say “Read me! Read me!”? 14. How does the conclusion of the draft make an impression on the reader? 15. How is your unique author’s voice evident? 16. If your unique author’s voice isn’t evident, revise again. Number your revision.