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Knowledge & Understanding                               Limited              Some                Considerable        Thorough
    Clear essay structure: introduction, 3 body         organization; as a   organization; as    organization; as    organization; as
    paragraphs, conclusion                              result, it can be    a result, it can    a result, the       a result, the
    introduction begins with general background        difficult or         be difficult in 1   argument is         argument is
     information, summarizes the plot, and ends with    awkward in           or 2 places to      adequately clear    very clear and
     thesis.                                            places to            understand the      in all places.      detailed in all
    each body paragraph has a topic sentence, 3        understand the       argument.                               places.
     supporting sentences, 3 quotes with context, 3     argument.
     explanation sentences, and a concluding sentence
    conclusion begins with thesis, reviews body
     paragraphs, ends broadly with lesson or
     recommendation
Thinking & Inquiry                                      -Limited             -Some               -Adequate           -Thorough
    thesis makes a clear, logical argument about       understanding of     understanding       understanding       understanding
     Theories. Overall, the essay shows a deep          novel and its        of novel and its    of novel and its    of novel.
     understanding of novel and its themes.             themes.              themes.             themes. -Main       -Main
    topic sentences make clear, logical arguments      -Main argument       -Main               arguments are       arguments are
     that support the thesis.                           may be illogical     arguments may       all sufficiently    all very logical,
    all examples and quotations are carefully          or unclear in        be illogical or     logical and         detailed, and
     explained and support the topic sentences.         places.              unclear in 1 or 2   clear. -All         clear. All
    clear, specific examples from novel to support     -Some quotations     places.             quotations are      quotations are
     points                                             may be               -1 or 2             adequately          explained
    Introduction and conclusion connect essay topic    inadequately         quotations may      explained.          deeply and
     and the play‟s themes to the outside world         explained.           be inadequately                         thoroughly.
     smoothly and thoughtfully.                                              explained.
Communication
    signal words (ie. “for example,” “also,” “thus,”   Limited command      Some command        Adequate
     “first”) used to add logical flow between ideas.   of GPS; essay is     of GPS; essay is    command of           Strong
    wording has been varied to make it interesting,    difficult to read    difficult to read   GPS; essay is       command of
     especially with the thesis, topic sentences, and   and understand       and understand      clear in all        GPS; essay is
     concluding sentences. The same words are not       the paragraph in     the paragraph in    places.             very clear and
     used over and over.                                places.              a few places.                           skilfully
    correct grammar, punctuation, and spelling,                                                                     written.
     especially verb tense, comma splices, and run-
     ons.
    academic language used: no contractions
     (can‟t); no 1st or 2nd person used (I, we, you)
Application                                             Limited command      Some command        Adequate            Mastery of
    quotations used properly. No floating              of quotation         of quotation        command of          quotation
     quotations, and quotation marks and other          format.              format.             quotation           format.
     punctuation used correctly; page numbers given.                                             format.
    sufficient background information provided for                                                                  Considerable
     all quotations.                                    Limited effort put   Some effort put     Sufficient effort   effort and care
    planning charts completed thoroughly; rough        into planning and    into planning       put into            put into
     draft has sufficient editing from 2 or more        editing the essay.   and editing the     planning and        planning and
     editors.                                                                essay.              editing the         editing the
                                                                                                 essay.              essay.

          K/U ________              T/I _________                               Overall: Level __________
          C _________               A __________                                                     ________%
ENG 3C0         Theories of Relativity Essay Outline

Checklist (what you will hand in to me)
    quotation chart—completed FIRST
    rough draft(s)—hand-written, with at least 2 editors (who sign the rough draft). You can
       use the paragraph planning sheets as your rough draft, but you will get a better mark if
       you hand in the planning sheets PLUS another rough draft for your editing. AS OFTEN
       AS YOU CAN, GET ME TO READ OVER YOUR ROUGH PARAGRAPHS!!!
    essay good copy (about 3 to 3 ½ pages, typed and double-spaced)
    Works Cited section in the proper format
    essay rubric


Class Time and Deadline
This depends on how well the class is working, but it should take about a week or two to
complete this essay. I will be working on a paragraph a day. If you do not use your time
effectively, you will fall behind, and you are more likely not to complete all of the parts
successfully, especially the rough draft and editing stages. This is an important assignment, so it
counts as two assignments for my mark book.

