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					Frequently Made Errors

        1/7/2003
                    Syntax
n   For some old-school hip-hoppers, like
    Adissa, one of the most famous hip-hop
    columnists, he claims, “Hip Hop is a soulful
    expression from their[whose?] hearts.” And
    the meaning of “expression” here is “black
    pain, black struggle”, which means that
    races haven’t been extremely discriminated
    or abused may hardly equip with the
    essential soul for Hip Hop.
                 Syntax (rev)
n   Adissa, an old-school hip-hopper as well as
    one of the most famous hip-hop columnists,
    claims that “[h]ip Hop is a soulful
    expression from their[African?] hearts”; it is
    an expression of “black pain, black
    struggle,” which the races without the
    history or experience of discrimination
    cannot possibly make.
                        Syntax
n   (there was . . . ) And it’s not hard to find a clue if
    we look at the backstage of Hip Hop: back to
    1980’s, there was an African-American trio called
    “Fat Boys”, who made a breakthrough in terms of
    corporate support and national exposure for Hip
    Hop by winning major commercial endorsement
    and a chance to appear in a national television
    spot. The members of this group were three
    unimpressive overweight Brooklyn boys, what
    surprising was its manager, a white businessman,
    Charles Stettler, who successfully turned those
    commoners into hip-hop stars.
                 Syntax (rev.)
n   And it’s not hard to find a clue if we look at the
    backstage of Hip Hop: back in 1980’s, an African-
    American trio called “Fat Boys” made a
    breakthrough in terms of corporate support and
    national exposure for Hip Hop by winning major
    commercial endorsement and a chance to appear
    in a national television spot. The members of this
    group were three unimpressive overweight
    Brooklyn boys; it was its manager, a white
    businessman, Charles Stettler, that successfully
    turned those commoners into hip-hop stars.
        Syntax (use of verbs)
n Is capturing and killing stray dogs can really
  solve all the problems?
n . . . those irresponsible owners, who are the
  ones make them become poor stray dogs
  wandering on the streets.
              Syntax (rev.)
n Can capturing and killing stray dogs really
  solve all the problems?
n . . . those irresponsible owners, who are the
  ones to have made them become poor stray
  dogs wandering on the streets.
        Syntax (and-parallelism)
n   First of all, the residents believe as long as
    the casino is built it can attract a lot of
    tourists and is thus economically profitable.
        Syntax (and-parallelism)
n   First of all, the residents believe that the
    casino is economically profitable because it
    can attract a lot of tourists.
              Syntax (which)
n   For candidates who may really have limited
    campaign budget, there are some other
    promotional methods, which they can work
    on, such as sending out tissue and hats. In
    comparison with paper and flag promotion,
    they are apparently more useful and
    beneficial
          Syntax (which) (rev.)
n   For candidates who may really have limited
    campaign budget, there are some other
    promotional methods, which they can work
    on, such as sending out tissues and hats. In
    comparison with paper and flag promotion,
    they are definitely more useful and thus
    beneficial.
                       Usage
n   We had an emergency meeting and adjusted our
    three-days plan a little.
n   The movies should relate to the two great writers.
n   We try to make up the problem by expelling stray
    dogs or just put them to death.
n   Peng-Hu has suffered economic problems for a
    long time. . . . Therefore they wish to get rid of
    poor living conditions as soon as possible
                 Usage (rev.)
n   We had an emergency meeting and adjusted our
    three-day plan a little.
n   The movies should be related to the two great
    writers.
n   We try to solve the problem by expelling stray
    dogs or just putting them to death.

n   Peng-Hu has suffered from economic problems for
    a long time. . . . Therefore they wish to improve
    their living conditions as soon as possible
               Usage & Tone
n    If the girl decides to have an abortion, she
    must face some physical and psychological
    problems. Therefore, in order to avoid the
    happening of these problems we can see
    that student couples are not really mature
    and old enough to cohabit during the
    studies.
                 Usage (rev.)
n    If the girl decides to have an abortion,
    which has to be illegal, she will very likely
    face some physical or psychological
    problems. Therefore, in order to avoid the
    happening of these problems, it’s better to
    not cohabit when student couples are still in
    college and financially and emotionally not
    stable.
            Tense & Voice
n (Redundancy) It is pity that one day we will
  lose our own culture and even cannot have
  our own self-identity in the future.
n Personally, I would rather follow the old
  rules holding just the English week, because
  it would be easier.
        Tense & Voice (rev.)
n (Redundancy) It would be a pity if one day
  we lose our own cultural identity. in the
  future.
n Personally, I would rather follow the old
  tradition to hold just the English week,
  because it would have been easier.

				
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