Misplaced_Modifiers by xiangpeng

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									Misplaced Modifiers
   The key is to put even the little words
             in the right places!
What happens when we misplace things?
             •    Misplaced modifiers make the
                  sentence hard to read.
             •    How should we rewrite these
                  jumbled sentences?
             1.   Celebrities just make materialistic
                  things look really good, like
                  clothes for example.
             2.   The lives of my friends and I have
                  majorly been influenced by what
                  goes on in the world today due to
                  the numerous ways of advertising.
             3.   Many youth are so easily guided by
                  advertisements the media and we
                  don’t even realize it.
    How can we connect jumbled thoughts?
•    Which sentence alternate
     makes the most sense?
A.   Celebrities just make
     materialistic things look really
     good, like clothes for example.
B.   For example, celebrities just
     make materialistic things look
     really good, like clothes.
C.   Celebrities just make material
     items look really good, like
     clothes for example.
D.   Celebrities just make material
     items look really good, like
     clothes.
E.   Celebrities make material items
     like clothes look really good.
 How can we connect jumbled thoughts?
•    Which sentence alternate makes the most sense?
A.   The lives of my friends and I have majorly been influenced
     by what goes on in the world today due to the numerous
     ways of advertising.
B.   The lives of my friends and I have been majorly influenced
     by what goes on in the world today due to the numerous
     ways of advertising.
C.   The lives of my friends and I have been influenced very
     much by numerous ways of advertising.
D.   The lives of my friends and I have been majorly influenced
     by the world today with the ways of advertising.
     How can we connect jumbled thoughts?
•     Which sentence alternate makes the most sense?
A.    Many youth are so easily guided by advertisements the
      media and we don’t even realize it.
B.    Many youth are easily misguided by advertisements so
      that they don’t even realize it.
C.    Many youth are so easily guided by advertisements, and
      they don’t even realize it.
D.    Many youth are so easily misguided by advertisements of
      the modern media commercials, and these poor deluded
      suckers don’t even realize it.
    What happens when we misplace things?
•     Misplaced modifiers make the sentence hard to
      read.
•     How should we rewrite these jumbled sentences?
1.    For some students, is it just put as they don’t or can’t
      learn as fast as a regular student.
2.    All the members of my family had to be rushed to the
      hospital except for myself.
3.    Many dropouts are seen as bad children, assuming that
      he or she is committing less than deplorable acts.
 How can we connect jumbled thoughts?
•    Which sentence alternate makes the most sense?
A.   For some students, it is just put as they don’t or can’t learn
     as fast as a regular student.
B.   For many dropouts, the basic problem is that they do not
     learn as fast as regular students do.
C.   For some students, is it just put as they can’t learn as fast
     as a regular student.
D.   For some students who are pressured into dropping out of
     school, it is just put as they don’t or can’t learn as fast as a
     regular student.
     How can we connect jumbled thoughts?
•     Which sentence alternate makes the most sense?
1.    All the members of my family had to be rushed to the
      hospital except for myself.
2.    Except for myself, all the members of my family had to
      be rushed to the hospital.
3.    All the members of my family, except for myself, had to
      be rushed to the hospital.
4.    All the members of my family except for myself had to
      be rushed to the hospital.
    How can we connect jumbled thoughts?
•    Which sentence alternate makes
     the most sense?
A.   Many dropouts are seen as bad
     children, assuming that he or she is
     committing less than deplorable acts.
B.   Many dropouts are seen as bad
     children, assuming that they are
     committing undesirable acts.
C.   Many dropouts are seen as bad
     children, assuming that they is
     committing less than deplorable acts.
D.   Dropouts are seen as bad children
     because many people assume that
     they are committing less than
     desirable acts.
   What are misplaced modifiers?
• Misplaced modifiers are
  words that modify
  something you did not
  intend.
• Because it is a wiggle-word
  that slides around a lot,
  especially watch the use
  of the word “only”.
• Which alternate below
  means that I may have
  eaten, but I did not wash
  the veggies?
__1. I consumed only carrots
__2. I only consumed
  carrots.
__3. Only I consumed
  vegetables.
Here is the well-placed modifier:
             • The marked sentence
               alternate below means that I
               didn’t wash the veggies:
             __1. I consumed only carrots.
                 Meaning: I ate nothing else.