Plagiarism
Any attempt at plagiarism will be dealt with seriously (i.e. a trip to the office and a call to your
parents, plus having to redo the essay after school.) Please remember that I have a good memory,
and I will recognize if you take an essay that has been handed into me from past 3C classes. I
will be using Turnitin.com for this essay.

Essay Structure          5 paragraphs in total:
I. Introduction (general background facts, summarize plot, THESIS)
II. First Body Paragraph (topic sentence, 2 supporting sentences, 2 quotes, 2 explanation
sentences, signal words, concluding sentence)
III. Second Body Paragraph (same as above)
IV. Third Body Paragraph (same as above)
V. Conclusion (restate THESIS, summarize body paragraphs, end with recommendation)

Topic (choose ONE)
1. How is life on the street so difficult in this novel? What are 3 hardships/difficulties does
Dylan have to endure?
2. How is Dylan able to escape life on the street by the end? What are 3 reasons for (or people
behind) his success?

Works Cited
This section should come at the end of your essay, but I don‟t need a separate page for this.
Please label it Works Cited, and then have the following information for your book. Make sure
you have the correct spacing, periods, colon, comma, and italics:

Author‟s last name, author‟s first name. Novel Title. Publisher City: Publisher Name, Date of
publication.

Here‟s an example:
Jones, Andrew. A Scary Story. New York: Irvine Publishing, 2001.
             Theories of Relativity Quotation Chart                                    Name: _____________
Background Context                          Quotation                                        Explanation (TWO SENTENCES)
-briefly, where did this quote come         -only one or two sentences MAX!!! Copy it        -the most important part of using a
from in the novel? What‟s happening         exactly from the book (same commas,              quotation is to explain it effectively. It is
at this point? If it‟s dialogue, who said   quotation marks, everything). You can use        up to you to explain clearly how this
it? To whom? You just need to               either words from the narrator ( “ ”) or words   particular quotation proves your
remind the reader where this quote          from a character in the novel (“ „ ‟ ”). Make    supporting point in the paragraph.
comes from in the novel so it makes         sure you write down the page number.             -do NOT simply restate the quotation
sense.                                                                                       using your own words. I can read on my
                                                                                             own. Instead, you have to show your logic
                                                                                             and analysis.
                                                                                             -for each quotation, I want to see a
                                                                                             minimum of TWO sentences of
                                                                                             explanation.
Example          Paragraph Topic: Dylan’s mother is completely unfit and selfish.
-Dylan finds out his mom didn‟t give             “It wasn‟t like you were close to them,”    -she cannot perceive the situation from
him a letter from his grandfather years     she says. “You hadn‟t seen them in years.”       Dylan‟s perspective or understand how
ago.                                        (page 130)                                       important his grandparents are to him.
-Also she didn‟t tell him his                                                                -all she can think about is what benefits
grandmother died.                           This is copied exactly how it appears in the     her. Because this letter doesn‟t benefit
                                            book.                                            her, she doesn‟t see how it can benefit
                                                                                             Dylan. She‟s self-centred.
                                                                                             -maybe she kept letter on purpose to keep
                                                                                             Dylan around and looking after his
                                                                                             brothers.
Body Paragraph #1 Difficulty Dylan endures:____________________________________________________
Or                   Reason for Dylan’s success: _________________________________________________
Background Context 1              Quotation 1                            Explanation 1




Background Context 2                        Quotation 2                                      Explanation 2
Body Paragraph #2 Difficulty Dylan endures:____________________________________________________
Or                   Reason for Dylan’s success: _________________________________________________
Background Context 3              Quotation 3                             Explanation 3




Body Paragraph #2 continued

Background Context 4             Quotation 4                           Explanation 4




Body Paragraph #3 Difficulty Dylan endures:____________________________________________________
Or                   Reason for Dylan’s success: _________________________________________________
Background Context 5              Quotation 5                             Explanation 5




Background Context 6             Quotation 6                           Explanation 6
ENG 3C0— Theories of Relativity                     INTRODUCTION

    A. Begin with a GENERAL fact about the topic. Do NOT mention the book or any of the characters.
     For both essay topics, you may want to begin by discussing in general terms how or why people
       end up living on the streets.
     You can get ideas about the general background to the novel in the “Author‟s Note” at the end of
       the novel. However, if you take ideas from here, it should all be in your OWN wording, just like
       how you wrote the animal report. I do NOT want to see any words, phrases, or sentences copied.

