1st line Add comma after Brethren
2nd Pgh Change was to were after “the four that”
Change “include” to “included”
Use either periods or parenthesis after the numbers.
1. Change “Lodge dues are” to “The dues of one Lodge are”
Add “When” in front of “He asked about the Lodges dues”
(BTW: I heard this story 4 years ago and think it’s urban legend propagated by Danny C. but, hey I just work
2. Change “submitted” to “paid”
3. Add MWB in front of Shem.
Change the : to “is”
4. Add “of” between “excitement” and “witnessing”
5. Replace “re-institute” with “reinstitute “
Add RWB in front of Dan Lucero
6. Bring this down to the next line
Remove . after “org”
RMMC should be #7.
Change the period after “speakers” to a colon
Our webmaster should be #8
Is the URL listed correctly?
Change “Rite” to “Rites”
Add “For” in front of “The Lodges who have no website”
“Wednesday” should be #9
This is just a mess “During his term as Grand Master, he had numerous resolutions for changes in legislation. He
was noted as a very astute dresser. Today many of those ideas are part of our Constitution and by-laws.”
In this Issue
We don’t really need GM’s Message con’t in the table of contents
Change “Please accept my personal invitation to you and your ladies to join me for the annual Rocky Mountain
Conference in Albuquerque. Our conference will be held on July 15-17, 2010 at the Albuquerque Marriott Pyramid
North.” to “Please accept my personal invitation to you and your ladies to join me for the annual Rocky
Mountain Conference in Albuquerque on July 15-17, 2010 at the Albuquerque Marriott Pyramid North.
Last pgh, last word. “Y”? because I like you.
I think we should trim the hell out of Gary’s msg that covers this. No reason for this much
Rmarking on Ritual
Remove “However, there is not enough available information to explain the program, and there seems to be some
confusion as to where to find answers.”
Change “and it is also” to “which is also”
The cap under Dan’s picture is fuzzy
Ritual Proficiency Program
Change “an incentive” to “incentives”
Under Program, lets add 3,3,1,3,3 respectively after each line.
Is “Hiram legend” supposed to be “Hiramic Legend”?
Change subtitles under “Awards” so they don’t look like discrete sections.
Master Ritualist is for doing it for 10 years, right? We should put that in there.
Joe should have “Brother” in front and maybe “Senior Deacon, Estancia 33” renowned
I think Mother-of-Pearl is hyphenated.
“world known” is weird. Maybe “world-wide”
Add a comma between “workshop” and “he”
Put “Masonry, my brothers, is considered to be under two denominations,
operative and speculative” in quotes since its from the ritual.
“any thing” should be “anything”
Pg1 Spacing of lines is off
NMMasons.org New Look
Add “also” between “but” and “provides”
Use the rewrite I sent
Grand Master’s Edict
Remove “Edict” from under the title that has “Edict” in it
Caption under picture is fuzzy
133rd Grand Lodge Synopsis
Bylaws is spelled this way, no hyphen.
Appointed Junior Grand Deacon
Use the rewrite I sent
Kit Carson Award 2009
Something went wrong with cut and paste. Some one wrote a synopsis (that I did not have to
edit) and spliced it with the thank you from the recipient. Use the thank you that I sent you and
separate it from the new article.
His name is J. Gorton? Is this a typo?
Is Dan Lucero’s e-mail spelled right?
District and Lodges
Do you want that space between numbers and addresses for the guys without cell phones?
Where is the light
2nd pgh after “beliefs” should be a colon instead of a comma
I still have concerns that this article has the same msg Joes did the previous issue. I also note
the last paragraph is different from what I edited. I like the part about the mini-clinic.
Five States Communication 2010
3rd pgh Remove 2nd period after 4:30 p.m.
Is Juggernaut supposed to be misspelled?
Add “by playing this” between “tradition” and “fun” making it one sentence.
Is it supposed to be “crosswork” as opposed to “crossword”?
Across 11 & 13 remove the period
Down 21 remove the period
Down 7 is the only one with a question mark.
I love the graphic.
Remove “lots of fun!”
Actually, just use:
The Fifth Annual Masonic Olympics will be held on Saturday, August 28, 2010. All Masons and their
families are invited. The event is free and food will be provided. There will be trophies for each game
listed below, including the coveted trophy for the Grand Winner presented to the Lodge with the best
overall score accumulated by winning each trophy (5 points for 1st place, 3 points for 2nd place and
1 point for 3rd place.) Trophies will be awarded at the Table Lodge Dinner in the evening.
The preliminary schedule of activities
10:00 a.m. Bowling at Lucky Lanes, owned by Brother Mike Draper
Pool Tournament at Lucky Lanes
Young Guns Skeet Shoot
All of the afternoon activities will be at the Ballut Abyad Shrine
1:00 p.m. Texas Hold'em | Darts | Basketball
1:30 p.m. Bocci | Dominoes (chicken foot/ crow's foot) Horseshoes
2:00 p.m. Cribbage
3:00 p.m. Masonic Jeopardy
7:00 p.m. Dinner and Table Lodge. Ladies are invited. A nominal charge for the “relaxed dress” table lodge
will cover your meal.
We will once again be hosting the Shoe Drive for Homeless Men. Jornado Lodge has already begun
collecting, so the gauntlet has been thrown. Points toward the Grand Winner competition will be
awarded for first, second and third places.
For further information or if you have any questions contact Adam Hathaway 505-553-9081 or Jon Ibarra
Lodge Officer Retreat
Since you have more space, can we use Shem’s flyer. As a GL activity this should stand out.
Fix the caps
Carlson’s Corner and Bonnar articles
Use the rewrites I sent
Also on pg 14, there seems to be overlap on issues on the right.