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Have you ever read the beginning of a story and it grabbed your attention and you just couldn’t put the book down? That is what we need to focus on as writers, an entertaining beginning that grads the reader’s attention. Yesterday we talked about using the writing diamond to help us create quality narrative writing. Today we are going to focus on the first section of the diamond. We are going to learn how to write entertaining beginnings. **(Prompt) Here I have an example of a prompt that a group of third graders were given to write to. READ PROMPT I have a few samples of how some of the children began their writing for this prompt. I need some help to read these (Pull names) This first example is called The Limp Hand Shake Introduction (STUDENT READ) Is there any clue that this story will be about a mermaid? Do you think the bordom of the author will be passed along to the Reader? The next example is called The Never Ending Small Talk Introduction (STUDENT READ) What is the problem in this example? The writer has spent too much time and energy on the beginning Details and they are not relavant to the mermaid story. This example is The Stick To The Facts Introduction (STUDENT READ) What do you think is wrong with this beginning? Don’t tell what the story is about, just tell the story! The reader Picked up the story expecting to be entertained, not told what it about. The last on is The Tell All About Me Introduction (STUDENT READ) In this example the focus seems to be off. What was the focus supposed to be again? I think it is ok to include some of this information in the author’s Profile at the end of the story, but not as part of the story. It doesn’t Follow smoothly. Now that we have talked about some not so good first impressions, let’s discuss how to make a positive, memorable first impression. FLIP THE CHART TO POSTER This poster has a list of strategies to help you create entertaining beginnings. It will be in our room for you to use as a resource, and each of you will receive your own sheet to put in your writing folder. Let’s talk about the first one. ACTION- It is often exciting to use action in the beginning because it reveals what the character is like, and it makes you think “What else might this character do and why?” Here is an example from the story The Whipping Boys… What did this example make you think about the character? DIALOGUE- I have noticed that a few of you are using dialogue in your writing and that is a good idea because dialogue often grabs the readers attention and raises story questions. Here is an example from the story Charoletts Webb… What are some questions you have from reading this example? The reader has to read on to find out for sure! THOUGHTS- Here is an example of how the author used thoughts to pull in the reader. The story is called Something Upstairs… The author used the main character’s thoughts to draw us immediately into the head and heart of the main character. QUESTION- This technique was used in the story the Blue Heron… Again the author introduces a character and raises a question. SOUND EFFECTS- Most stundets enjoy using sound effects because they think they are so fun. Here is what Katherine Paterson wrote in the story Bridge to Terabithia… “Ba-room, ba-room, barroom, baripity, baripity, baripity, baripity-- Good. His dad had the pickup going. He could get up now. What could she have said instead of making the sound effects? She could have said “He heard the noisy truck” Instead she has the reader get inside the main character’s head and listen along. THOUGHTS AND FEELINGS- Sometimes the author draws the reader in through the use of thoughts and feelings. Here is an example from the story The Class Gift… What reader wouldn’t have a connections with ho the characters is feeling? Now, with your help I am going to write an entertaining beginning, then you will write one entertaining beginning with your eye-partner and then one of your own. Let’s read the directions. I am so exctited. I think I want to use the sound effects beginning. WOOSH! Went the wind across my feet as they dangled from the seat. “Oh my goodness there are butterflies in my stomach..” said Chris. “I can’t hold on much longer.” Jesse replied. What do you notice about my writing? I used two different strategies. Sound effects and dialogue. Now I want you to get with your eye-partner and create your first entertaining beginning together. When you are finished you may create your own and then we will pick one to share.
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