______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________

    B. Give another background fact about your topic. This one should expand on the sentence above in
       Part A. You might give an example of what you just explained. Again, you can borrow ideas
       from the “Author‟s Note” as long as you do not copy anything!
     If you are writing about the hardships Dylan endures, you may want to shift the focus of your
       introduction to why living on the streets (in general terms) is difficult for anyone. You should
       give some examples of hardships, some of which Dylan may endure in the book but not
       necessarily. Again, you are talking about people in general, NOT about Dylan.
     If you are writing about how Dylan overcomes his obstacles, you may want to shift the focus of
       your introduction to how people in general may get back on their feet if they are living on the
       street. You could perhaps talk about some of the services available to help street people.

______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________

    C. Give a BRIEF summary of the book you are analyzing. This should be only one or two sentences.
       When you talk about a book, you should give the author‟s name and the title.

Theories of Relativity, by Barbara Haworth-Attard, is about ______________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________


    D. Now you need a SPECIFIC thesis. This is your overall argument in a single sentence. This is the
       most important sentence, and the rest of the essay should work at proving it. A good thesis should
       indicate what the following body paragraphs will argue.
Choose one:
(Topic 1) Some of the major difficulties that Dylan faces on the streets are
______________________, ________________________, and _________________________.
OR (Topic 2) Dylan is able to pull himself off of the streets because of
_______________________, ________________________, and _________________________.
ENG 3C0—Theories of Relativity Essay                              Body Paragraph Example

Original Quotations (how they actually appear in the novel):

#1.     “It wasn‟t like you were close to them,” she says. “You hadn‟t seen them in years.”
                                                         (page 130)

#2. And next thing I know, I‟m on the sidewalk, the door locked behind me, Micha‟s tearful face
pressed to the window. Happy Birthday.                  (page 35)

Topic Sentence: Dylan‟s mother is completely selfish and irresponsible; instead of caring for
Dylan, she separates him from the people he loves.

Supporting Sentence 1: First, she keeps Dylan‟s grandparents out of his life.

        1st Quotation Context: For example, when Dylan goes back to her house one day, he
        finds out that his grandmother died a few years ago and that his grandfather had been
        writing to him.

        1st Quotation: To explain why she has never told her son this information, she says, “ „It
        wasn‟t like you were close to them…You hadn‟t seen them in years‟ ” (130).


        1st Quotation Explanation: This quotation shows that Joan only views the world from
        her own perspective and does not see how her actions affect others. Because it does not
        benefit her directly, she does not care that Dylan‟s grandparents are incredibly important
        to him, and that he would love to hear from them, even with sad news. It may even be
        the case that she kept this information on purpose because she needed Dylan‟s help to
        raise Jordan and Micha before Dan entered her life.

Supporting Sentence 2: Second, she keeps Dylan away from his brothers, even though he loves
them and they need his care.

        2nd Quotation Context: For instance, she kicks Dylan out of the house on his sixteenth
        birthday after she begins dating Dan.

        2nd Quotation: Dylan describes, “And next thing I know, I‟m on the sidewalk, the door
        locked behind me, Micha‟s tearful face pressed to the window. Happy Birthday” (35).

        2nd Quotation Explanation: This quotation demonstrates that Dylan‟s mother cares
        nothing for his feelings or needs. As soon as she does not need Dylan, and as soon as she
        is legally allowed to kick him out of the family, she forces him to leave. Moreover, she is
        ignorant of how her behavior will negatively affect Micha and Jordan, who need their
        older brother‟s love and guidance.

Concluding Sentence: In conclusion, Dylan‟s mother prevents Dylan from furthering a
nurturing relationship with his grandparents, and she tries to keep him from caring for his
younger brothers, all because of her selfishness and laziness.
ENG 3C0      Theories of Relativity Essay    Body Paragraph 1
Topic Sentence: _______________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________


First Supporting Sentence: _______________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation Context 1: _____________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation 1: ____________________________________________________________
      _______________________________________________________________________
      ____________________________________________________________Page _______
      Quotation Explanation 1: _________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________


Second Supporting Sentence: _____________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation Context 2: _____________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation 2: ____________________________________________________________
      _______________________________________________________________________
      ____________________________________________________________Page _______
      Quotation Explanation 2: _________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________




