1. Writing a persuasive (argumentative) essay requires careful planning and revision. YOU MUST TAKE A
STAND. You can’t ride the fence. Choose one side or the other.
2. The major strength of your essay will be the way you select and present logical
evidence to support your beliefs concerning the controversial position.
3. Your essay should include the following paragraphs
a. Opening/Introduction paragraph- you will need to include the following:
1. State the controversial issue
2. Briefly but succinctly (concisely) state the three points you are going to make
about the issue in your essay
3. State your position on the issue. This sentence will be your last sentence in your
opening paragraph. It will be your THESIS sentence for the essay.
b. Paragraph 2-4 This is where you fully discuss your points. Present specific examples, names,
numbers, facts, cases, any persuasive devices you can logically and clearly use to support your
opinion concerning your first point. It should include:
1. Topic sentence for this paragraph that clearly states the point you have
mentioned. Everything you write in the paragraph needs to adhere to this topic
2. At least 3 specific arguments or persuasive statements to develop the topic
3. Transition words or phrases used between ideas to join the points and make your
4. A sentence to conclude this paragraph.
**REMEMBER** When you write the topic sentence you must use a transitional word or phrase in your topic
sentence to like the two paragraphs (Ex: In addition to providing additional on the job training for a young
person, the military will provide a monthly salary)
c. Concluding paragraph- must do the following
1. Restate the thesis
2. Briefly restates your points
3. Concludes with a strong point—memorable peroration (words, lecture etc), if
REQUIREMENTS FOR YOUR ESSAY:
1. Manuscript form
a. Type in 12 point type
b. Use Times New Roman font
c. Double space
d. Heading must be MLA format
e. No mark outs, additions to final copy-must be as perfect as possible.
2. You must use at least 2 rhetorical devices in the essay.
3. Be sure to use variety in your sentence structure. Write in a solid, informative, persuasive manner
using compound and complex sentences, good vocabulary, proper punctuation, and correct
4. Include your planning chart with your final copy as well as your rough drafts.
5. Final copy is due___________
The Question of Bullies
1. Essential Question: Are Bullies Criminals?
2. Choose a Side:
3. Thesis; check the Parallelism! Remember, your thesis should have an answer to the EQ & your
opinions to be strongly supported____________________________________________________
4. Where can I find examples to support my response?
5. Create a Power Thinking outline to help you organize your thoughts. Remember:
a. P1: main idea, topic or thesis
b. P2: Subtopic of P1 (you should have at least 3 reasons!!!)
c. P3: Subtopic of P2 (You should have at least 2 specific examples for each reason!!!)
d. P4: Subtopic or P3 (You should have at least 1 explanation for each specific example!!!)
e. P1: Main idea, topic or restated thesis
Persuasive Essay Rubric:This is how you will be graded
6 5 4 3 2 1
Focus (per Takes a clear Takes a clear Takes a clear Takes a position Takes a position, Attempts to take
position and position and position and and provides but essay is a position
supports it supports it with supports it with uneven support; underdeveloped. (addresses
consistently with relevant reasons some relevant may lack topic), but
well-chosen and/or examples reasons and/or development in position is very
reasons and/or through much of examples; there parts or be unclear OR
TPP= 30pts examples; may the essay. is some repetitive OR takes a position,
use persuasive development of essay is no more but provides
strategy to the essay. than a well- minimal or no
convey an written support; may
argument. beginning. only paraphrase
Organization Is focused and Is well Is generally Is organized in Is disorganized or Exhibits little or
well organized, organized, but organized, but parts of the unfocused in no apparent
with effective use may lack some has few or no essay; other much of the essay organization.
of transitions. transitions. transitions parts are OR is clear, but
among sections. disjointed and/or too brief.
TPP=6 pts lack transitions.
Sentence Consistently Exhibits some Most sentences Sentence Sentences lack Sentences run-
exhibits variety in variety in are well structure may be formal structure; on and appear
sentence sentence constructed but simple and word choice may incomplete or
Word Choice structure and structure and have similar unvaried; word often be rambling; word
(per word choice. uses good word structure; word choice is mostly inaccurate. choice may be
paragraph) choice; choice lacks accurate. inaccurate in
occasionally, variety or flair. much or the
words may be entire essay.
TPP=30 pts used
Conventions Errors in Errors in More frequent Errors in Errors in Errors in
grammar, grammar, errors in grammar, grammar, grammar,
spelling, and spelling, and grammar, spelling, and spelling, and spelling, and
punctuation are punctuation do spelling, and punctuation punctuation punctuation
few and do not not interfere with punctuation, but sometimes interfere with prevent reader
TPP=6 pts interfere with understanding. they do not interfere with understanding in from fully
understanding. interfere with understanding. much of the understanding
understanding. essay. essay.
MLA format No mistakes in 1mistake in 2 mistakes in 3 mistakes in 4 mistakes in 5+ mistakes in
manuscript form manuscript form manuscript form manuscript form manuscript form manuscript form
Rhetorical 2 devices used 2 devices used, 1 device used 1 device used Devices used are No attempt at
effectively but exhibit some effectively but exhibits trite, tired and using rhetorical
flaw in logic some flaw in ineffective devices.
TPP= 6 pts
Project Planning, Drafts, Plan, Drafts and Plan and drafts Drafts only Plan only turned Peer edits only
Peer edits, one peer edit turned in turned in in turned in
turned in turned in
Total Points Possible: 90
Peer Plan Evaluation
Essential Question Exists?
Clear yes/no question Logical
Relates to thesis Has a position statement (clearly says they are
for or against an idea
Answers the Essential Question
Clearly relate to the thesis/question
Have formal language
Persuasive Essay Peer Edit Checklist# 1:
Does the first sentence introduce the issue?
