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     More and more students choose to go
abroad to study, while others hold the
view that the costs are too high, and we
can also receive good education without
attending a college in a foreign country…
          Overseas Study             (score 23, full score 25)
    Nowadays aagrowing number of students choose to go abroad to
     Nowadays growing number of students choose to go abroad to
     Nowadays a growing number of students choose to go abroad to
study.
 study.
 study.        Analyzing the composition in
                terms of content,
     First, they think by attending aacollege in aaforeign country they
      First, they think by attending college in foreign country they
     First, they think by attending a college in a foreign country they
can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture
 can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture
 can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture
                         language and structure
and customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of
 and customs of other nations. Second, they can
 and customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of
this opportunity to gain aagood command of language very quickly;
 this opportunity to gain good command of language very quickly;
 this opportunity to gain a good command of language very quickly;
moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture,
 moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture,
 moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture,
which may help to broaden their views.
 which may help to broaden their views.
 which may help to broaden their views.
    Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent.
     Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent.
     Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent.
The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most
 The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most
 The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most
overseas students have to work for aaliving, which can’t allow them
 overseas students have to work for living, which can’t allow them
 overseas students have to work for a living, which can’t allow them
to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very
 to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very
 to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very
lonely.
 lonely.
 lonely.
    Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects
     Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects
     Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects
outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, IIIam in favor of going abroad
 outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, am in favor of going abroad
 outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, am in favor of going abroad
to study.
 to study.
 to study.
       Beautiful structure

  Nowadays …………………………………………….
  First, ……………………………………………………..
not only ……………………………………………....……
but also ………………………………… Second, ………..;
moreover, …………………………………………..
  ……………………………………………… What’s
more, ………………………………
  Through above analysis, we can see that………
Therefore………………………….
                     Overseas study
    Nowadays a growing number of students choose to go abroad to
study.
   First, they think by attending a college in a foreign country they can
gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture and
customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of this
opportunity to gain a good command of language very quickly;
moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture,
which may help to broaden their views.
   Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent.
The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most
overseas students have to work for a living, which can’t allow them to
pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very lonely.
   Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects
outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I am in favor of going abroad to
study.
   When they are asked about the attitude towards go abroad to
study, people have different ideas. A vast majority of students
choose to study abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I think
differently. I think that there is no need for us to go abroad to study.
  There’re several reasons leading to my choice. The costs are too
high for most of our families. As far as we know, though the level of
our lives is increasing, half the population still lives below the
poverty line.
   Another reason is that we can also receive good education
without attending a college in a foreign country. As science and
technology advances, the facilties in schools are becoming modern
and teaching methods are greatly improved.
    It is hardly too much to say that there is no point in going abroad
to study, while in our native country you can also receive good
education.
  When they are asked about the attitude towards go abroad to
study, people have different ideas. A vast majority of students
choose to study abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I think
differently. I think that there is no need for us to go abroad to study.
 There’re several reasons leading to my choice. The costs are too
high for most of our families. As far as we know, though the level of
our lives is increasing, half the population still lives below the
poverty line.
   Another reason is that we can also receive good education without
attending a college in a foreign country. As science and technology
advances, the facilties in schools are becoming modern and teaching
methods are greatly improved.
  It is hardly too much to say that there is no point in going abroad
to study, while in our native country you can also receive good
education.
    revising
   When they are asked about the attitude towards
             asked about
 go abroad to study, people have different ideas.
going               different people
 A vast majority of students choose to study
 abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I
 think differently. I think that there is no need for
                 am of the opinion
 us to go abroad to study.
     revising
     There’re several reasons leading to my
  choice. The costs are too high for most of our
      To begin with, the costs
  families. As far as we know, though the level of
  our lives is increasing, half the population still
our living standards are
  lives below the poverty line.
   revising
Another reason is that we can also receive good
education without attending a college in a
foreign country. As science and technology
advances, the facilties in schools are becoming
advance       facilities
modern and teaching methods are greatly
improved.
    revising
     It is hardly too much to say that there is no
For all these reasons, it
  point in going abroad to study, while in our
  native country you can also receive good
  education.
       When asked about the attitude towards going abroad to study,
different people have different ideas. A vast majority of students
choose to study abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I think
differently. I am of the opinion that there is no need for us to go
abroad to study.
     There’re several reasons leading to my choice. To begin with, the
costs are too high for most of our families. As far as we know, though
our living standards are on the rise, half the population still lives
below the poverty line. Another reason is that we can also receive
good education without attending a college in a foreign country. As
science and technology advance, the facilities in schools are becoming
modern and teaching methods are greatly improved.
     For all these reasons, it is hardly too much to say that there is no
point in going abroad to study, while in our native country you can
also receive good education.
      Most commonly occurring errors
      1. Grammatical errors
  When they are asked about the attitude towards
go(going) abroad to study, people have different ideas.