Concluding Sentence:___________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
ENG 3C0      Theories of Relativity Essay    Body Paragraph 2
Topic Sentence: _______________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________


First Supporting Sentence: _______________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation Context 3: _____________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation 3: ____________________________________________________________
      _______________________________________________________________________
      ____________________________________________________________Page _______
      Quotation Explanation 3: _________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________


Second Supporting Sentence: _____________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation Context 4: _____________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation 4: ____________________________________________________________
      _______________________________________________________________________
      ____________________________________________________________Page _______
      Quotation Explanation 4: _________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________




Concluding Sentence:___________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
ENG 3C0      Theories of Relativity Essay    Body Paragraph 3
Topic Sentence: _______________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________


First Supporting Sentence: _______________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation Context 5: _____________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation 5: ____________________________________________________________
      _______________________________________________________________________
      ____________________________________________________________Page _______
      Quotation Explanation 5: _________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________


Second Supporting Sentence: _____________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation Context 6: _____________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      Quotation 6: ____________________________________________________________
      _______________________________________________________________________
      ____________________________________________________________Page _______
      Quotation Explanation 6: _________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________




Concluding Sentence:___________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
      ________________________________________________________________________
ENG 3C0         Theories of Relativity Essay              Conclusion

A good conclusion will both summarize your main ideas AND remind the reader why these were
worth reading. Just like the introduction, a good conclusion should be clear and concise.

Part A. Restate the thesis using different words. DON‟T just copy your thesis from your
introduction

My example: In Theories of Relativity, Dylan is let down by the very people who should have
been protecting him: his mother, government services, and the police.

Your conclusion: _______________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________


Part B. Review your three body paragraphs in a little bit of detail. Try to restate what your
supporting points were for each paragraph. This should only be about three to six sentences.
DON‟T just copy your topic sentences!

My example: First, Dylan’s mother prevents him from seeing both his grandparents and his
brothers because of her self-centred nature. In addition, the social workers from Dylan’s
past and his teachers both fail to recognize how much trouble he and his family are in.
Finally, when he is living on the streets, the police only try to keep him out of their sight
rather than actually assist him.

Your conclusion: _______________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________



Part C. So what? Why is this important? Explain what the reader can learn from this play and
from your essay topic. How can they apply this to their own lives?

Theories of Relativity shows the reader that ___________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
After reading this novel, people should ______________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________________
ENG 3C0         Theories of Relativity Essay            Sample Essay
(Yours should be double-spaced, please! I‟ve highlighted the signal words, but you don‟t
have to.)

         There are many ways that society is supposed to protect children. Parents are
supposed to provide food, clothing, shelter, love, and nurturing. If parents are struggling to
do so, social workers are supposed to step in and either help them to do their job or to take
the children away from a harmful environment. In addition, schools are supposed to provide
children with education and emotional encouragement, and finally police are supposed to
safeguard young people‟s physical safety. Theories of Relativity, by Barbara Haworth-
Attard, is about a young man named Dylan whose abusive mother kicks him out of the house
to a life on the streets. He has never received love, care, or attention while growing up, and
this trend continues as he struggles to survive as a homeless person. Only sixteen years-old,
Dylan is completely let down by society, including his mother, social workers and teachers,
and the police.

         Dylan‟s mother is completely selfish and irresponsible; instead of caring for Dylan,
she separates him from the people he loves. First, she keeps Dylan‟s grandparents out of his
life. For example, when Dylan goes back to her house one day, he finds out that his
grandmother died a few years ago and that his grandfather had been writing to him. To
explain why she has never told her son this information, she says, “ „It wasn‟t like you were
close to them…You hadn‟t seen them in years‟ ” (130). This quotation shows that Joan only
views the world from her own perspective and does not see how her actions affect others.
Because it does not benefit her directly, she does not care that Dylan‟s grandparents are
incredibly important to him, and that he would love to hear from them, even with sad news.
It may even be the case that she kept this information on purpose because she needed Dylan‟s
help to raise Jordan and Micha before Dan entered her life. Second, she keeps Dylan away
from his brothers, even though he loves them and they need his care. For instance, she kicks
Dylan out of the house on his sixteenth birthday after she begins dating Dan. Dylan
describes, “And next thing I know, I‟m on the sidewalk, the door locked behind me, Micha‟s
tearful face pressed to the window. Happy Birthday” (35). This quotation demonstrates
that Dylan‟s mother cares nothing for his feelings or needs. As soon as she does not need
Dylan, and as soon as she is legally allowed to kick him out of the family, she forces him to
leave. Moreover, she is ignorant of how her behavior will negatively affect Micha and
Jordan, who need their older brother‟s love and guidance. In conclusion, Dylan‟s mother
prevents Dylan from furthering a nurturing relationship with his grandparents, and she tries to
keep him from caring for his younger brothers, all because of her selfishness and laziness.