Are the supporting points stated concisely, flowing logically into the thesis statement?
Is there a thesis statement?
Does the thesis statement have a position?
Is the thesis the last sentence?
After reading the introduction, is it obvious what stance the writer has taken?
Does each paragraph have a topic sentence?
Is it an argument (if it is not, it SHOULD BE)
Does it support the thesis (if it does not, IT SHOULD)
Does it have a logical transition (if it does not, IT SHOULD)
Are the arguments/ topic sentences in the same order as the points listed in the introductions (if they are
not, they should be)
Peer editor, on the paper you should…
1. Number the evidence. You should find at least 3 pieces of evidence in each body paragraph.
2. For each piece of evidence, ask yourself, “Does this fact help prove the argument? If not, put an x on top
of the evidence and make a suggestion for how to improve it
3. If none of the evidence seems to support the argument, suggest a new topic sentence that is more
appropriate for the evidence in the paragraph and that also supports the thesis statement.
4. Scratch out any repeated arguments
5. Circle all the transitions. If there are none, write emergency you need transitions at the top of the page.
Does the conclusion begin with a transition. If not, write in that there needs to be a transitions. Make sure
thy have a comma after the introductory transition word.
Is the thesis statement restated at the beginning? If not, it should be
Is the thesis restatement a slightly different sentence? IF not, it should be.
Are the supporting arguments mentioned in a new, interesting, not-redundant way?
Is the final sentence cliché or obnoxious? If so mark it through
Do they have a final sentence that signals the end of the paper?
Persuasive devices: peer editor should…
Note if there are 2 RHETORICAL DEVICES. HIGHLIGHT AND LABLE THEM ON THE PAGE
Note next to the persuasive device what is being used.
If they need suggestions, make them on the paper
Correct any grammatical mistakes you come across like fragments, run-ons, etc.
Help the writer improve their ethos by making sure the vocabulary is appropriate for the intended audience
Peer edited by:__________________________________________________________________
RESPONDING TO THE ESSAY:
1. Do you agree with the writer? Explain your response in 1-2 sentences. (Remember: respond to the
issue; don’t attack the writer)
2. List at least 3 counterarguments to the arguments presented.
3. Are you persuaded to the writer’s point of view? Explain your response (Remember:
respond to the issue; don’t attack the writer)
4. Is there any logical fallacy in the writing (do you ever feel like you are attacked)? If you said yes,
explain how it made you feel. If you said no, explain why it made you comfortable.
5. Give the writer 2 compliments on their paper and explain why you liked what you did.
6. Ask two questions of the writer. (ex. What made you choose this topic?)
Persuasive Essay Peer Edit Checklist # 2: Grammar & Usage Check
1. Scratch out any of the following words and re-word the sentence.
a lot very really nice there is it is it was
there was things stuff plus even
2. Scratch out any words that seem like slang (something you would hear on the street, in the halls, or on
MTV< BET< CMT< VH1 Or The Simpsons)
Ex. Hang-out bling-bling benjamins cool dude
3. Scratch out any clichés that are in the paper. Clichés are phrases that are overused
Ex. Last but not least sad but true
4. Scratch out any generalizations (stereotypes) or vague statements.
Ex: My dad is like any other dad. I had the normal childhood.
5. Go through your usage notes and check for any of the common mistakes found in papers.
6. Search for the subject and the verb in each sentence (yes, this will take a while.) Scratch any sentence
that does not have a subject AND verb—these are called fragments.
7. Find all the overly long sentences and break them into two sentences or more. If you have to take a
deep breath or a bathroom break in the middle of the sentence, it’s too long. It’s probably a run on.
8. Check for variety in the sentence; if there is anything that is unnecessarily repeated, circle it and write
R over it.
9. Connect sentence that are written on a first grade level.
Ex: I am Suzy. I like school. = I am Suzy, and I like school.
(Leave a few of these if they are for effect).
10. Check all comma usage and semi colon usage against your notes. Make corrections if needed.
Odds and ends
11. Make sure any number under 100 is written as a word. (ex. Ninety-nine)
12. Change “no matter what” to “Regardless”
13. Take out any counting in the essay. (ex. First second, third)
14. Remove these words from the conclusion: “Lastly or Finally”
1. Did you enjoy reading the essay? Explain why or why not.
2. Write three suggestions to the applicant about how to make the essay more interesting/vibrant.
3. Were there any parts of the essay that didn’t stay focused on the main topic? Explain.
4. Does the writer use words well? Circle words that you thought were good choices.
5. Are you persuaded? Why or why not.
Persuasive Essay Peer Edit 3:
Use the rubric on page 2 of this packet to help you determine a grade for this paper.
Focus (per paragraph) ¶ 1 ¶2 ¶3 ¶4 ¶5 total
Sentence Fluency and Word Choice (per paragraph) ¶ 1 ¶2 ¶3 ¶4 ¶5 total
MLA format total
Rhetorical devices total
TPP= 6 pts
Project Organization total
Comments: (you must make at least 2 POSITIVE comments and 1 CONSTRUCTIVE criticism)
Persuasive Essay Self Edit:
Heading in MLA format (Your name, Teacher Name, Period, Date)
Date written correctly (day month year)
Header with last name and page number ONLY in upper right hand corner
12 pt font
Times New Roman
No extra spaces in between paragraphs or after the title
Nothing fancy with the title, just centered.
Plan Peer Edit
Rough Draft 1
Rough Draft Peer Edit 1
Rough Draft 2
Rough Draft Peer Edit 2
PERSUASIVE DEVICES: Explain how you have used each in the boxes below