             X_2. I only consumed carrots.
                 Meaning: I did nothing but
                 eat veggies; I did not wash
                 them.
             __3. Only I consumed carrots.
                  Meaning: I am the only one
                  that ate veggies; the
                   others ate something else.
    Do you see the modifier’s meanings?
•   A bright red 2009 Ford Mustang was reported stolen
    by the Dalton police chief yesterday.
    a. student’s meaning
    b. correct sentence
    c. real meaning
__1. The police chief stole a car.
__2. Yesterday, the police chief reported a stolen car.
__3. The police chief reported a stolen car yesterday.
       You see the modifier’s meanings:
•   A bright red 2009 Ford Mustang was reported stolen
    by the Dalton police chief yesterday.
    a. student’s meaning
    b. correct sentence
    c. real meaning
c_1. The police chief stole a car.
b_2. Yesterday, the police chief reported a stolen car.
a_3. The police chief reported a stolen car yesterday.
Do you see the modifier’s meanings?
•   What does this poorly
    written sentence
    mean?
•   Mark had driven over
    with his spouse, Clara,
    from their house in a
    Honda Civic for the
    church picnic in the
    park.
__1. Mark and Clara live in a
    car.
__2. Mark and Clara drove
    in their car to the
    picnic.
__3. Mark and Clara live in a
    park, but drove their
    car to visit a home.
    You see the modifier’s meanings:
•   What does this            •   Is there a misplaced
    poorly written                modifier or is the
    sentence mean?                sentence correct?
•   Mark had driven over      __ 1. When jumping the fence,
    with his spouse, Clara,       the rider was thrown by
    from their house in a         his horse.
    Honda Civic for the       __ 2. Without reading the
    church picnic in the          directions, the quiz is
    park.                         hard.
__1. Mark and Clara live in   __ 3. The team with the
    a car.                        highest number of wins
X_2. Mark and Clara drove         will capture the
    in their car to the           championship.
    picnic.                   __ 4. Dangerous and hot,
__3. Mark and Clara live in       Sonya tried the strict
    a park, but drove their       cayenne diet.
    car to visit a home.      __ 5. Doctors in white hospital
                                  coats are well- respected.
    Which modifier is well-placed?
•   Three sentences have       •   To avoid dangling
    misplaced modifiers:           modifiers, make sure
MM 1. When jumping the             that the modifier
    fence, the rider was           refers to something in
    thrown by his horse.           the sentence!
MM 2. Without reading the      •   Which alternate is
    directions, the quiz is
    hard.                          correct?
CR 3. The team with the        __1. Driving 60 mph on
    highest number of wins         Walnut Avenue, along
    will capture the               came a police car.
    championship.              __2. Along came a police car,
MM 4. Dangerous and hot,           driving 60 mph on Walnut
    Sonya tried the strict         Avenue.
    cayenne diet.
CR 5. Doctors in white         __3. Driving 60 mph on
    hospital coats are well-       Walnut Avenue, Sam saw
    respected.                     a police car.
     How we avoid dangling modifiers:
•   To avoid dangling        Which alternate is wrong?
    modifiers, make sure     __1. The thief who was
    that the modifier            gesturing wildly stalked
    refers to something in       his victim.
    the sentence!            __2. Gesturing wildly, the
•   This alternate is            thief stalked his victim.
    correct:                 __3. The thief, who was
__1. Driving 60 mph on           gesturing, stalked his
    Walnut Avenue, along         victim wildly.
    came a police car.       __4. The thief, who was
__2. Along came a police         gesturing, wildly stalked
    car, driving 60 mph on       his victim.
    Walnut Avenue.
X_3. Driving 60 mph on
    Walnut Avenue, Sam
    saw a police car.
    This single modifier is squinting:
•   The word ‘wildly’ modifies
    both gesturing and
    stalked—which makes the
    reader squint!
X_1. The thief who was gesturing
    wildly stalked his victim.
__2. Gesturing wildly, the thief
    stalked his victim.
__3. The thief, who was
    gesturing, stalked his victim
    wildly.
__4. The thief, who was
    gesturing, wildly stalked his
    victim.

								
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