     2. Chinglish
 The level of our lives is(Our living standards are )
 increasing
      3. Spelling errors
  Facilties(Facilities)
    Writing beautiful sentences
1.using some expressions and idioms to
  make vivid what you intend to say.
  Eg.
    It is raining heavily.
           It is raining cats and dogs.
2.Using repetition to create a sense of unity
   Eg.
    Writing beautiful sentences
3.Using transitions wisely to structure your
  ideas or emphasize one of your points.
 To show addition -- additionally, also, and,
   furthermore, moreover, equally important, etc.

 To conclude or repeat -- finally, in conclusion, on the
   whole, in the end, etc
   Writing beautiful sentences
4.Using main and subordinate
  clauses,participle to make your language ring
  Eg.
 He lay on the grass and counted the stars in the sky.
     He lay on the grass, counting the stars in the sky.
     These days, we often hear that more and more students choose
to go abroad to study. And quite a few people object that with some
reasons. But is this really the case?
    I do not think that this view can be true. The reasons are chiefly
as follows. Once students go abroad to some worldwide famous
college to study, they have more chances to get touch with some
advanced technology and theories, which are not avilable in our
country. Besides, what benefits students go abroad most does not
only consist in what they have learned on campus, but also consist
in the horizon broadened once one has got in foreign society and
customs that can’t be offered in our country.
    Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of
having gone abroad to study can expand their scope of knowledge
and raise one’s value.                      (by Ji Chao, Class 4)
     These days, we often hear that more and more students choose
to go abroad to study. And quite a few people object that with some
reasons. But is this really the case?
    I do not think that this view can be true. The reasons are chiefly
as follows. Once students go abroad to some worldwide famous
college to study, they have more chances to get touch with some
advanced technology and theories, which are not avilable in our
country. Besides, what benefits students go abroad most does not
only consist in what they have learned on campus, but also consist
in the horizon broadened once one has got in foreign society and
customs that can’t be offered in our country.
    Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of
having gone abroad to study can expand their scope of knowledge
and raise one’s value.
 revising
     These days, we often hear that more
and more students choose to go abroad to
study. And quite a few people object to
that with some reasons. But is this really
the case?
     For my part, I do not think that this view can
hold water. The reasons are chiefly as follows. For
one thing, once students go abroad to some
worldwide famous colleges to study, they have more
chances to get in touch with some advanced
technology and theories, which are not available in
our country. For another, what benefits students
going abroad most does not only consist in what
they have learned on campus, but also consist in the
horizon broadened once one has got further in
foreign society and customs that can’t be offered in
our country.
 revising
   Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is
one’s experiences of having gone abroad
to study can expand one’s scope of
knowledge and raise one’s value.
    These days, we often hear that more and more students choose to
go abroad to study. And quite a few people object to that with some
reasons. But is this really the case?
For my part, I do not think that this view can hold water. The reasons
are chiefly as follows. For one thing, once students go abroad to
some worldwide famous colleges to study, they have more chances
to get in touch with some advanced technology and theories, which
are not available in our country. For another, what benefits students
going abroad most does not only consist in what they have learned on
campus, but also consist in the horizon broadened once one has got
further in foreign society and customs that can’t be offered in our
country.
Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of having
gone abroad to study can expand one’s scope of knowledge and raise
one’s value.
 How to write a good composition

  1.write correctly
  Grammatical errors , Chinglish , Spelling
errors
   2.write beautifully
     Use some expressions, idioms, repetition,
 transitions, main and subordinate clauses, and
 participle to make your language effective and
 beautiful
   Homework



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