Writing by yurtgc548

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     Who am I?
Can you guess it out?
                                          18
     Basic Information
   Beijing
   No.161
   High School                            Boy



Hobby:
playing
                       Who is it   ?    Class 2
                                           Grade 3
basketball and
listening to
music

          Favorite singer              Nickname
          Amei
Attention!
• Key words
  carry the most
  important
  information in
  a sentence!
Put the key words into sentences

• Boy               • Nickname:
• 18                • Favorite singer:
• Beijing No.161      Amei
  High School       • Hobby: playing
• Class 2 Grade 3     basketball
Put the sentences into a paragraph
 •   Li Zhuoxi is a boy.
 •   He is 18 years old.
 •   He studies in No.161 High School
 •   He is in Class 2, Grade 3.
 •   His nickname is
 •   His favorite singer is Amei.
 •   His hobby is playing basketball.
How to put them into a coherent
paragraph?

• Li Zhuoxi is a boy.
• He is 18 years old.
• Li Zhuoxi is a boy and he is 18
  years old.
• Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy.
How to put them into a coherent
paragraph?
 •   Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy.
 •   He studies in No.161 High School
 •   He is in Class 2, Grade 3.
 •   Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy,
     who studies in Class 2 Grade 3,
     No.161 High School.
Improve it!
Checking
• Is there a good topic sentence?
• Is it well organized?
• Are the ideas clear?
• Are there any grammatical structures
  you need to improve?
• Is the spelling correct?
• Are the punctuation and capitalization
  correct?
Possible Version
 • Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy,
   who studies in Class 2 Grade 3,
   No.161 High School. As his best
   friend, I usually call him his
   nickname,.
 • Frankly speaking, he is lazybones,
   for he is always late for
   everything. He hates all the
   subjects, especially English.
Possible Version
 • Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy,
   who studies in Class 2 Grade 3,
   No.161 High School. As his best
   friend, I usually call him his
   nickname,.
 • Frankly speaking, he is lazybones,
   for he is always late for
   everything. He hates all the
   subjects, especially English.
• Although he has no interest in
  study, he is good at singing. In his
  spare time, he likes playing
  basketball and listening to popular
  music. His favorite singer is Amei.
• In spite of all his shortcomings,
  he is a kind-hearted person, a
  person who is always ready to help
  others. I like him as much as he
  likes Amei.
• Although he has no interest in
  study, he is good at singing. In his
  spare time, he likes playing
  basketball and listening to popular
  music. His favorite singer is Amei.
• In spite of all his shortcomings,
  he is a kind-hearted person, a
  person who is always ready to help
  others. I like him as much as he
  likes Amei.
Discussion: writing process
            Organizing
               ideas


Thinking     subject      Writing



             Checking
Writing in use: What a Sunday!
              • From Monday to
                Friday, he studies at
                school, and on
                Saturday he usually
                goes to Xin Dong
                Fang (New Oriental
                School ) to learn
                English.
              • Then what does he
                do on Sunday?
                         2
1
    Now, it’s time for
      homework.




3                        4
Writing
• You write a
  passage about
  his Sunday and
  then give some
  comments on it.
Possible version
• For Li Zhuoxi, Sunday doesn’t mean having a
  rest and doing whatever he likes. On the
  contrary, it is as busy as the other six days.
  Early in the morning his father makes him
  review what he has learned in Xin Dong Fang
  on Saturday. After breakfast, his father
  takes him to an art school, where he learns
  how to draw pictures. In the afternoon, he
  has to practise playing the piano again and
  again until his mother feels satisfied. After
  supper, he has to do his homework until night.
  What a busy Sunday!
• In my opinion, his parents are too
  strict with him, expecting him to
  become famous in the future. But
  it is improper for parents to keep
  their children so busy that they
  don’t have any time of their own.
  (130 words)
Homework
• Improve your
  writing and
  write your final
  draft.
• Write a passage
  about one of
  your classmates.
Thank you for listening!

								
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