         The government workers in Dylan‟s life, who should step in to take over from his
mother, fail to notice that he needs their help. To begin, even though he was only a young
child at the time, Dylan was able to fool the social workers that his mother was doing a fine
job of raising her three sons. He remembers how was able to deceive Children‟s Services by
cleaning the apartment, taking out his homework, and buying or stealing bread. He
describes, “I was the director of a play called Regular Family” (44). Dylan‟s mother was
very negligent in her duties, of which Children‟s Services was aware by visiting at all. They
should have been much more diligent in finding out what the situation was really like in that
household. It is shameful that they were tricked at all, let alone by a child. Furthermore,
Dylan‟s teachers do little help him when he is living on the streets, despite his obvious need.
For example, when Dylan returns to pick up his belongings from his old school, Mr. Crowe
clearly notices his dirty appearance. Even though Dylan lies to him, he says, “ „There are
people who can help with situations like yours‟ ” (39). Thus, Mr. Crowe is perceptive
enough to tell that Dylan is not actually moving as he claims. While it is a positive action to
tell Dylan there is help available, he does not follow through in any way to help Dylan,
perhaps by calling the police or social services or by contacting Dylan‟s mother. In other
words, even though they are aware that Dylan‟s mother is not doing her duty with her
children, the social workers in Dylan‟s past and his teachers do not follow through with
enough investigation in order to help him.

        The police that Dylan encounters in the novel do not do their proper job, which
should be to protect children. First, even though they know that Dylan is a street kid, all
they want him to do is stay out of sight so that they and the public will not be bothered by
him. For example, one cold night a pair of cops wake up Dylan when they find him sleeping
on vents to keep warm. When Glen intercedes to take Dylan out to breakfast, one copy says,
“ „Get out of here and quit littering the street‟ ”(116). This quotation shows how the police
completely disregard street kids as vagrants and criminals. Dylan is, in reality, an intelligent
and sensitive person who just needs some help to get himself off the streets. This officer, on
the other hand, only sees him as a piece of garbage that is only a nuisance to others. In
addition, the police officers do not safeguard children like Jenna, who is escaping an abusive
home. For instance, a policewoman comes into the youth shelter one night looking for
Jenna because her parents have filed a missing person‟s report. Ainsley does not tell her that
she knows where Jenna is but instead asks, “ „Are there other children in the family?...Are the
parents being investigated?‟ ” She then declares, “ „Something pushed that girl out the door‟
”(157). Therefore, the police are searching for Jenna but not for the right reasons. They
only want to return Jenna to her parents, although they are ignorant of the fact that her dad
has been sexually abusing her. It is up to Ainsley, a former drug addict and street kid, to
realize what is actually going on in Jenna‟s house and try to warn the police. In conclusion,
the police in this novel come across as ignorant and brutish; they do not care that Dylan is
living on the streets, and they have not investigated thoroughly enough in order to keep Jenna
from her family.

         In Theories of Relativity, Dylan is let down by the very people who should have been
protecting him: his mother, government services, and the police. First, Dylan‟s mother
prevents him from seeing both his grandparents and his brothers because of her self-centred
nature. In addition, the social workers from Dylan‟s past and his teachers both fail to
recognize how much trouble he and his family are in. Finally, when he is living on the
streets, the police only try to keep him out of their sight rather than help him. Theories of
Relativity shows the reader that there are many ways children can fall through the cracks of
society. After reading this novel, people should pressure their politicians to make sure that
the government looks for ways that families can hurt children, either by purpose or by
accident, and ensures that all children are protected until they are adults.


Works Cited

(Place your Works Cited entry for the novel here. Use the opening pages of the book to find the
publication information.)

				
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