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         Topic Sentences
Supporting Evidence and Arguments
1. Discuss the political and social consequences of the
   Protestant Reformation in the first half of the 16th

2. Compare and contrast the Lutheran Reformation
   and the Catholic Reformation of the 16th century
   regarding the reform of both religious doctrines
   and religious practices.

3. Discuss the relationship between politics and
   religion by examining the wars of religion. Choose
   TWO specific examples from the following:
   1. Dutch Revolt (against Spain)
   2. French Wars of Religion
   3. Thirty Years War
     Negative Examples - Thesis
• The Protestant Reformation resulted in many social
  and political consequences for the people of Europe.
• The Protestant and Catholic Reformations were alike
  in many ways, but different in others. Both
  Reformations had unique doctrines and practices.
• In the 16th century there were many wars of religion,
  including the Thirty Years Wars and the Dutch revolt
  against Spain.
• Some things that occurred during the Protestant
  Reformation included Luther’s 95 theses, Calvin’s
  “woman’s paradise,” and the sale of indulgences.
      Good Examples - Thesis
• The Protestant Reformation of the 16th c. had
  numerous social and political consequences,
  including better and more structured education,
  more rights for women and a change in
  everyday life, and finally more independent
  rule along with a stronger localized
  government. (Thomas Stephenson)
      Good Examples - Thesis
• In both the French Wars of Religion and the
  Thirty Years War, religion was used to keep
  the individual princes in power in Germany,
  save the king’s throne in France, and help
  liberate Holland, all political goals
  accomplished due to religion. (Alex Bogdon)
       Good Examples - Thesis
• As Protestantism developed new branches and
  denominations away from what they saw as
  the corrupt and controlling Catholic Church,
  Europeans were affected socially and
  politically. The various consequences for the
  European people were alterations in
  ecclesiastical life, advances in education, and a
  changed role of local governments and
  townspeople during the early 1500s. (Erika
       Good Examples - Thesis
• The Lutheran and Catholic Reformations of
  the 16th c. created an opportunity for new
  doctrines, such as the belief in faith alone, and
  new practices, such as bishop laws imposed by
  the Catholic church, to make their way into
  religion. The changes in both Reformations
  were meant to individualize, unify, and attract
  followers to the two churches. (Katheryn
  Stephens – from her conclusion)
Negative Examples – Topic sentences
• First, the Thirty Years War.
• To begin, the Protestant Reformation started in
• The Catholic Reformation started with the
  Council of Trent.
• The French Wars of Religion were an
  important time in history.
  Good Examples - Topic Sentences
• As the belief that all one had to do to obtain salvation
  was to read the Bible grew, so did education’s
• As education underwent a drastic change, so to did
  the rights of women and how people lived in
  everyday life.
• A major consequence of the Protestant Reformation
  and arguably the most significant in social and
  political terms was the increase in power for localized
  government and a very independent ideology.
   – (Thomas Stephenson)
Good examples - Topic Sentences
• During the Protestant Reformation Martin Luther and John
  Calvin, widely acknowledged as leaders of the Protestant
  Reformation, expanded the role of women in society as a
  social consequence of the Reformation. (Anthony Dinh)
• As the political unity of Protestant areas faltered some leaders
  began to attempt a policy of toleration for the good of their
  country. These politiques, such as Elizabeth I of England and
  Henry IV of France, sought to end religious and political
  turmoil caused by the Reformation by allowing Catholics and
  Protestant to live in peace. (Brendan Dufresne)
• German princes had much more power by keeping the Holy
  Roman Empire fractured religiously because it allowed them
  to keep the Empire under the control of the princes instead of
  unifying government with the same religion. (Alex Bogdan)
        Negative examples
 Supporting evidence and arguments
• Many kings and princes opposed the Catholic Church
  at this time through various laws and even wars.
• The Thirty Years War was a war of politics and
  religion. Many different countries were involved,
  some supporting Catholics and some supporting
  Protestants. This shows the relationship of religion and
• King Henry VIII created his own religion, which was
  partially Protestant and partially Catholic. This shows
  that politics was more important to him than faith.
          Strong supporting evidence
                and arguments
• Moreover, the Dutch driving the Spanish out of the Netherlands
  was a political effort more than it seemed to be about conforming
  to religion. To illustrate, the Spanish tried to convert the Dutch to
  Catholicism to widen Philip II’s political realm and centralize
  government. For example, the Spanish set up taxes and structured
  government in the Netherlands while fighting over religion. When
  William of Orange and the Dutch revolted, they were able to do
  this by the Pacification of Ghent. This was a political cooperation
  between northern Protestants and southern Catholics to put aside
  religion and unite against the Spanish. The efforts from these
  politiques showed the relationship between politics and religion.
  In order to have their own religious unity they must unify
  politically to fight in achieving this.
   – Spencer Forgham-Thrift
          Strong supporting evidence
                and arguments
• While women were gaining more rights the monarchs and
  territorial princes gained power over religion. The Catholic
  church was once the main power controlling all of Europe with
  threats of excommunication and exile, but that all changed as
  people stopped following the Pope’s rule. In England, King
  Henry VIII changed the religion of his land from Catholic to
  Anglican because he wanted a divorce from Catherine of Aragon.
  He desired a male heir so that England would not experience
  another civil war, such as the War of the Roses. The king made
  his own religion that looked Catholic, but tasted Protestant. The
  Act of Supremacy made Henry VIII the head of the Church, not
  the Pope. Nobles were bribed to follow this change by being
  given lands in England that had belonged to the Catholic Church.
  Another example of rulers gaining rights over religion is that the
  Peace of Augsburg allowed territorial princes to pick religion for
  their lands. Catholicism was not forced among the people
  anymore because they Holy Roman Emperor, Charles V, had
  other concerns…
 As a group write a thesis and three
          topic sentences
• Analyze the economic, political, and religious
  factors that led to the nearly century long
  conflict between the English crown and the
  Parliament that was resolved with the
  “Glorious Revolution” in 1688.
• FIRST, identify the Time, Topic, and Task
  Individually write a strong thesis
      and three topic sentences
• Compare and contrast France’s Louis XIV and
  Russia’s Peter the Great in terms of their
  political, economic, and social policies as
  absolute rulers.
• FIRST, identify the Time, Topic, and Task
 For homework write a thesis and
three topic sentences and list three
 specific facts to support each t.s.

• Describe the factors that led to the emergence of
  Hohenzollern Prussia and Habsburg Austria as
  the two dominant powers in the Holy Roman
  Empire by the 18th century. Evaluate the relative
  strengths and weaknesses of each.
• FIRST, identify the Time, Topic, and Task

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