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					                                  ASSIGNMENT SHEET
           Jimmy Valentine the Dynamic Character in “A Retrieved Reformation”

Introduction:
    1. Describe the kind of person Jimmy is. Convince your reader that Jimmy is not a
       selfish and self-serving person who only cares about himself.
    2. Explain briefly who Annabel Adam is and how she makes Jimmy a better person.
    3. Thesis: This story proves that love can change people.

Body #1:
   1. TOPIC SENTENCE: The first piece of evidence to illustrate that love changes Jimmy
      is shown when he decides to give away his tools.
   2. SUPPORTING DETAIL: Paraphrase (in your own words) the above scene. You must
      have three 3-5 sentences
   3. SUPPORTING QUOTE: Find a quote (one great sentence) that shows how much
      Jimmy has changed.
   4. COMMENTARY: Explain in your own words why giving away his tools shows how
      much Annabel’s love has changed Jimmy. You must have three (3) sentences.
      It is obvious that…because…
      Furthermore, Jimmy loves Annabel so much that…
      Clearly, Jimmy’s love for Annabel makes him a more…person because…
Body #2:
   1. TOPIC SENTENCE: The best piece of evidence to demonstrate that love changes
      Jimmy is shown when he saves Agatha from the locked vault.
   2. SUPPORTING DETAIL: Paraphrase (in your own words) the above scene. You must
      have three 3-5 sentences
   3. SUPPORTING QUOTE: Find a quote (one great sentence) that shows how much
      Jimmy has changed.
   4. COMMENTARY: Explain in your own words why saving Agatha shows how much
      Annabel’s love has changed Jimmy. You must have three (3) sentences.
      It is obvious that…because…
      Furthermore, Jimmy loves Annabel so much that…
      Clearly, Jimmy’s love for Annabel makes him a more…person because…

Conclusion:
   1. Restate the thesis in a new way.
   2. Why is love such a powerful tool for changing people?
   3. End with a positive thought about why people think love is so important in a
      person’s life.
                  SELF-REVISION for Three-part Essay
Directions: Look for the weak areas in your essay. Revise your essay with a critical eye rather than a nodding
head. Assume you have weak areas! NOW FIND THEM! Write “Y” for yes and “NO” for no or sort of.
Introduction:
        1.     The Intro starts with a description of Jimmy’s character (personality).
        2.     The writer wrote about who Annabel is and how she changed Jimmy.
         3.      Thesis: This story proves that love can change people
Body Paragraph #1:
      1.     TOPIC SENTENCE: The first sentence was copied from the assignment sheet outline.
      2.     SUPPORTING DETAILS: The writer wrote about how and why Jimmy gave away his tools.
      3a.    SUPPORTING QUOTE: There is at least ONE quote from the story to help illustrate or support
             the writer’s main point. (Remember: A QUOTE is where the writer borrows words from the
             story by COPYING the exact words from the book or story.)
      3b.    The writer explains how the quote is important, but DOES NOT write “This quote is important
             because...”
      3c.    The writer used quotation marks correctly, included the page number, and punctuated the quote
             correctly. Check your notes!
      3d. The quote is copied EXACTLY as it appears in the story.
      3e.    The quote is one or two sentences in length.
      3f. The quote is introduced by the writer’s own words to help the reader understand what’s going on.
      4a.    COMMENTARY: The writer used the sentences starters on the outline.
      4b.    The Commentary has at least three sentences.
      4c.    The Commentary explains how giving away his tools shows an important change in Jimmy. (e.g. He
             wants to live an honest life and be deserving of Annabel’s love.)
Body Paragraph #2:
      1.     TOPIC SENTENCE: The first sentence was copied from the assignment sheet outline.
      2.     SUPPORTING DETAILS: The writer wrote about how and why Jimmy saved Agatha.
      3a.    SUPPORTING QUOTE: There is at least ONE quote from the story to help illustrate or support
             the writer’s main point. (Remember: A QUOTE is where the writer borrows words from the
             story by COPYING the exact words from the book or story.)
      3b.    The writer explains how the quote is important, but DOES NOT write “This quote is important
             because...”
      3c.    The writer used quotation marks correctly, included the page number, and punctuated the quote
             correctly. Check your notes!
      3d. The quote is copied EXACTLY as it appears in the story.
      3e.    The quote is one or two sentences in length.
      3f. The quote is introduced by the writer’s own words to help the reader understand what’s going on.
      4a.    COMMENTARY: The writer used the sentences starters on the outline.
      4b.    The Commentary has at least three sentences.
      4c.    The Commentary explains how giving away his tools shows an important change in Jimmy. (e.g. He
             wants to live an honest life and be deserving of Annabel’s love.)
Conclusion:
         1. The writer restated the thesis.
         2.   The writer thoroughly answered the two questions on the outline.
Editing:
         1. All character names are capitalized and spelled correctly. (e.g. Jimmy, Ralph, Annabel, etc)
         2. Commas are used to separate compound sentences.
         3. Paragraphs are indented one inch if handwritten and half an inch if typed.
         4. The essay has four paragraphs.

				
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